Destination Don't Care

:-) saw this first in the road trip competition hosted by souladareatease. very old ink miss

Old? :-)  The ink is barely dry on this one.

old ink a mean from a pen that's no way is new to poetry, a young looking old(experienced) hand

I see. Well, thank you. :-)

Nice, love the last line.

Thank you. :-)

Ohhhhh that ending splits the reader's imagination in half; there's this, and there's that...

Over all I really enjoyed the piece, especially the loner quality the essence emanated. There was one place I wanted to suggest a semi-colon ( the first line ); however, realized this was punctuation free. Other than that, it's very well written.  Good imagery, especially the physical opening stanza followed by the emotional mood.

From there the two entwine in the present and past, always with alternating surroundings contrasted with the emotional ( and perhaps moral ) ambiguity of reality.

Can't wait to read more from you!

I'm not always averse to punctuation, and I can understand a desire for it on the first line. I played with that stanza more than the others, I think, because I wanted the lines to blur together like the shades of grey.    
 
 Thank you for taking the time to tell me what you saw in this. It's always interesting to me to see something from another's eyes, and you gave so much back. I really appreciate that. Of course, I'm also glad that you enjoyed it. :-)

I do hope you'll share your thoughts when you have the time. Curious to see what you will pick on, and I'm open to whatever you have to say. That you came back to read more than once is very nice to hear, so thank you for telling me.

I feel you going to the well too often with "she" and the repetativeness weakens the whole.

For example, Stanza 7 could survive without "She knew".

Something to consider in an otherwise solid poem.

Thank you for the feedback. I'll take a look at it with that in mind a bit later today.

Touching isn't inappropriate when you want it. :-) Please say what you will when you're able.

Smashing last stanza to an outstanding poem!

Shivers you gave me...I know this feeling of wanting to escape all too well...

Edit: forgot to say welcome to Deep Underground :-)

Thank you for the welcome and the compliments. I'm glad that you like it and found it relatable. :-)

I love this

Thank you! Thank you for adding it to your reading list as well.

Yes, her bad idea did pass out, and she left him or her there. I made the change to "another".  I agree that it sounds better, and I like the implication. The first stanza is meant to set the scene and put the reader in the driver's seat on a day just like that. I'll give your feedback some consideration, maybe play with things a bit to see how they feel. I'm a little resistant to making changes to that one, though. Thank you for coming back and giving this more thought and time. I really appreciate that you did.

Maybe you've just never had a bad idea in your bed. :-)

You've written a poem recently that says as much, I think. :-)

I like it just the way it is .....

Thank you for the comment. I'm glad you liked it.

Damn...you're good! No doubt about it, you can fucking write!! :)

Thank you for the compliments. :-)

Nothing felt better than driving  
away from another mistake  
 
Everything she wanted to escape  
was never farther than tire tracks  
splashing mud on her bumper  
 
But it sure killed time  
and she was fine with its blood  
on her hands  

Absolutely stunning, wow this who piece is so heavy i really enjoyed this Paperstain
especially that last stanza, wow what a punch!
Zazzles

It's nice to hear it had an impact. Thank you for reading and commenting. :-)

Your ends are clever on multiple pieces, you keep yourself at arms length in a rare way for your general genre too. Continue strong, IS.

Thank you for taking the time to read some of my pieces and to comment. Your observation is not one that has been mentioned to me before, if it's been noticed by anyone else. I appreciate that you took that kind of notice. I'll do my best to continue strong.