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She Understood
It wasn't an apocalyptic vision
she had, or anything like that
She just understood
what it was coming to:
Two trains on a collision course
She knew which train
she'd be on as memories of her mother's
favorite words
quietly came to mind:
"On the day of screams
choose your vowels carefully"...
she had, or anything like that
She just understood
what it was coming to:
Two trains on a collision course
She knew which train
she'd be on as memories of her mother's
favorite words
quietly came to mind:
"On the day of screams
choose your vowels carefully"...
Published 16th Aug 2017
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The author encourages honest critique.
16th Aug 2017 3:21pm
Boom. Jumps the track of emotion.
One suggestion:
Space the quote for emphasis. Prepare the reader for the impact.
One suggestion:
Space the quote for emphasis. Prepare the reader for the impact.
17th Aug 2017 11:16am
It was my first thought to go with impact, but I decided to go with form cohesion, but, what do I know?
Anonymous
20th Aug 2017 3:00am
i think the best way to read you will be
to set an evening aside with a glass of
something ;)
loving your admirable works
to set an evening aside with a glass of
something ;)
loving your admirable works
20th Aug 2017 4:22am
Thank you! Sounds as good a way as any. Hope, at least, you enjoy the 'something' in your glass!
29th Jul 2019 8:52pm
