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we take refuge among the low hills of wildflowers, the place of
a thousand journeys. it sings a song that we cannot hear; it brings
simple treasures that we cannot take. we were soldiers, no longer
needed to march.
we were soldiers once, lured by the call of the bugle, the thunder of
violence, & the mouth of the cannon, more ensorcelling than a
woman’s lips. there were women who desired to love us, though
they knew we made for the field of battle when the trumpets blew.
they waited in their hermitage, made of silence & tears. they watched
a window that might frame their furied, broken angel, looking homeward.
in these low hills, the music, morose, breaks free at last –
who put the sad songs back among the old songs…
(Art: Kelly Ann Thomas)
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26th Aug 2017 5:57am
John this one is different
there is a romantic view to it for me
if only from the female perspective..
beautiful..
love Crim
there is a romantic view to it for me
if only from the female perspective..
beautiful..
love Crim
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26th Aug 2017 6:03am
I can hear the music
echoing through the hills.
And those women, waiting
among wildflowers and silence.
So beautiful, John...
echoing through the hills.
And those women, waiting
among wildflowers and silence.
So beautiful, John...
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26th Aug 2017 3:44pm
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Anonymous
26th Aug 2017 6:39pm
What happens to the soldiers when the drums of war go silent? A different melody for you in this one. Very beautiful
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26th Aug 2017 6:59pm
And they wait still in their hermitage for the soldiers who will not come back.
I loved it John, as usual. It's a little different than normal but wonderful all the same.
I loved it John, as usual. It's a little different than normal but wonderful all the same.
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Anonymous
26th Aug 2017 10:20pm
Dearest John, those melodies will replay time and time again, shuffled within all the rest of them but will always find a way to stand out, just as your poetry....gorgeous write....With love, always - Kitten xoxo
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27th Aug 2017 4:09pm
You've been jumping styles much lately John....getting restless?
It's great to see from one with as much talent as You-This particular Write was exquisite - with just the right amount of dirt!!!
It's great to see from one with as much talent as You-This particular Write was exquisite - with just the right amount of dirt!!!
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27th Aug 2017 5:28pm
Evocative writing from the soldier of fortune, still at it as the bugles fade.
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30th Aug 2017 10:01am
"in these low hills, the music, morose, breaks free at last – who put the sad songs back among the old songs…"
...the glory across the soldier song...to hear it again and to not...nice circle back to the future- J
...the glory across the soldier song...to hear it again and to not...nice circle back to the future- J
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Anonymous
4th Sep 2017 12:00pm
we take refuge among the low hills of wildflowers, opening lines are so beautiful and the- place of a thousand journeys, very lovely - enjoyed reading!
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Anonymous
6th Sep 2017 10:05pm
You dont write much about that other life. The times spent in army but when you do it draws the reader in to the man who can make the art of love seem beyond any mortals reach.
I appreciate so much these types of pieces by you. It's truly a privilege to see the deeper and more mysterious sides.
I appreciate so much these types of pieces by you. It's truly a privilege to see the deeper and more mysterious sides.
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6th Sep 2017 11:55pm
Reminds me of what Leonard Cohen wrote in his song The Future...love is the only engine of survival...a truly beautiful melodic masterpiece John.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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10th Sep 2017 9:11pm
takes one v.much into the settings you carved out in perfection JF. i loved how simply n skillfully you handle the tools-low hills n the music -differently in the first n the next stanza-to reveal the struggle's end, the "were" they were...n how they were before..love gets its eternal intensity and infinite density by the waits , the meloncholy therein & after ...n u know that well v.v.well. the ending verses splits one for sure..in a slow permanence.. well done as ev, reading a different tone from u in this one, though reading you after long, certainly missed ur steadily flowing art here at du. tq fr the read :)
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13th Sep 2017 9:39am
John, this poen has your always sentiment, melancholy and beauty. so much sense and sensibility combination. Just beautiful beyond words....
RoseJasmine
RoseJasmine
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15th Sep 2017 11:47am
the music may be different
but the song doesn't really change
the lyrics are always filled with love
dig it, mister
but the song doesn't really change
the lyrics are always filled with love
dig it, mister
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15th Feb 2018 11:44pm
IM glad someone took the time out to look at the sweet mercy love and its battlefield has to convey. Thanks for capturing the ring of fire to this bewitched friendship.
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