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Altered Verse: A 'Nursery' Mind
Little Jack Horner...
Sat in his lonely lil corner...
truly, without much to say...
he tried n' he tried
to express what's inside
but those fears he held
crippled his pride
n' instead he bled
from the beatings
he endured everyday
at home in his room
his momma couldn't fix his gloom
til she asked why the kids
keep him feelin' dismayed?
then Jack Horner,
quietly whispered...
"Because I'm sensitive
to other's feelings,
the boys think that I'm gay"
Now momma held him close
then proclaimed with reproach,
"Baby, be proud of who n' what
you are n' never allow anyone
to make you feel any other way!"
Sat in his lonely lil corner...
truly, without much to say...
he tried n' he tried
to express what's inside
but those fears he held
crippled his pride
n' instead he bled
from the beatings
he endured everyday
at home in his room
his momma couldn't fix his gloom
til she asked why the kids
keep him feelin' dismayed?
then Jack Horner,
quietly whispered...
"Because I'm sensitive
to other's feelings,
the boys think that I'm gay"
Now momma held him close
then proclaimed with reproach,
"Baby, be proud of who n' what
you are n' never allow anyone
to make you feel any other way!"
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Re. Altered Verse: A 'Nursery' Mind
7th Jan 2017 2:54am
Thank goodness for mamas who are loving and wise...its hard to stand in your own truth..sometimes we all need a lil boost..a little pick me up..to remind us who and what we are made of ..love...that kindness and compassion is a virture not a vice..this was lovely Poetiik ..and love the clever title
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7th Jan 2017 4:21am
Gosh u just made me blush so badly!! Thank u my sweet one I'm truly grateful :)
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7th Jan 2017 10:44am
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7th Jan 2017 11:46pm
OS! Happy New Year sweetie! Happy to hear from you again, n I thank you as always for your support :)
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Anonymous
7th Jan 2017 3:06pm
oooh you know i just don't dig rhyme
but damn papi, you give it so good...
... great poem, universal message
loved it
xo
but damn papi, you give it so good...
... great poem, universal message
loved it
xo
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7th Jan 2017 11:52pm
Aaaawww... I'm sorry sweetheart...
I will try n post more of the kind you like :) of you are aware I've got plenty
of free verse in my archives right? lol
Anywho thank u mami... Ur the best :)
I will try n post more of the kind you like :) of you are aware I've got plenty
of free verse in my archives right? lol
Anywho thank u mami... Ur the best :)
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Anonymous
7th Jan 2017 4:26pm
wisdom from a wise mother.
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Anonymous
7th Jan 2017 6:11pm
PM!! There's nothing like a fantastic Mama who will love and support all that her child are or aren't...in every way...excellent message within this write and I enjoyed very much how it read! Well done!!
xoxo Taryn
xoxo Taryn
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8th Jan 2017 9:08am
Thank you sweetheart, my mom is 'Da bomb.com' lol... Appreciate u always :)
Re. Altered Verse: A 'Nursery' Mind
8th Jan 2017 00:08am
very inspirational and unique in approach bro..
always full of ideas...
and the gift to bring them to life..
always full of ideas...
and the gift to bring them to life..
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8th Jan 2017 9:49am
Just tryin' to share bro. :) I thank you
for your thoughts n time as always bro. N Happy New Year! :)
for your thoughts n time as always bro. N Happy New Year! :)
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8th Jan 2017 10:28pm
Re. Altered Verse: A 'Nursery' Mind
I really like what you've done here. Mainly the way that you've played with nursery rhyme and extended it to highlight an adult issue. It reads very poignantly. Well done. X
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