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They Hate Love.
She was brave and patient
Quiet but loud.
She was sunrise and sunset
Caring and affectionate.
She'd hustled and balled
Kept loyal and strong
When he had him and him alone.
She was everything good.
So he tugged her under his arms
Held her, grabbed her waist and showed her, love.
But those who saw this called him whimped out
Guess she wasn't good enough for his crowd.
He felt embarrassed and hid in a shroud
Unveiled later and flogged her to the ground
Buried her never to be found
She was too good to be true
Yet she truly was true
But no one ever knew.
Too scared of vulnerability,
He lost out on her possibility
In fear the fall would come soon
He quit his golden fairy for a damned lady
Not half as good nor could ever be.
Damned lady was poison spattered ugly
Concealed in make up, seemingly pretty.
So the crowd cheered him on
"You the man, You the Dog."
She made him seem strong
With an armor and sword
But inside, he felt weak to his bones
Alone with his thoughts
Darker than shades of coal.
He yelped and called
But damned lady was wretched cold
She kicked him at his loins,
Laughed at his mourns.
He ached and bled.
Now he grieves for her, his real throne
Cries for her alone
Guiltfully bitter and cold
Regretting his kill for vain show.
But wll he ever know
Love is too good for death to let go.
Quiet but loud.
She was sunrise and sunset
Caring and affectionate.
She'd hustled and balled
Kept loyal and strong
When he had him and him alone.
She was everything good.
So he tugged her under his arms
Held her, grabbed her waist and showed her, love.
But those who saw this called him whimped out
Guess she wasn't good enough for his crowd.
He felt embarrassed and hid in a shroud
Unveiled later and flogged her to the ground
Buried her never to be found
She was too good to be true
Yet she truly was true
But no one ever knew.
Too scared of vulnerability,
He lost out on her possibility
In fear the fall would come soon
He quit his golden fairy for a damned lady
Not half as good nor could ever be.
Damned lady was poison spattered ugly
Concealed in make up, seemingly pretty.
So the crowd cheered him on
"You the man, You the Dog."
She made him seem strong
With an armor and sword
But inside, he felt weak to his bones
Alone with his thoughts
Darker than shades of coal.
He yelped and called
But damned lady was wretched cold
She kicked him at his loins,
Laughed at his mourns.
He ached and bled.
Now he grieves for her, his real throne
Cries for her alone
Guiltfully bitter and cold
Regretting his kill for vain show.
But wll he ever know
Love is too good for death to let go.
Published 5th Nov 2017
| Edited 22nd Dec 2021
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5th Nov 2017 8:09am
The moral of the story is an old one, yet it seems we must keep repeating the course until we actually attend the class.
Nice write.
Nice write.
5th Nov 2017 2:17pm
First I'd like to commend you on the poem. This poem is the type I'm most drawn to read as it carries a duel meaning depending on the reader's perspective.
Your question can be interpreted two ways also.
1...How were you able to understand my intended meaning of the poem?
2...Why do you interpret the meaning of the poem in this way?
When I began reading, the use of the word "she" led me to think in the literal sense, she being an actual person, thus making me read the poem as referring to a male being in love with this person, but due to peer pressure dumping her for a pretty more glitzy girl, and the end result being he threw away his chance for true love and instead ended up with just window dressing.
Then, re-reading it, line #7, "When he had him and him alone", the word "he" being used, thus turns the entire poem into a figurative one, where the feeling of love becomes the theme of the poem, and he forsakes this feeling of love under pressure of outside influence and realizes his loss.
To me, the one letter "s" becomes the turning point of one's interpretation. Was the letter "s" a typo or was it intentional?
Either way, my comment was in regard to the old adage "One never knows what they had until it's gone."
I hope this clarifies my comment, and now I'm curious as to your intent of the poem.
Your question can be interpreted two ways also.
1...How were you able to understand my intended meaning of the poem?
2...Why do you interpret the meaning of the poem in this way?
When I began reading, the use of the word "she" led me to think in the literal sense, she being an actual person, thus making me read the poem as referring to a male being in love with this person, but due to peer pressure dumping her for a pretty more glitzy girl, and the end result being he threw away his chance for true love and instead ended up with just window dressing.
Then, re-reading it, line #7, "When he had him and him alone", the word "he" being used, thus turns the entire poem into a figurative one, where the feeling of love becomes the theme of the poem, and he forsakes this feeling of love under pressure of outside influence and realizes his loss.
To me, the one letter "s" becomes the turning point of one's interpretation. Was the letter "s" a typo or was it intentional?
Either way, my comment was in regard to the old adage "One never knows what they had until it's gone."
I hope this clarifies my comment, and now I'm curious as to your intent of the poem.
22nd Nov 2017 7:14pm
I'm so glad you understood it the way you did. Thank you for the elaborate reply. Which S do you mean, which line? The message I was trying to pass on was one. Love! About losing for the sake of love and winning in the end, patience, respecting even when disrespected, values forgotten today but are precious. This is what real love is. It's makes us happy in the end but we loose respect in the eyes of the crowd, seemingly a fool. Later on, we choose to defend ourselves through pride, ego, impatience and disrespect. We end up losing then. But we can always choose to go back to the light, love.
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