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Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
how soothing are your whispers
I hear thru the midst of a storm
comforting words louder than thunder
softness of your breath upon my skin
powerfully swirling around me
touching thru my soul ever so tenderly
how gracefully you make my heart smile
when dark clouds darken my sky
as purple passion rages within me
they always say,
don't sweat the little things
and suddenly there you stand
making my heart sing
I thought things were cool
ashes doused with water
then with a stroke of your pen
the coals flamed hotter
Fall leaves falling
cool north wind blowing
you walking the paths of my mind
your stiffened desires showing
clouds begin to gently cry
your sweetness soaking me
feeling my heart beat happily
flowers swaying in the gentle breeze
sun peaking thru white clouds
hearing laughter once again
each other's thoughts embracing
being carried by the mighty wind
from your mind to my heart
side by side laying in a field
watching clouds floating by
sunshine warm on our skin
the wind carries our sighs
a dog floats by chasing a cat
a dinosaur and a duck
a leprechaun behind a rainbow
winks at us for luck
the tall grass cushions us
hiding our bed of bliss
the birds chirping seem to say
go on, give her a kiss
I hear thru the midst of a storm
comforting words louder than thunder
softness of your breath upon my skin
powerfully swirling around me
touching thru my soul ever so tenderly
how gracefully you make my heart smile
when dark clouds darken my sky
as purple passion rages within me
they always say,
don't sweat the little things
and suddenly there you stand
making my heart sing
I thought things were cool
ashes doused with water
then with a stroke of your pen
the coals flamed hotter
Fall leaves falling
cool north wind blowing
you walking the paths of my mind
your stiffened desires showing
clouds begin to gently cry
your sweetness soaking me
feeling my heart beat happily
flowers swaying in the gentle breeze
sun peaking thru white clouds
hearing laughter once again
each other's thoughts embracing
being carried by the mighty wind
from your mind to my heart
side by side laying in a field
watching clouds floating by
sunshine warm on our skin
the wind carries our sighs
a dog floats by chasing a cat
a dinosaur and a duck
a leprechaun behind a rainbow
winks at us for luck
the tall grass cushions us
hiding our bed of bliss
the birds chirping seem to say
go on, give her a kiss
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Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 2:40am
What a delightful read! Your voices make beautiful music together. I loved the field and clouds. And the last line is perfect! Great job, both of you! ☺
Willow
Willow
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 3:23am
Hey Willow.......we so appreciate you leaving luv upon our ink......glad you enjoyed our voices together........thank you......luv & hugs from us both xo :)
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower
Hi OS......we thank you for your words......glad you enjoyed our joined ink.......happy we didn't sing off key.......honored by the RL add on......luv & hugs from both of us xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 3:36am
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Hey Jerry......we thank you for your thoughts.......happy you enjoyed our expressions.....it was fun to write.......luv & hugs from us both xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 4:38am
Ah... this is so lovely and dreamy :-)
Your voices merged flawlessly... a beautiful collab!
That last line made me smile... go on, giver her kiss: adorable!
Well done, you two!
Your voices merged flawlessly... a beautiful collab!
That last line made me smile... go on, giver her kiss: adorable!
Well done, you two!
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower
Hi Duende......wow.....lovely and dreamy......flawless.......we will take that compliment anyday......we thank you for your wonderful words you've left us......so happy you enjoyed this......that line is classic......LOL!! Luv & hugs from both of us xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 5:09am
Absolutely a fine marriage of energy, emotion, melody. Really enjoyable. Loved the second to last stanza in particular for its playful creativity and rhyme.
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 2:14am
HI DC......we thank you for joining us on our adventure thru the storm........thrilled you enjoyed this......that's a great stanza for sure......luv & hugs from both of us xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 6:39am
the colllab is seamless, could have easily been written by one poet, excellent work :-)
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower
Hey David......we appreciate your wonderful insight on this......thank you for the read and support......luv & hugs from both of us xo :)
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14th Nov 2016 7:54am
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 2:27am
Thank you EW.......we are glad you enjoyed this with us......luv & hugs from us both xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 8:37am
This is wonderfully written and your voices mesh together quite well. I love the imagery within this piece.
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 2:30am
HI ES.......we are very happy you've enjoyed the imagery and our voices meshing together.......always happy to see your smile.....luv & hugs from both of us xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 11:36am
Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 2:34am
HI PS......always great to see you......we thank you for taking time for us.....glad you enjoyed......luv & hugs from both of us xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
14th Nov 2016 10:43pm
Such a sweet write, Flower and Tornado. It's lighthearted romance with a playful touch, gazing up at clouds putting on a show for you. And then there's that rainbow to consider. Fine work from you both. Just keep the whispering down when I'm trying to sleep.:)
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 2:43am
Hey Crow........we are so happy you e enjoyed the imagery.......that's the fun part of writing.......to imagine with the mind......ok ok......we keep the whispers down at midnight......LOL!! Thank you for sharing a laugh.......luv & hugs from both of us xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 1:31am
I love the title and the voices meld wonderfully. I particularly enjoyed some of the imagery.
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Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 2:52am
Hi Ahavati......we thank you very much........glad you enjoyed this all the way around......honored you smiling upon it......luv & hugs from both of us xo :)
Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 2:35pm
Re: Re. Whispers Louder Than Thunder (collab with Tornado & flower)
15th Nov 2016 2:39pm
Awe JJ.....we thank you for smiling upon our ink.......hope you can feel my smile back to you......luv & hugs from both of us xo :)