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The Deep Throat
Ah, those tidal waves
Surging, crumbling, rumbling
Along with thunder’s thumbing
Wind’s whining and rain’s roaring
Vibration came from his throw-up
The coughing deep throat
With malignant tumors
Vomiting millions of bombers
Such dampened cold and dark
Such violent shivers and quavers
His shapeless gigantic hand
Grasping and throwing
Wielding and smashing
At the decrepit buildings
Falling, falling, falling….
Collapsing, collapsing, collapsing….
Seemed never ceasing
Until the skies fell as the last ending
The concrete ceilings and walls
Crushing and smashing at will
As relentless as they could
The weigh was too heavy to take
The pain was too intense to shake
Their blood oozed out like streams
Those smashed bodies as sandwiches
I heard the death servants teasing
They had done their ultimate mission
Those rains and tears
Those cries and fears
Their pains and wounds
Their yells and screams
How could…How could….
With a shuddering scene
I should have heard them sing:
Take away my heart
Because the pain’s too hard
Take away my dream
Because the nightmare is extreme
Take away my breath
Because my flesh is underneath
Under the stark raving dark
I saw, I saw, I really saw
The gigantic hand
Threw those hopeless people
Into his, his, his blasted deep throat
Surging, crumbling, rumbling
Along with thunder’s thumbing
Wind’s whining and rain’s roaring
Vibration came from his throw-up
The coughing deep throat
With malignant tumors
Vomiting millions of bombers
Such dampened cold and dark
Such violent shivers and quavers
His shapeless gigantic hand
Grasping and throwing
Wielding and smashing
At the decrepit buildings
Falling, falling, falling….
Collapsing, collapsing, collapsing….
Seemed never ceasing
Until the skies fell as the last ending
The concrete ceilings and walls
Crushing and smashing at will
As relentless as they could
The weigh was too heavy to take
The pain was too intense to shake
Their blood oozed out like streams
Those smashed bodies as sandwiches
I heard the death servants teasing
They had done their ultimate mission
Those rains and tears
Those cries and fears
Their pains and wounds
Their yells and screams
How could…How could….
With a shuddering scene
I should have heard them sing:
Take away my heart
Because the pain’s too hard
Take away my dream
Because the nightmare is extreme
Take away my breath
Because my flesh is underneath
Under the stark raving dark
I saw, I saw, I really saw
The gigantic hand
Threw those hopeless people
Into his, his, his blasted deep throat
Author's Note
This is to remember the 206 earthquake. No tears but sighs. (Artwork by: Goya)
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Re. The Deep Throat
Rose, this one's scary good. It made me think of this painting by Goya https://www.pinterest.com/pin/199002877267201240/?autologin=true
It's hard to understand sometimes why a loving God or gods would let natural disasters and wars happen. Brava!
It's hard to understand sometimes why a loving God or gods would let natural disasters and wars happen. Brava!
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
15th Feb 2018 9:34am
Dear Gahddess, the painting is just horribly frightening and quite matches the scenes of my write. Yea, I don't understand either, especially the family with 5 members together. ...
Thank you for the comfort warm words. It's really nice to read your comment.
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you for the comfort warm words. It's really nice to read your comment.
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
15th Feb 2018 4:10pm
Excellent write.
it makes me think of the earth coming more alive that it already is.
a giant rising from a thousand years sleep.
"Vomiting millions of bombers "- great line
titans shaking every foundation civilization ever laid
feels like cracking skies
that 6th stanza is very real and stands out strong in all the right ways
"Their blood oozed out like streams
Those smashed bodies as sandwiches
I heard the death servants teasing
They had done their ultimate mission"
last words were sinking warships
except warships were families and friends this time.
well penned
it makes me think of the earth coming more alive that it already is.
a giant rising from a thousand years sleep.
"Vomiting millions of bombers "- great line
titans shaking every foundation civilization ever laid
feels like cracking skies
that 6th stanza is very real and stands out strong in all the right ways
"Their blood oozed out like streams
Those smashed bodies as sandwiches
I heard the death servants teasing
They had done their ultimate mission"
last words were sinking warships
except warships were families and friends this time.
well penned
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
15th Feb 2018 6:21pm
Your comment always makes me think more. I don't know how long you have spend on the read and write...Thank you so much for the effort.
It really was a war and those sunken warships were the innocent people....
Really appreciate your feedback Samael my dear friend.
much love
RoseJasmine
It really was a war and those sunken warships were the innocent people....
Really appreciate your feedback Samael my dear friend.
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
15th Feb 2018 5:47pm
❤️ your ability to write about events that move you. I find that so hard sometimes. Bravo my dear poetess
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
15th Feb 2018 6:26pm
Your love moves me every time my dear. No matter what and when I always find you stand by me. Thank you my beautiful friend.
Love you so much<3
RoseJasmine
Love you so much<3
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
15th Feb 2018 6:29pm
I can feel the images still haunting you. We things happen close they are hard not to be affected. Love the descriptive tone and the feeling you put into your write dear
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
15th Feb 2018 7:34pm
Maybe I am too sentimental. I guess this accident will follow me a little longer, but I will stop to write it again and try to forget it...hope someone can help to erase this memory for me...
Thank you so much for the comfort and thought.
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you so much for the comfort and thought.
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
16th Feb 2018 6:44am
this was exciting to read...a dangerous tale...another most excellent tribute to a tragedy...you are very good at translating such and other historical diddies...I look forward to more
love always
Jeff
love always
Jeff
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
16th Feb 2018 7:19am
Oh I write better when something really move me, but I hope no such a tragedy again. I can write more of historical stories for sure.
Thank you dear Jeff. Love reading your comment.
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you dear Jeff. Love reading your comment.
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
17th Feb 2018 4:04am
beautifully constructed poem - real and disturbing - I got caught in an earthquake in Turkey, only a 6.2 but still very scary and disturbing - you capture it beautifully :-))))))
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
19th Feb 2018 5:20pm
Dear David, I think a 6.2 magnitude earthquake is scary enough. Glad you were fine at the time. Thank you for the read and commenting.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
It took me a while to comment because I didn't know how to, this is such a sad and vivid write, and it is so honest in the darkness. You are a brave soul to write this and to be able to feel it so much to bring others there too.
My favorite was this stanza
"Take away my heart
Because the pain’s too hard
Take away my dream
Because the nightmare is extreme
Take away my breath
Because my flesh is underneath "
I love your writing whether it be dark or not it is beautiful and well constructed like david said,. I really appreciate this work.
love marielle
My favorite was this stanza
"Take away my heart
Because the pain’s too hard
Take away my dream
Because the nightmare is extreme
Take away my breath
Because my flesh is underneath "
I love your writing whether it be dark or not it is beautiful and well constructed like david said,. I really appreciate this work.
love marielle
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
Sorry that the scenes i described has stunned you. I wrote it just because I wanted to relieve the pain I have felt from the disaster. Your words make me feel better since my work is still nice to read although it looks frightening.
Thank you so much for the nice feedback. Glad to read your comment!
much love
RoseJasmine
Thank you so much for the nice feedback. Glad to read your comment!
much love
RoseJasmine
Re: Re. The Deep Throat
20th Feb 2018 4:38am
No i was not disturbed nor stunned. I meamt it tok me a while to comment because it was such a great work with much valor ans honesty i wanted to think of what to say. I love the poem, and i appreciate it very much that you shared it
This is a great poem
We need dark and the light in this world and to make sure we all look inside ourselves to see all ends of the human spectrum. Much love and light
marielle
This is a great poem
We need dark and the light in this world and to make sure we all look inside ourselves to see all ends of the human spectrum. Much love and light
marielle
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
20th Feb 2018 4:56am
My dear marielle, what I can say just Thank You. Thank you for having a unique soul to always understand my write and my heart. How lucky I have you as my friend.
Jasmine
Jasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
Anonymous
19th Feb 2018 5:01pm
Beautiful RJ - your soul speaks for itself in this write. So heartfelt <3
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
19th Feb 2018 5:46pm
Beautiful sophie, thank you for listening to my soul's speaking. I always appreciate having your words to my work <3
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
Anonymous
20th Feb 2018 2:58am
Holy Purple! Rose this was chilling to the bone.......brilliantly haunting........wow......lost for words thinking about the visual your words brought to me as I read thru........outstanding!!!! Purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
20th Feb 2018 5:06am
It's haunting indeed. It's a terrible disaster like what you felt from my write. Thank you for reading and commenting. Much much appreciated!
luv & hugs xo :)
RoseJasmine
luv & hugs xo :)
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
22nd Feb 2018 2:40am
This is disturbing to contemplate, so well written. It carries a lot of feeling, visceral darkness, foreboding metaphors.
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
22nd Feb 2018 4:14pm
Dear Daniel, nice to have your read again. This is disturbing indeed. Maybe I tend to see the dark side and give it exaggerated imagination. Hope I am not too pessimistic. Anyway, thank you so much for reading and commenting.
much love
RoseJasmine
much love
RoseJasmine
Re. The Deep Throat
24th Feb 2018 6:50am
u r going up the hill
and what a pleasure
after partial read
to cherish all the comments
my eyes tire after reading 14 lines
o poet upcoming
Taiwane
and what a pleasure
after partial read
to cherish all the comments
my eyes tire after reading 14 lines
o poet upcoming
Taiwane
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Re: Re. The Deep Throat
24th Feb 2018 8:01am
What do you mean, "my eyes tire after reading 14 lines "?
Dear Again, thank you for reading and commenting.
much love
RoseJasmine
Dear Again, thank you for reading and commenting.
much love
RoseJasmine
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24th Feb 2018 4:33pm
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Re. The Deep Throat
8th Mar 2018 9:39am
hello rose, i can understand why many people love your work .. :-)
this is one amazing poem . you have managed to capture the force and power of that volcano, very well ! the gigantic hand and his deep throat, wow... you truly have a very good way with words, and this made me sad for all those people who have to suffer under such a powerful and violent earthquake. the gigantic hand ... interesting how you used this expression , it sounds like some sort of horrible monster/ a nasty vile uncaring person who will hurt anybody in their wake x
this is one amazing poem . you have managed to capture the force and power of that volcano, very well ! the gigantic hand and his deep throat, wow... you truly have a very good way with words, and this made me sad for all those people who have to suffer under such a powerful and violent earthquake. the gigantic hand ... interesting how you used this expression , it sounds like some sort of horrible monster/ a nasty vile uncaring person who will hurt anybody in their wake x
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8th Mar 2018 9:40am
Re: Re. The Deep Throat
8th Mar 2018 9:51am
Dear Daffodil, there is no problem for the use of "volcano" :) Actually they are very similar.
I wrote like that because the disaster caused me a lot of pain. Thank you so much the nice feedback. Love your works too.
love
RoseJasmine
I wrote like that because the disaster caused me a lot of pain. Thank you so much the nice feedback. Love your works too.
love
RoseJasmine