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asylum
into the outside
with both feet firmly on the ground
I slip inside the madness
& take a look around
there I see my footprints
trekking through the pit
the same ghosts still haunt the place
they're right where I left them
they say
"how you doing lady?
long time no see
stop & spend some time here”
I say
"no, i'm just passing through"
"I came to collect
pieces of my soul
left in the dark all those years ago"
still strapped to a bed
I find my pride
left there to rot
where I pleaded with the gods
to let me up
or just let me die
inside those padded walls
the addict & pride threw blows
pride got beat down
by the pain
the addict manipulated
talked its way free
my pride is coming forth
from the darkest of spaces
in a rage
is now loose & dangerous
it will fight the good fight
for my freedom
or go down fucking swinging
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Re. mental asylum
6th Feb 2018 4:41am
The thought of being sent through the asylum...
and this looks so horrible..
you've written so descriptively how it's be.
a scary movie directed through words!!!
Now only if I had a bag of popcorn... hmm
<3<33
H
and this looks so horrible..
you've written so descriptively how it's be.
a scary movie directed through words!!!
Now only if I had a bag of popcorn... hmm
<3<33
H
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Re: Re. mental asylum
6th Feb 2018 4:50am
thank you graciously beautiful Hanuel
being strapped down & locked in the psych ward
was terrifying indeed..
love Crim
being strapped down & locked in the psych ward
was terrifying indeed..
love Crim
Re. asylum
Anonymous
6th Feb 2018 2:41pm
Fantastic work here Crim!! Chilling descriptions in a way only you can convey!! Loved it!!
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Re: Re. asylum
6th Feb 2018 2:53pm
thank you graciously dearest Ken.. I deeply appreciate your thoughts & visits..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. asylum
Anonymous
6th Feb 2018 3:21pm
One of the things I have always loved about your writing, beautiful Dark Angel, is that you never shy away from sharing your truth as painfully and raggedly as it was felt. You bring us to where you were with your incredible word choices and leave us stunned and silent in their wake. I've said it before, and I'll say it again. You are a bad ass, beautiful. I do so love you
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. asylum
6th Feb 2018 3:30pm
thank you graciously beautiful Willow you don't know how much you touched my heart with your love.. I've found when I write denying my muse voice no matter the subject angers her so I try not too even when what I write makes me flinch..
I love you lady..
love Brenda
I love you lady..
love Brenda
Re. asylum
Anonymous
6th Feb 2018 8:38pm
This was dark... I love the message given here..never.give up...we all have that power...I'm so glad you're free from that shadows that held you down
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Re: Re. asylum
7th Feb 2018 00:01am
thank you graciously beautiful Gypsy I deeply appreciate your thoughts & visits..
love Crim
love Crim
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Anonymous
6th Feb 2018 10:30pm
Raw as ever Crim. Even though it’s painful to read of your darker days I can’t help but love them (in a good way lol).
Beautiful.
Beautiful.
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Re: Re. asylum
7th Feb 2018 00:03am
thank you graciously beautiful Sophie yeah was some hard days but it makes great writing material if rightly inspired.. I cherish thoughts & visits dear one..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. asylum
Anonymous
7th Feb 2018 00:06am
My love, always swinging you are with no doubt...refusing to allow anything to beat you down...each time you are confronted with an obstacle you stand taller and beat it down...a wonderful friend tobhave beside always teaching me never to give up...thank you...
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
I love you passionately
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Taryn
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Re: Re. asylum
7th Feb 2018 00:08am
thank you graciously my love sometimes I think my poems are being channeled by the gods to encourage me i'm more the happier if they do so for someone else..
I love you tenderly..
love Brenda
I love you tenderly..
love Brenda
Re. asylum
8th Feb 2018 3:39am
The title drew me in, it was a wild read from there, it reminds me of one of those funhouses with the flashing lights and you come out staggering, except you came out swinging, very Machiavellian twist..
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Re: Re. asylum
9th Feb 2018 3:08am
Re. asylum
9th Feb 2018 10:14am
What a fabulous write, Brenda, and you were just there to collect. I felt strapped down beside you, yet undefeated. Your final resolve should be a lesson to us all. Sic
Much love....David
Much love....David
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Re: Re. asylum
9th Feb 2018 10:18am
thank you graciously dearest David that was a harrowing experience I retrieved my pride that was left there & shut the door on the madness I will fight ever going back..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. asylum
23rd Feb 2018 9:10am
dear sweet Brenda, fight with your last breath baseball bat in hand - keep swinging :-))))))
Huge massive hugs :-))))))
Huge massive hugs :-))))))
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Re: Re. asylum
1st Mar 2018 1:39pm
thank you David indeed I will with people like you behind me with your warrior soul how can I fail?
love & hugs..
Brenda
love & hugs..
Brenda
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1st Mar 2018 2:56pm
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Re. asylum
27th Feb 2018 5:39am
You hit me straight in the heart with this one! I can so relate to this Brenda! Awesome write!
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Re: Re. asylum
1st Mar 2018 1:40pm
aw thank you dearest Xmar you know I was having such a down time when I started seeing your comments you really reached in and brightened the darkness..
love Brenda
love Brenda