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the life and death of me
touch me in my dark places
I've crawled on broken glass
just to caress you
*
in the gentleness
of our serendipitous moments
*
your hard jaw
fists made for brawling
give blokes a good beating
*
touches my tough spots
with such tenderness
that I soften and open to you
*
even in my dark times
I see you
in my mind's periphery
*
your music reaches
these catacombs of despair
bringer of passion
*
my lust for you overwhelms
I feel myself pull away
just to come crawling back again
for the man and artist
*
your poetry paints the night sky
with a confetti of stars
that shoot across the horizon
*
my beautiful poetic brawler
beat down my walls
let me taste the sweet sin of you
let me live to die in you once more
*Author's note picture found by my lovely one Taryn
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Re. the life and death of me
Anonymous
21st Dec 2016 2:47pm
My Beautiful Brenda....this is so tranquil, a whispered plea is heard through these words and each one of them speaks to my inner depths, my soul....I fucking love this...it is absolutely stunning in it's beauty...
"my beautiful poetic brawler
beat down my walls
let me taste the sweet sin of you
let me live to die in you once more"
~ a death that feels so good
I love you so very much!
xoxo Taryn
"my beautiful poetic brawler
beat down my walls
let me taste the sweet sin of you
let me live to die in you once more"
~ a death that feels so good
I love you so very much!
xoxo Taryn
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
21st Dec 2016 7:05pm
thank you my beautiful one you come to me in my silent times and bring smiles upon my face and page.. with your deep understanding :)
I love you so much..
xo Brenda
I love you so much..
xo Brenda
Re. the life and death of me
21st Dec 2016 2:53pm
Glistening with passion and sparkling in pain. Poetically beautiful with a hard rock backdrop...
JJ
JJ
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
21st Dec 2016 7:06pm
thank you graciously JJ for your deep interpretation of this write..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. the life and death of me
Anonymous
21st Dec 2016 4:16pm
The longing is felt so deeply in your passionate words.
A longing I know all too well.
Achingly beautiful 💓
A longing I know all too well.
Achingly beautiful 💓
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
21st Dec 2016 7:06pm
thank you lovely Heart for feeling the passion and heat of this poem..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. the life and death of me
21st Dec 2016 8:06pm
There is something so humbling about the gentleness of a strong man, especially his hands.
There's a tenderness in this one, Brenda, that reflects true masculinity.
There's a tenderness in this one, Brenda, that reflects true masculinity.
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
22nd Dec 2016 7:06am
Sage one you have found the heart of this write.. yes indeed there is.. thank you dear one..
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. the life and death of me
21st Dec 2016 10:01pm
Sweet and salacious!! What a hot write!
even in my dark times
I see you
in my mind's periphery (Love these lines!)
your poetry paints the night sky
with a confetti of stars
that shoot across the horizon (And that, WoW!!)
even in my dark times
I see you
in my mind's periphery (Love these lines!)
your poetry paints the night sky
with a confetti of stars
that shoot across the horizon (And that, WoW!!)
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
22nd Dec 2016 7:08am
thank you Chaotic one you always move me with your enthusiasm and highlighted some of my favorite parts in this write as well.. I deeply appreciate you :)
love Crim
love Crim
Re. the life and death of me
22nd Dec 2016 3:09am
I love the juxtaposition between the rugged strength of him, his tendency toward rough...and the gentle manner in which you portray his interaction with you. It defines you as something precious...which you damn well are! I absolutely love this one, Brenda! :)
Willow
Willow
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
22nd Dec 2016 7:09am
aw thank you lovely Willow yes there is so much beauty in him.. his tough yet gentle nature.. so happy you see this beauty reflected in my face :)
love Brenda
love Brenda
Re. the life and death of me
Anonymous
22nd Dec 2016 3:46am
Wow Crim.......you ink so soulfully at times I feel as if you've crawled inside me and wrote what you felt me feel........how powerful a man can be at times.......yet shows passion........luv how you so gracefully captured each side of him.......enjoyed......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
22nd Dec 2016 7:11am
thank you dearest Flower this man brings out all of my heart and passion.. I'm happy it comes through in this write and that you could identify..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. the life and death of me
22nd Dec 2016 3:54am
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22nd Dec 2016 7:12am
Re. the life and death of me
22nd Dec 2016 7:15am
sex & lovers that make you live & die & live again, Crim;
a darker blend of sexuality...
a darker blend of sexuality...
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
22nd Dec 2016 7:18am
thank you John I love the way you see things because that is indeed what it's like..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. the life and death of me
Anonymous
23rd Dec 2016 4:42am
Brenda.. simply brilliant.. damn you're on a roll.. love you..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
28th Dec 2016 9:10am
Re. the life and death of me
25th Dec 2016 3:01am
Re: Re. the life and death of me
28th Dec 2016 9:10am
Re. the life and death of me
25th Dec 2016 5:51am
Loved the photo, Crim, and such amazing poetry to capture us.
The passion of an artist is simply immeasurable...
The passion of an artist is simply immeasurable...
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
28th Dec 2016 9:11am
yes it's those poetic souls that capture our hearts thank you lovely Kasai..
love Crim
love Crim
Re. the life and death of me
o'my damn ladyloves!,
woman you.. .well nevermind,
you already know how I feel
bijizus
-Howlings
woman you.. .well nevermind,
you already know how I feel
bijizus
-Howlings
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
28th Dec 2016 9:12am
Re. the life and death of me
31st Dec 2016 5:01am
How I missed your work, dear Crim!
"touches my tough spots
with such tenderness
that I soften and open to you" > to find someone who's capable of doing that is such a treasure!
Great ink... love this one!!!
Love, Duende
"touches my tough spots
with such tenderness
that I soften and open to you" > to find someone who's capable of doing that is such a treasure!
Great ink... love this one!!!
Love, Duende
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Re: Re. the life and death of me
2nd Jan 2017 8:05pm
thank you beautiful Duende yes it is a rare thing to find someone who affects you so..
love Crim
love Crim