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the obscene & innocent
whispered winds
caress cult black
they come together
& make art
inside my gothic oasis
juxtaposed within the desert
of my mind
charcoal sands
create wondrous landscapes
as the rivers dark
carve canyons
where deep emotion
flows unbidden
voices intermingle
speak in a tongue
tasted though
not heard before
I take my first steps
on a virgin path
where the obscene
& innocent
collaborate in an opera
of moans & hope
as id meets daemon
& both are carried away
by the quiet of soul
so is the divinity of light
my nature's paradise
but the bleak dark
will forever remain
my playground
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
Published 19th Jun 2017
| Edited 20th Jun 2017
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19th Jun 2017 9:48pm
'but the bleak dark
will forever remain
my playground"
You flat out got that right, Brenda.
Bleak dark is a way to deal with the
foibles of our very souls more than
anything we have inside of us.
will forever remain
my playground"
You flat out got that right, Brenda.
Bleak dark is a way to deal with the
foibles of our very souls more than
anything we have inside of us.
19th Jun 2017 10:42pm
thank you dearest Jerry yes we always have a place to play in the dark ;)
love you..
xo Brenda
love you..
xo Brenda
20th Jun 2017 00:40am
another side of you in hope and distraction.
I like this flow and it's works well from your pen
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I like this flow and it's works well from your pen
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20th Jun 2017 2:18am
Anonymous
20th Jun 2017 00:56am
As always you never cease to amaze
20th Jun 2017 2:20am
20th Jun 2017 1:57am
'The deep dark shall forever remain my playground.' Wow, that last line is incredible but sadly seems to dispel any hope you may have built up until that point.
thank you graciously Purple one though I don't plan to set up camp in the dark in life.. only in my writing.. it's where I play & gets things out.. love Crim
Anonymous
20th Jun 2017 4:21am
My Beautiful Brenda...for as long as I've known you and we have had quite a history at this point, when you play in the dark night, there are so many rainbows which shine brightly from within your deep emotions...this is what brought me to you...regardless of what path you wander on, the two will dance under a multi colored arc....
I love you passionately
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
I love you passionately
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
22nd Jun 2017 2:26am
thank you my love for seeing me in this light..I'm grateful for so many wonderful years together having said that..this is one of the most beautiful comments you've given me & that's saying a lot considering they all contain your love.. I love you passionately.. love Brenda
20th Jun 2017 8:43am
The landscape of your mind, where darkness and light dwell side by side.
So beautiful, Crim.
When the light gets too bright,
there will always be a place of shadow to rest in...
So beautiful, Crim.
When the light gets too bright,
there will always be a place of shadow to rest in...
22nd Jun 2017 5:38pm
20th Jun 2017 12:36pm
it's a gothic landscape, Crim,
rivers & canyons;
many of us take refuge in the dark...
rivers & canyons;
many of us take refuge in the dark...
22nd Jun 2017 5:39pm
Anonymous
20th Jun 2017 2:35pm
Beautiful Angel, you light up the deep dark like nobody I've ever seen before. It is indeed your domain, you've left a deep imprint in its soil and laid siege to its minions. Very much enjoyed this introspective piece, my lovely Angel. So much love...
22nd Jun 2017 5:40pm
20th Jun 2017 3:49pm
...in agony we writhe! Twisting to feel the comforting promise of
restraint.
Great writing Crim
restraint.
Great writing Crim
22nd Jun 2017 5:41pm
20th Jun 2017 4:57pm
22nd Jun 2017 5:41pm
thank you graciously David your comment brought me smiles :) love & hugs Brenda
20th Jun 2017 7:45pm
I love these gothic lines and the idea of the dark (or night) as playground. It's the mystery that does it for me. That, and the possibility of playmates dressed in black, their eyes shining with promise. Loved this Lady Crim!
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Anonymous
24th Jun 2017 3:45am
Brenda.. you're the best.. i love you, my favorite writer.. wish i was half as good as you..
Dave
Dave
25th Jun 2017 00:47am
thank you Dave but what are you talking about you're a great writer with a voice unique to you alone.. love you my brother.. Brenda
