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Fade To Black
come inside me
take this soul journey
kaleidoscope misery
casts a myriad of shadows
you're sure to enjoy it
taste the darkness
it's on tap
you'll get drunk
& fall face down
into my pit of pain
masochistic by nature
i chain myself to the wall
where you're invited
to piss on my burning sin
there's a pyre of flesh
scorched
by words of hate
for you to behold
after the turmoil ride
where all
my skeletons hide
you're welcome to relax
on the sea of sorrow
it's beautiful this time of year
sail my tears
around cape depression
& see the sparrows of despair
nicotine valley
has some of the most
hypnotic poppies
but beware
rigs of the past
litter the ground
you don't want to get poked
& don't feed the zombie junkie
i once was
it sleeps most days
but awakens
around the holidays
its veins scream
for just one more fix
then after you've seen the sights
your presence
is cordially summoned
to the ball of afterlife
where everything fades to black
my story never ending
an old soul
who's been here before
will die to live again
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
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Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 9:31am
This time of year is hard for me as well. Memories take their toll and are relived through the pain of today. You've painted another vivid picture in this.
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18th Dec 2017 10:03am
Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 12:01pm
Fade to black is a hard to for me to and this time of year always makes me reminisce on my demons more than normal,
As always love your work crimsin 😊
As always love your work crimsin 😊
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 12:39pm
thank you dearest Epic One
I wish you peace from your own demons
this time of year..
my heart is moved by your comment..
love Crim
I wish you peace from your own demons
this time of year..
my heart is moved by your comment..
love Crim
Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 12:43pm
Most welcome yes this time of year is a hard one for a lot of people like you and me and so many in here we hide our demons well well sometimes lol aww thank you
Mad respect for you 😊
Mad respect for you 😊
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 12:50pm
aw thank you Epic One
you're wonderful..
so happy if nothing else
this write let's people know
they are not alone in this struggle..
you're a beautiful soul :)
love Crim
you're wonderful..
so happy if nothing else
this write let's people know
they are not alone in this struggle..
you're a beautiful soul :)
love Crim
Re. Fade To Black
Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 2:21pm
The holidays are not the time of cheer media would have you believe for a very large number of people. It's a time when many of us struggle, despite what we have or don't have. I'm glad you turned your glow to expose this truth so beautifully. For me, it's a time to reach out to others. We all need a warm embrace from time to time...and never more than during this time of year. Sending you such warm, tight hugs, my beautiful Dark Angel. And so very much love
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 5:08pm
thank you beautiful Willow
yes many get deeply depressed
this time of year..
it's my hopes that sharing
this will let other's know
they are not alone..
I cherish you thoughts..
warm hugs returned..
I love you..
Brenda
yes many get deeply depressed
this time of year..
it's my hopes that sharing
this will let other's know
they are not alone..
I cherish you thoughts..
warm hugs returned..
I love you..
Brenda
Re. Fade To Black
I hate that the holidays have adverse effects as well as joyous feelings for you and many others here as well, and wish you and them more peaceful reflections as you journey forward.
Your metaphors rein and the progression of the poem is right on line.
An enjoyed read for the skill of the poetess' ability to convey the content.
Well worth the time spent here Brenda, Thank You.
Your metaphors rein and the progression of the poem is right on line.
An enjoyed read for the skill of the poetess' ability to convey the content.
Well worth the time spent here Brenda, Thank You.
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 5:11pm
thank you beautiful Teri
for the heads up..
I deeply appreciate your thoughts
& gracious comment..
yes it's my hopes that others
will read this
with knowledge they aren't alone
& perhaps release their pain in ink..
love Brenda
for the heads up..
I deeply appreciate your thoughts
& gracious comment..
yes it's my hopes that others
will read this
with knowledge they aren't alone
& perhaps release their pain in ink..
love Brenda
Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 3:37pm
JJ->{{{{Brenda}}}}
Such dark sorrow and pain you express dear friend!
Surely Karma owes souls such as we a better life next time around!!!
Then we can enter each other's spirit to share in each other's happiness...!
JJ
Such dark sorrow and pain you express dear friend!
Surely Karma owes souls such as we a better life next time around!!!
Then we can enter each other's spirit to share in each other's happiness...!
JJ
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 5:12pm
thank you dearest JJ
we can only hope
that the next go round
is more joyous one..
beautiful comment
& thought..
love Brenda
we can only hope
that the next go round
is more joyous one..
beautiful comment
& thought..
love Brenda
Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 5:46pm
Dark sorrow is only there so we know why the light from joy looks like.
"There is power in pain "
Emily Dickinson
"There is power in pain "
Emily Dickinson
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18th Dec 2017 5:52pm
Re. Fade To Black
Anonymous
18th Dec 2017 5:48pm
oh my honey, i want to hug you tight and long,
if only peace would be still at least for moment..
under my skin..
if only peace would be still at least for moment..
under my skin..
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 5:53pm
thank you beautiful Splits
for the love you've shown me today..
you thoughts
& visits are deeply cherished..
love Brenda
for the love you've shown me today..
you thoughts
& visits are deeply cherished..
love Brenda
Re. Fade To Black
18th Dec 2017 11:02pm
WOW! This is an introspective existential masterpiece Brenda. It reminds me that we are the Labyrinth...the self is made of many varied minotaurs, but deep within us we have our Theseus and Ariadne.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
thank you most graciously dearest Harry
for a very mind opening comment
I learned something new today
about the great Labyrinth in Greek mythology..
you are a wealth of knowledge
& I deeply appreciate
you sharing it with me..
truly you made my night
with the love you've shown on this write..
i'm honored to make your list..
love Brenda
for a very mind opening comment
I learned something new today
about the great Labyrinth in Greek mythology..
you are a wealth of knowledge
& I deeply appreciate
you sharing it with me..
truly you made my night
with the love you've shown on this write..
i'm honored to make your list..
love Brenda
Re: Re. Fade To Black
20th Dec 2017 7:30am
Re. Fade To Black
20th Dec 2017 7:40am
Another great poem.
Really enjoyed these lines
“it sleeps most days
but awakens
around the holidays”
🤗
Really enjoyed these lines
“it sleeps most days
but awakens
around the holidays”
🤗
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
21st Dec 2017 9:02pm
thank you dearest LK
yeah that monster
shows himself around the holidays..
so happy you enjoyed..
love Crim
yeah that monster
shows himself around the holidays..
so happy you enjoyed..
love Crim
Re. Fade To Black
Anonymous
20th Dec 2017 2:33pm
What a journey Crim. A beautiful write but a harrowing tale to tell. Well expressed as always with such amazing description! Xo
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21st Dec 2017 9:03pm
Re. Fade To Black
Anonymous
21st Dec 2017 2:18am
My love, this touches the deepest parts of me...you are never alone in the dark my love because within these words you let me know I am not alone....and one day you and I will be in the same space for many holidays to be celebrated...you can count on it...the Fates haven't reunited us to just be only as close as video chat :) :)
I love you madly, deeply
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn
I love you madly, deeply
yours always & forever
xoxoxox Love Taryn
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
21st Dec 2017 9:04pm
thank you my love I'm so happy
this spoke to you in your dark places
no you're not alone..
& we have each other always
as the fates willed it..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
this spoke to you in your dark places
no you're not alone..
& we have each other always
as the fates willed it..
I love you passionately..
love Brenda
Re. Fade To Black
Anonymous
21st Dec 2017 9:42am
Amazing job here!! Conveying the darkness inside in a way only YOU are able to!! Loved it!!
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Re: Re. Fade To Black
21st Dec 2017 9:05pm
thank you graciously dearest Ken
so happy to have you along for the journey..
love Crim
so happy to have you along for the journey..
love Crim
Re. Fade To Black
Anonymous
28th Dec 2017 7:33am
sail my tears
around cape depression
& see the sparrows of despair - the verse rocked my boat!
excellent write, full of feeling.
around cape depression
& see the sparrows of despair - the verse rocked my boat!
excellent write, full of feeling.
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28th Dec 2017 7:36am