to understand

Powerful muscular stuff al

Hey Van,

Thank you for the visit, read and comment.

Al

Dearest AL powerful write so very sad you encountered such a human demon..

I know that look of hate well my friend..

evil lurks among us disguised as one of us..

though once drugs take over that's it the humanity is gone..

"Those dark irises  
glazed big black moon pupils  
bloodshot whites; "

gave me chills..

so glad you are safe now..

love Brenda

Thank you Brenda;

It's the craziest thing. Realising that you know an emotion, but have no idea of how deep it can run aimed by a unknown person who you have never met until that instant. The moment of introduction is their moment of display.

wow; chilling... I just can't relate!

Much love
Al-x-

Al, the second stanza is intriguing. I picture a couple eating in silence where the only animation is the rise and fall of forks. Sobering piece. Bravo!

My most loved part of writing, is how different people read the same words and take completely different things from them.

Your picture here, will live with me forever. Your positive image is beautiful in comparison and I am absolutely delighted that, it did that!

Thank you ever so much sir!

... I'm wondering about removing the 'hello' on the first line? I'm just thinking that 'I don't relate to the hands' is a much stronger opening as a stand alone statement? Just a thought my dear.  

The second stanza is on point, and is almost a very hard image to digest in its vividness. That's what makes it work.  

The rhyming ending almost brings a sort of logical sense to the madness that occurred within the poem. I wasn't sure about the rhyming end when I read it this morning, but actually I think it's grown on me.  

Emotional read, because we know a little background info about this poem. Very, very glad you're safe and sound though. People are awful sometimes.  

Thanking you for the read :)

Hello

Haha! Only kidding, you're right. I had to let it settle with out it. But once it had. It showed me that the word was redundant.

The rhyme was a unplanned thing...
just "hate" & "relate" do that
Once it was there. It kinda sat there looking at me daringly. I took the dare.

Thank you for your eyes
caring and kindness
just for being there.

Love
Al-x-

I'm agreeing with Missy here on all points. Glad you're safe most of all.

Thank you my special friend.
There was a moment there...
I'm very grateful for your visit and comment.

Love
Al-x-

I have to give you PEN PRAISE, so glad you were recommended by
someone dear to me. Purely raw.

Well if I was recommended; please be kind enough to thank our friend on my behalf.

Welcome to my book of words and thank you for your comment and the listing.

I do hope we can build a mutually beneficial relationship. That lasts a lifetime.

Blue Skies & Gratitude at you

Al-x-