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no time for bullshit
the day died and no one saw it leave
except the moon and me
we burned its ashes
saying only a few words
about the kind of man he was
it was a rough thing to manage
any kindness towards him
he was a hard man
always riding people
no nonsense was his view on all things
didn't take crap
and if you offered up an excuse
he'd let loose on you
excuses are for losers and cowards
he'd always say
so own up to your failures
and change them
I guess he had a point
so with that I cleared my throat
and began his eulogy
about how much the day
reminded me of my dad
thank you dad for visiting with me
as the day dies
and you stay gone
in the place people go when they're done
it was good to hear your voice
as you know I took the coward's way out today
I didn't know you were watching
or just didn't want to
and no, I don't have any excuses
I love you
Author's Note
I started this write not knowing where it was going
then I realized I was hearing my dad who is passed on....
then I realized I was hearing my dad who is passed on....
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Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 5:19am
Re: Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 5:33am
I feel you I started a poem and realized my dad who has passed on was coming through to me...
I appreciate you reading...
love Crim
I appreciate you reading...
love Crim
Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 5:21am
Wow.. I ah... this is bittersweet sweet Brenda...
Now sure what else to say babes....
Loves you ❤️
Jackie
Now sure what else to say babes....
Loves you ❤️
Jackie
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Re: Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 5:34am
thank you beautiful Jackie for getting me and for the love...
I love you lady...
love Brenda
I love you lady...
love Brenda
Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 5:51am
I get this, Lady Crim. I realize I did not hear their knowledge while I had them and did not know it until I lost them. I would give anything to go back just to hear them again.
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Re: Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 5:55am
thank you my Darkest Lord yeah I was writing this poem about the day and realized I was talking about my dad... he was such a hard ass but I loved him... then I realized or felt he was talking to me...I wish you could hear your parents too my Lord hold onto what they left you my friend...
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 8:40am
Sometime we have such deep things within us that we express we didnt really Know that it exsist.
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Re: Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 8:46am
thank you graciously dearest Shakesperan for your deep insight on this write...
love Crim
love Crim
Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 8:50am
Re: Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 8:50am
Re. no time for bullshit
Anonymous
16th Jul 2018 9:14am
You cut through all the bull shit & punch with a raw honesty Bren. I truly feel this one. x
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Re: Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 9:18am
thank you graciously dearest Rob I was channeling my dad's way of seeing things in this write..
I deeply appreciate the love on this...
love Brenda
I deeply appreciate the love on this...
love Brenda
Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 1:02pm
Re: Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 2:33pm
Re. no time for bullshit
Anonymous
16th Jul 2018 2:27pm
Amongst these great, from whom you have gotten such great replies, I feel that mine is such little thing, but here it is. I know then pain of loss and I too, at times, feel that they are present and that they speak and guide us in moments of hardship. But I can't feel them as I wish I could. And the pain becomes even deeper. I don't know anymore what to think, say or do. I am confused even more. But you, dear poetess, keep you voice strong and clear. You, my friend, are a clear certainty in times like this. May the good spirits guide you always. J.
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Re: Re. no time for bullshit
16th Jul 2018 2:35pm
thank you graciously dearest Juvenalis your voice shines brightly here with your own personal insights... I wish you could hear them clearer my friend...I don't see so clear most of the time that's when I'm grateful to the guiding spirits like my dad...
love & hugs...
Brenda
love & hugs...
Brenda
Re. no time for bullshit
17th Jul 2018 00:30am
Your dad would be honored. Regarding your note: I also start a write not having a clue about where it will take me. I end up in the pits far too often. You, on the other hand, take an idea and run with it, come up with lines that resonate. I envy you, dear Crim. Wish I could wing it like you.
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Re: Re. no time for bullshit
17th Jul 2018 00:33am
thank you dearest Sir Crow for such a loving comment you are a unique beacon here I love your style...
love Crim
love Crim
Re. no time for bullshit
19th Jul 2018 9:49pm
everyone else already said everything...so I will give you a hug
loved the poem dear
Jeff
loved the poem dear
Jeff
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Re: Re. no time for bullshit
20th Jul 2018 3:54am
Re. no time for bullshit
22nd Jul 2018 2:44am
I love this, the raw vulnerability, but the opening stanza, it's syllabic quality complimenting the gravitas of its message, is the sort of marriage that I always ache for in reading.
You honor him here.
Daniel
You honor him here.
Daniel
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Re: Re. no time for bullshit
22nd Jul 2018 2:47am
thank you graciously dearest Daniel
you commenting on this one right now is a bit ironic to the poem I just posted...
it's like getting the same message all over again just when I needed it...
I appreciate you Daniel...
love Brenda
you commenting on this one right now is a bit ironic to the poem I just posted...
it's like getting the same message all over again just when I needed it...
I appreciate you Daniel...
love Brenda