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Godsend
He calls them "scripts",
His prescriptions, his meds.
And from what we know
Of each other,
It should be short for "scriptures",
'Cause he told me yesterday
That I was a godsend.
I don't think
God did him any favors,
But I'll bet you he'll debate it
And say otherwise,
Even if he's having trouble
Filling his lungs with air
'Cause he knows
I've promised him some of mine.
note: Heh, don't try to figure it out, it's just the way it is.
His prescriptions, his meds.
And from what we know
Of each other,
It should be short for "scriptures",
'Cause he told me yesterday
That I was a godsend.
I don't think
God did him any favors,
But I'll bet you he'll debate it
And say otherwise,
Even if he's having trouble
Filling his lungs with air
'Cause he knows
I've promised him some of mine.
note: Heh, don't try to figure it out, it's just the way it is.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 13th Mar 2017
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13th Mar 2017 1:16pm
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13th Mar 2017 10:24pm
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13th Mar 2017 3:20pm
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13th Mar 2017 10:22pm
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13th Mar 2017 4:28pm
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13th Mar 2017 10:28pm
Dear whale, whenever you visit, you leave me words that nourish the poet, from a poet.
Re. Godsend
It is perfect and clear like the beat of a crystalline heart...
I love it...
RL'd...
Is it possible to "really like!" something...
I love it...
RL'd...
Is it possible to "really like!" something...
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14th Mar 2017 4:12am
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14th Mar 2017 6:34am
Really like this one, Jadey. I like poems with no clear meaning, they wander in the mind opening doors of thought. Talented pen as always!
~anonshadow😏
~anonshadow😏
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Re: Re. Godsend
14th Mar 2017 7:27am
Why thank you, Anon! I like to meander like that with my pen now & then. These are the ones I don't have to think about how I'll compose... they just happen, honestly.
Re. Godsend
15th Mar 2017 5:22am
Maybe God didn't do him any favors,
but perhaps your kindness was favor enough.
So lovely, Jade...
but perhaps your kindness was favor enough.
So lovely, Jade...
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15th Mar 2017 9:40am
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27th Mar 2017 10:20am
Now that is true love. beautiful reflections. I love that it has a funny flavor to it while not making fun of the challenge.
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Yes, yes, that's everything - a perfect reading - thank you, Loral! And a warm welcome to DUP, it's nice to meet you.., I'm Jade😄
(dyslexic too)
(dyslexic too)
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27th Mar 2017 12:13pm
nice to meet you. I have several types of poems maybe you will find one you like.
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Re. Godsend
17th May 2017 6:34pm
the transition in the beginning two stanzas felt a bit weak and unnecessary. but I like the light sense of religion overall, as well as deep intimacy in the last stanza.
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18th May 2017 8:17pm