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Legend
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Was it her skin, flurried in drifts
of rose beyond a copse of crowns
drawing such a reluctant light
from a heavily pursed brow
Was it her innocent glance back
easing doubt enough to accept her
fleeting descent pursued by a slated
rogue of blue ‘ore rounded earth
As a last unicorn of somber forest
following a vestal virgin to its death
knowing, “When the sun has set,
no candle can replace it.” Except
The Moon and her astral entourage
from which all legends are sourced.
~
Quote attribution: George R. Martin
Image: Universe House sunset
Was it her skin, flurried in drifts
of rose beyond a copse of crowns
drawing such a reluctant light
from a heavily pursed brow
Was it her innocent glance back
easing doubt enough to accept her
fleeting descent pursued by a slated
rogue of blue ‘ore rounded earth
As a last unicorn of somber forest
following a vestal virgin to its death
knowing, “When the sun has set,
no candle can replace it.” Except
The Moon and her astral entourage
from which all legends are sourced.
~
Quote attribution: George R. Martin
Image: Universe House sunset
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 20th Jan 2017
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Re. Legend
Anonymous
20th Jan 2017 8:08pm
I find this very tranquil...beautiful...but for this Aspergian, I can make no sense of it....*giggling*....except for the Unicorn and the blue glow from the Earth... makes me think of one of my favorite movies, ironically titled the same as thus lovely piece? 🦄
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
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20th Jan 2017 8:17pm
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20th Jan 2017 8:51pm
Ah . . . Loved any poem with the word "moon" incorporated within its lines, Ahavati.
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20th Jan 2017 9:07pm
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20th Jan 2017 9:35pm
thank you Sage one you light up my life with the gentle stroke of your poetic voice..
so stunningly beautiful..
love Brenda
so stunningly beautiful..
love Brenda
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2017 9:38pm
Breathtakingly ....beautiful.
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The first stanza is my favorite. I love where you say copse of crowns and the rhyme that follows upon it. Beautiful work as always. I think it is good technique to start with a question. It is provocative, gets the neurons firing.
I think you forgot an R in there. Is it R.R. Martin. Idk, I have never seen Game of Thrones. HBO is too expensive. lol
When someone mentions unicorns I always think of this madness I wrote on my chat site when I was in a particularly animated manic high phase. Someone asked, will you be loved? I said, No! I will not be loved! I will crush the world in a gilded glove! All sentiments shall be licked off candy hearts. All horns shall be torn from unicorns. Ahaha
I think you forgot an R in there. Is it R.R. Martin. Idk, I have never seen Game of Thrones. HBO is too expensive. lol
When someone mentions unicorns I always think of this madness I wrote on my chat site when I was in a particularly animated manic high phase. Someone asked, will you be loved? I said, No! I will not be loved! I will crush the world in a gilded glove! All sentiments shall be licked off candy hearts. All horns shall be torn from unicorns. Ahaha
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21st Jan 2017 4:54am
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Dear sister - congratulations as runner-up, it's an honor to share the podium with you. And now I'm here to add your wonderful write to my Reading List. xo
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21st Jan 2017 8:31am
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Anonymous
21st Jan 2017 2:50pm
sign & oh
this is sublime, miss vati
this is sublime, miss vati
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Anonymous
21st Jan 2017 8:14pm
There is such a magisterially resonance
within this piece; it makes one think
of its own legend, if created;
Unicorns, they are rare in form
and your use of 'vestal virgin'
leaves much to the imagination
to all who read ...
I, and always, impressed
by the connection you share with the spiritual
and those alike ... no one compares ... or dares
~xo, Devlin
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Re. Legend
22nd Jan 2017 3:37am
....Oh my, the visions I pulled from this ink were stunning! Your play on words and the smoothness of your flow is masterful.... xo
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22nd Jan 2017 9:18pm
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23rd Jan 2017 6:48am
i'm a bit late to the party here, Ahavati, its a very fine poem, you certainly made it your own.
(ps hard to go wrong with george rrrr martin)
(ps hard to go wrong with george rrrr martin)
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Re. Legend
23rd Jan 2017 4:14pm
couldn't have expected anything less of divine from the great ahavati
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Anonymous
24th Jan 2017 3:26am
Awe Ahavati.......the sprit that speaks thru your soul is amazing.......thank you for sharing it's beauty and wisdom.....purple luv & hugs xo :)
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24th Jan 2017 2:30pm
ethereal images, sensuous as earth;
love is the legend made in the moonlight...
love is the legend made in the moonlight...
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Anonymous
25th Jan 2017 8:33pm
Amazing
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1st Feb 2017 10:49pm
So we howl and hoot away, or just play our internalised musique ;)
undoubtingly heard.
-Howlings
undoubtingly heard.
-Howlings
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Re. Legend
2nd Aug 2017 2:29am
The word choice definitely matches the tone, a very weird piece, but a good weird.
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