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Unrequited Love (Haikus) 7.0
(i) Beauty
you are beautiful
I'm jealous of the sun shine
that brightens your smile
(ii) See Me
am I invisible
don't know why don't you see me
you leading the blind
(iii) List
love you from afar
will you ever know that love
I'm not on your list
(iv) Bow
I worship your smile
you think I am just a creep
I bow; my heart breaks
(v) Friends
you said let's be friends
never wanted to be your friend
only your lover
(vi) Brother
we are not related
I was just like your brother
that's how you saw me
(vii) Pity
I wanted your love
all I got was your pity
as you disappeared
Published 14th Sep 2017
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14th Sep 2017 1:31am
These are so heart-filled, David. They truly capture the essence of the title.
14th Sep 2017 6:09pm
thank you, I am always glad when you like what I write - means a lot :-) I have read them back and I am not sure if the first one fits the title. what do you think?
14th Sep 2017 6:39pm
Anonymous
14th Sep 2017 3:23am
I agree with Ahavati, excellent!
14th Sep 2017 6:08pm
Anonymous
14th Sep 2017 7:57pm
well I will keep reading !
14th Sep 2017 5:48pm
Words given freely
Light thoughts spoken from the heart
Glad you are my friend
Sweet poignant heartfelt
Touching words lavished on me
Thank you for the write
Light thoughts spoken from the heart
Glad you are my friend
Sweet poignant heartfelt
Touching words lavished on me
Thank you for the write
14th Sep 2017 6:07pm
Thank you for those words, you are very kind, my friend - always like a poetic response :-)
14th Sep 2017 7:20pm
... so well written David ... poetry that reaches through the chest and squeezes the heart ... I'm enjoying your kus 😊
17th Sep 2017 3:24am
15th Sep 2017 7:03pm
O, my friend...poignant, powerful expressions---sincere out-pourings straight from the heart and soul!
Each haiku flows freely into the next...building on the emotions from the one preceding...until the pain of rejection is keenly experienced in the final one.
You are continuing to fine tune your skill in this form...consistently gifting us with ones that showcase your talent on ever-increasing level of skill and creativity! I am becoming ever so fond of your Haiku, David! Warm hugs! .
Each haiku flows freely into the next...building on the emotions from the one preceding...until the pain of rejection is keenly experienced in the final one.
You are continuing to fine tune your skill in this form...consistently gifting us with ones that showcase your talent on ever-increasing level of skill and creativity! I am becoming ever so fond of your Haiku, David! Warm hugs! .
17th Sep 2017 3:26am
you certainly always boost my mind and warm my heart - I love the way you support me and my poems :-) !,000,000 warm Scottish Hugs :-)
Anonymous
18th Sep 2017 3:48pm
You should have seen my frown develop as I read these. I find it difficult to fathom anyone being able to resist you, your charm and your generous heart. Wrapping arms tightly around you and squeezing. Beautiful haikus, my friend :)
18th Sep 2017 5:58pm
That was such a nice thing to say - but there are people who love too much, even when its not returned - I just happen to be one of these people - it doesn't always serve me well :-( Massive hugs returning :-)
Anonymous
18th Sep 2017 6:07pm
There is no such thing as loving too much. It only feels like it's too much when it's not returned in like form. Yours is a genuine and giving heart, and deserving of much love
18th Sep 2017 6:11pm
