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Greened Grass (a pantoum)

The grass is green - it has to be
since I conclude it must be so    
as long as one and all agree    
that green is green, not blue you know    
     
since I conclude it must be so    
perception varies quite a lot    
that green is green, not blue you know    
depends how eyes will join the dots    
     
perception varies quite a lot    
our neural networks link to suit    
dependent eyes will join the dots    
resulting in a point that’s mute    
     
our neural networks link to suit    
and how we label what we view    
resulting in a point that’s mute    
of how we claim the colour’s hue    
     
and how we label what we view    
relates to sole experience    
of how we claim the colour’s hue    
and call it all a “common sense”    
     
relating sole experience    
as long as one and all agree    
to call it all a “common sense”    
that grass is green - it has to be.
Josh
Written by Josh (Joshua Bond)
Published | Edited 18th Jan 2020
Author's Note
I am currently reading Stephen Fry’s “The Ode Less Travelled: unlocking the poet within”. Yesterday I reached page 240 in which I was introduced to the “pantoum”, - a poem format I had never heard...
I am currently reading Stephen Fry’s “The Ode Less Travelled: unlocking the poet within”. Yesterday I reached page 240 in which I was introduced to the “pantoum”, - a poem format I had never heard of. Obviously I had to have a go at it. What you read below is my first attempt at this style of poem. Every 4-line stanza has to follow an ABAB rhyming scheme. Each line occurs twice, with the 2nd & 4th lines of one stanza becoming the 1st and 3rd of the next. The poem can be as long as you like, as long as in the last stanza, lines 1 & 3 of the 1st stanza (which so far have not been repeated) become lines 4 & 2 (ie: reversed) of that last stanza, so no one line feels aggrieved at being left out of the loop, being denied a second chance to make their mark. Easy, huh?
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