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broken promsies
my roses withered
& died
they once thrived on your touch
when you went went away
i pressed them in my heart's diary
they first bloom
when our love was strong
smiling upon us
in our innocent lust
then came the grey
& the sun of your countenance
clouded over
you shied from my touch
grew weary of our secret garden
the one we planted in hope
but hope fades
& becomes cynical
cynical of a heart that can't be true
our roses always showed their real colors
sadly i failed to do the same
my hands stained them black
i tainted our garden of trust
watering it with deceit
love's petals all fell away
you collected them in your hands
dropping them one by one to the ground
saying she loves me
she loves me not
with a broken heart i profess my love
but our last rose died
& there is nothing left
except pressed memories
of what once was
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Re. broken promsies
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 2:39pm
Ahh, this poem makes my heart weep, lovely Raven. Perhaps the roses will return with the proper care and attention. I've seen some pretty dead looking plants revived and lush again.
...Willow
...Willow
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Re: Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 3:41pm
thank you beautiful Willow I hope our garden will be beautiful again.. I appreciate the love deeply..
love Raven
love Raven
Re. broken promsies
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 2:48pm
So poignant dearest Raven.
May your roses soon bloom once more <3
May your roses soon bloom once more <3
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Re: Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 3:43pm
thank you beautiful Sophie if they're properly tended roses will always return I hadn't thought of that when I wrote this.. your thoughts are cherished..
love Raven
love Raven
Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 3:52pm
I once wrote a poem about broken promises. It's not as beautifully articulated as this piece but it helped me sleep that night.
If this piece helped you close out some thoughts and to deal with whatever was pressing on you, then more power to you.
A fantastic write, Dear Raven. Here's to many more. Cheers.
~ T
If this piece helped you close out some thoughts and to deal with whatever was pressing on you, then more power to you.
A fantastic write, Dear Raven. Here's to many more. Cheers.
~ T
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Re: Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 3:54pm
thank you graciously dearest Tryston i'm sure your's was from the soul & heart which makes it beautiful.. this write helped some to relieve my ache.. I deeply appreciate your visit..
love Raven
love Raven
Re: Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 7:50pm
Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 6:20pm
who am i bludgeoning to death with a frozen leg of lamb for hurting you?
just point me to 'em, babe.
this is such an aching write, it writhes & twists & burrows...
ouch
xoxox
just point me to 'em, babe.
this is such an aching write, it writhes & twists & burrows...
ouch
xoxox
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Re: Re. broken promsies
giggles thank you beautiful one
for the offer but i'm afraid
i'm the one in need of a paddling
for misbehavior..
my husband is patient & kind
but he's growing weary
that inspired this write..
love you beautiful..
love Brenda
for the offer but i'm afraid
i'm the one in need of a paddling
for misbehavior..
my husband is patient & kind
but he's growing weary
that inspired this write..
love you beautiful..
love Brenda
Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 6:27pm
Wonderful use of the rose as a metaphor for love. A resilient flower and it will surely bloom beautifully again.
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Re: Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 6:44pm
thank you graciously dearest Tim I surely hope so
if tended properly she will indeed..
love Raven
if tended properly she will indeed..
love Raven
Re. broken promsies
Anonymous
9th Feb 2018 7:14pm
I'm familiar with broken promises...I've told and been victim if them....
But after all promises were meant to keep
Great write here Raven
But after all promises were meant to keep
Great write here Raven
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Re: Re. broken promsies
9th Feb 2018 7:21pm
thank you dearest Gypsy yes promises should always be kept sometimes life throws us curves that has us breaking them regretfully.. I deeply appreciate your thoughts..
love Raven
love Raven
Re. broken promsies
10th Feb 2018 2:47am
It's a haunting valentines tale, a dark twist on the usual roses gift .. the realities of love so presented in their delicate frailty.. nicely written
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Re: Re. broken promsies
10th Feb 2018 3:05am
thank you beautiful poetess for the read & comment yes love is a fragile thing & can be easily broken if handled carelessly..
love Raven
love Raven
Re. broken promsies
Anonymous
18th Feb 2018 7:20pm
oh to the gods woman!
i cant even describe such feelings right now
💖
i cant even describe such feelings right now
💖
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Re. broken promsies
23rd Feb 2018 8:01am
such a tragedy , so, so sad sweet raven - sending you highlander vibes to stand beside you :-))))))
Hugest of Hugs my friend :-))))))
Hugest of Hugs my friend :-))))))
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