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perchance
I woke up in the middle of the night & thought I was alone.
I pulled you, sleeping, into me. you protested a little with
your shoulders, then settled calmly. I thought about how
terrible it was to be alone, so sad I nearly cried. when I
inhaled the scent of your hair, I felt relief. your arm moved
across my chest & you caressed me firmly. you mumbled
something, a distortion of the word 'love,' & I imagined you
were dreaming a beautiful dream.
I remembered how beautiful you are, how extraordinary it is
to have you. I must be a Viking who has gone to Valhalla &
been given his reward, to have you. to have you.
then I fell asleep, & dreamed I was alone...
(Artist unknown)
Published 23rd Nov 2016
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Anonymous
23rd Nov 2016 3:31pm
The visuals and deep longing is so very potent in this piece.
The reader is truly captured in this moment. In your thoughts.
So achingly beautiful 💓
The reader is truly captured in this moment. In your thoughts.
So achingly beautiful 💓
23rd Nov 2016 5:49pm
These words ache with loneliness, such a sad,loving write.
Fantastic poetry paired with a lovely nude.
To have something so beautiful,
a love to hold us even in our aloneness
And in our dreams. If only...
Fantastic poetry paired with a lovely nude.
To have something so beautiful,
a love to hold us even in our aloneness
And in our dreams. If only...
23rd Nov 2016 6:29pm
23rd Nov 2016 10:18pm
What a remarkable twist of events, John.
Straying from your norm to sleep, perchance to dream.
Straying from your norm to sleep, perchance to dream.
23rd Nov 2016 10:48pm
Anonymous
24th Nov 2016 4:18pm
These words can be felt deeply, John...speaking to many I'm sure. Your tiny details in this one creates a huge image...loved this as always. With love, always - Kitten xoxo
This is just beautiful and heartbreaking , visuals and emotions involved are breath taking and sensual . It feels serene almost until the last line. A dreamy write
25th Nov 2016 3:11pm
Not to be a Grammar Nazi, but I think "dreamt" is more appropriate than "dreamed" in the last sentence, given the third person, past-tense narration of the poem as a whole. That nitpick aside, I enjoyed this piece. It's charming and little, a delicate thumbnail portrait of post-coital bliss, with a great use of repetition near the end ("to have you"), as though the narrator is testing the phrase on his tongue for its pleasurable aspect. Thank you for the read!
