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Greened Grass (a pantoum)

The grass is green - it has to be      
since I conclude it must be so      
as long as one and all agree    
that green is green, not blue you know      
     
since I conclude it must be so      
perception varies quite a lot      
that green is green, not blue you know      
depends how eyes will join the dots      
     
perception varies quite a lot      
our neural networks link to suit      
dependent eyes will join the dots      
resulting in a point that’s mute      
     
our neural networks link to suit      
and how we label what we view      
resulting in a point that’s mute      
of how we claim the colour’s hue      
     
and how we label what we view      
relates to sole experience      
of how we claim the colour’s hue      
and call it all a “common sense”      
     
relating sole experience      
as long as one and all agree    
to call it all a “common sense”      
that grass is green - it has to be.
Written by Josh (Joshua Bond)
Published | Edited 7th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Currently reading Stephen Fry’s “The Ode Less Travelled: unlocking the poet within”. Yesterday I reached page 240 in which I was introduced to the “pantoum”. Obviously I had to have a go at it. What you read above is my first attempt at this style of poem.
Every 4-line stanza has to follow an ABAB rhyming scheme. Each line occurs twice, with the 2nd & 4th lines of one stanza becoming the 1st and 3rd of the next. The poem can be as long as you like, as long as in the last stanza, lines 1 & 3 of the 1st stanza (which so far have not been repeated) become lines 4 & 2 (ie: reversed) of that last stanza, so no one line feels aggrieved at being left out of the loop, being denied a second chance to make their mark. Easy, huh?

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