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Pain's Child
rape my pain
because it doesn't ache enough
it's brand new
born from the fears of today
wild eyed it watches
frightened
as an inoculation of anxiety
is given
injected into its blood
it starts to scream
for release
but here,
tears are street walkers
you have to pay for their time
soon it's straight jacketed
for being a harm to its self
& others
shot up with anti-psychotics
it starts to drool
he babbles to depression
but it just doesn't give a damn
it's jaded
& has heard it all before
so it slams the door in pain's face
pain aches for a companion
in this no man's land
then it comes across a child
it asks her name
she says
"Brenda"
she shares her tears
with the new pain
weeping with it
& giving him a name
she says lovingly
"i will call you denial"
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Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 5:46am
Misery loves company, but pain is a child that never stops crying...
It is so hard to read your pain Brenda. Like a baby in its crib that howls from an unseen monster that hides beneath the mattress, sticking needles up through the cushion that should be comforting but instead bleeds the soul of happiness. I want to rock you to sleep and make the demons run for their lives...
JJ
It is so hard to read your pain Brenda. Like a baby in its crib that howls from an unseen monster that hides beneath the mattress, sticking needles up through the cushion that should be comforting but instead bleeds the soul of happiness. I want to rock you to sleep and make the demons run for their lives...
JJ
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
thank you dearest JJ
i'm just feeling anxious tonight
& writing helps..
so I started to write
& this is what came out..
yes our pain is born brand new everyday
so like with an infant in distress
we are likely to get little relief from it..
thank you for the love you sent me
it's deeply felt & appreciated..
love you..
Brenda
i'm just feeling anxious tonight
& writing helps..
so I started to write
& this is what came out..
yes our pain is born brand new everyday
so like with an infant in distress
we are likely to get little relief from it..
thank you for the love you sent me
it's deeply felt & appreciated..
love you..
Brenda
Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 5:56am
Beautifully written.
"rape my pain
because it doesn't ache enough" Jarring opening lines, really effective, excellent.
I love how you've spun pain into an entity, I can attest to it's feeling like one, a deadly malignant force.
"rape my pain
because it doesn't ache enough" Jarring opening lines, really effective, excellent.
I love how you've spun pain into an entity, I can attest to it's feeling like one, a deadly malignant force.
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
thank you dearest Atomik
i'm very anxious tonight
& that line just came to me
seemed appropriate to how I feel..
I deeply cherish your beautiful comment
& appreciate you relating to pain as the entity it is..
love Crim
i'm very anxious tonight
& that line just came to me
seemed appropriate to how I feel..
I deeply cherish your beautiful comment
& appreciate you relating to pain as the entity it is..
love Crim
Re: Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 6:19am
There's certainly an element to airing it abroad tonight and releasing sentiments...I'm not much for astrology, but if I was...
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 6:22am
yes seems we are all affected
in this light today..
when I get anxious I write
& this is what came out..
I try to never quiet my muse
no matter where she leads..
thank you again dearest Atomik..
love Crim
in this light today..
when I get anxious I write
& this is what came out..
I try to never quiet my muse
no matter where she leads..
thank you again dearest Atomik..
love Crim
Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 8:50am
You are way too good at poetry 😁 always leave me thinking.
Wonderful friend 🤗
Wonderful friend 🤗
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 8:53am
aw thank you dearest LK
happy you enjoyed this write
& that it got your mind turning..
I deeply appreciate your gracious comment..
love Crim
happy you enjoyed this write
& that it got your mind turning..
I deeply appreciate your gracious comment..
love Crim
Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 11:20am
Re: Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 11:37am
Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 1:24pm
"but here,
tears are street walkers
you have to pay for their time"
this is one of the most painful
writes i've read..
tears being too expensive to shed
no relief or release
from the pain & anxiety..
this one stung..
~Raven
tears are street walkers
you have to pay for their time"
this is one of the most painful
writes i've read..
tears being too expensive to shed
no relief or release
from the pain & anxiety..
this one stung..
~Raven
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 4:10pm
thank you beautiful Raven
for reading into those lines..
yes for the grown Brenda
tears are too emotionally expensive
a hardened outlook doesn't allow
them to flow freely..
I deeply appreciate your thoughts..
love Crim
for reading into those lines..
yes for the grown Brenda
tears are too emotionally expensive
a hardened outlook doesn't allow
them to flow freely..
I deeply appreciate your thoughts..
love Crim
Re. Pain's Child
KABOOM! You defiantly had explosives in your mind that day. I adore this masterpiece to pieces. I am defiantly inspired by your idea here.
I really really like the first line.
You have such courage.
Much love for you, and here for you.🌹
I really really like the first line.
You have such courage.
Much love for you, and here for you.🌹
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 4:12pm
thank you graciously beautiful Jade
so happy this write
inspired you today..
I cherish the love you show me..
love & hugs..
Crim
so happy this write
inspired you today..
I cherish the love you show me..
love & hugs..
Crim
Re. Pain's Child
Anonymous
19th Dec 2017 2:13pm
Each time you write of your pain you imbue it with more texture, more depth. And it's an aching thing to read, more so to experience it. Tears burn the eyes with this beautiful write, my beautiful Dark Angel. Pain and denial so often walk hand in hand. Hugging you so tightly now, beautiful. So very much love for you
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 4:13pm
thank you beautiful Willow
for reading into the depths
of this painful write...
hugs you tightly back..
I love you..
love Brenda
for reading into the depths
of this painful write...
hugs you tightly back..
I love you..
love Brenda
Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 5:50pm
N hear I thought the Nile was a river in Africa?!?... oh well if anyone asks I'll deny thinking anything! lol...
But seriously, U did it again my dear...
Darkness, personified ...
But seriously, U did it again my dear...
Darkness, personified ...
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
21st Dec 2017 9:07pm
lol thank you Poe for giving me a laugh :)
& for reading this painful write
born of my anxiety..
love Crim
& for reading this painful write
born of my anxiety..
love Crim
Re. Pain's Child
19th Dec 2017 11:33pm
Dear Crimsin, you always do a wonderful job with those amazingly dark beautiful ideas and lines in your works..
I admire it so much...
Love <3
H
I admire it so much...
Love <3
H
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
21st Dec 2017 9:07pm
Re. Pain's Child
Anonymous
20th Dec 2017 4:58am
Dear sweet friend. Brenda I wish you were not anxious. I wish I could give you a hug right this fucking second. Be calm precious. The angels heard you weep on this bleed. I'm with you.
Beth
Beth
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
21st Dec 2017 9:09pm
thank you dearest Beth from my heart
you calm my anxiety just with your presence..
i'm basking in the warmth of your cyber hug
my soul can feel you..
love Brenda
you calm my anxiety just with your presence..
i'm basking in the warmth of your cyber hug
my soul can feel you..
love Brenda
Re. Pain's Child
20th Dec 2017 11:27pm
A tragic existential epic on the human condition that we can all, as human beings, appreciate and relate to Brenda...loved it my friend.
Shalom...Harry
Shalom...Harry
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
21st Dec 2017 9:10pm
thank you dearest Harry
for relating with me
on this dark write
born of anxiety..
love Brenda
for relating with me
on this dark write
born of anxiety..
love Brenda
Re. Pain's Child
21st Dec 2017 2:07am
"she shares her tears
with the new pain
weeping with it
& giving him a name
she says lovingly
"i will call you denial"
oh my goodness!
powerful stuff my lovely
intensely yours
-Jeff
with the new pain
weeping with it
& giving him a name
she says lovingly
"i will call you denial"
oh my goodness!
powerful stuff my lovely
intensely yours
-Jeff
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
21st Dec 2017 9:11pm
thank you dearest Jeff
for showing love on this write
that is close to my heart..
love Crim
for showing love on this write
that is close to my heart..
love Crim
Re. Pain's Child
Anonymous
21st Dec 2017 2:08am
My love, my Beautiful Brenda...often times we hate to show our vulnerability and instead we choose to hold firm to a stern outward appearance when in reality our insides are falling apart...it works for a time but when you find those who are able to embrace and protect and nurture all facets of you, there is no longer a cost for those tears...they actually bring you rewards which one cannot place a value on....
I love you passionately
yours always & forever my love
xoxoxo Love Taryn
I love you passionately
yours always & forever my love
xoxoxo Love Taryn
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Re: Re. Pain's Child
21st Dec 2017 9:13pm
thank you my love
yes my hardened outer woman
refuses to let me cry
when anxious & depressed
while my inner child
quietly weeps for the pain i'm in..
thank you for embracing me in this write..
I love madly..
love Brenda
yes my hardened outer woman
refuses to let me cry
when anxious & depressed
while my inner child
quietly weeps for the pain i'm in..
thank you for embracing me in this write..
I love madly..
love Brenda
Re: Re. Pain's Child
21st Dec 2017 9:14pm