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Long Gone
And I thought,
I could leave you behind.
And I thought,
I could see into your mind.
But all I know,
Is that you're long gone,
away from here.
My heart calls out to yours,
but where there once was an answer
is now an echo.
A shadow of who you once were.
I can almost feel you near,
but then I remember,
that you're long gone,
away frome here.
I could leave you behind.
And I thought,
I could see into your mind.
But all I know,
Is that you're long gone,
away from here.
My heart calls out to yours,
but where there once was an answer
is now an echo.
A shadow of who you once were.
I can almost feel you near,
but then I remember,
that you're long gone,
away frome here.
Published 22nd Jul 2011
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23rd Jul 2011 1:35pm
i like this jmn.
it is powerful in its execution and reeks of emotion. also i like poems that begin with and.
i am wondering if the last line on the fourth really fits the stanza, it seems on its own or something. maybe 'a shadow where you once were' might fit better.
anyhoo i enjoyed reading this and look forward to more.
fair play!
it is powerful in its execution and reeks of emotion. also i like poems that begin with and.
i am wondering if the last line on the fourth really fits the stanza, it seems on its own or something. maybe 'a shadow where you once were' might fit better.
anyhoo i enjoyed reading this and look forward to more.
fair play!
23rd Jul 2011 5:38pm
Thank you Eamon. I appreciate the feedback.
I saw in your profile that you are from Ireland. I have always loved Ireland and plan on going next year FINALLY, so any useful tips you could give would be great. :)
I saw in your profile that you are from Ireland. I have always loved Ireland and plan on going next year FINALLY, so any useful tips you could give would be great. :)
you will surly love it here.
tips: don't fly ryan air.
try to go off the beaten track when you can.
city's you should visit; Dublin,Galway,Derry, oh and Offaly is big now since Obama discovered he had roots there and paid it a visit.
really it depends what you want out of a visit here. Ireland caters for all needs.
p.s don't forget to bring plenty of Euro's because the country is kind of bankrupt.
oh and that red hair will give you instant ancestry to red hugh o neil ( you can say you are a relative)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hugh_O%27Neill,_2nd_Earl_of_Tyrone
tips: don't fly ryan air.
try to go off the beaten track when you can.
city's you should visit; Dublin,Galway,Derry, oh and Offaly is big now since Obama discovered he had roots there and paid it a visit.
really it depends what you want out of a visit here. Ireland caters for all needs.
p.s don't forget to bring plenty of Euro's because the country is kind of bankrupt.
oh and that red hair will give you instant ancestry to red hugh o neil ( you can say you are a relative)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hugh_O%27Neill,_2nd_Earl_of_Tyrone
25th Jul 2011 1:17pm
Thank you for the lovely tips Eamon. :) I definitely intend upon getting off the beaten track. My husband (Darkbee) has some relatives there that we plan on staying with for a short time so I'm hoping that they help immerse us in the culture.
25th Jul 2011 1:28pm
that sounds great, darren is such a nice dude, we all should meet up and get pissed in the fine tradition of ireland :)
25th Jul 2011 1:34pm
LOL, indeed. Darren had mentioned how you were from Ireland and seems to reciprocate the feeling that you too are a nice dude. :)
AS for meeting up, we shall be all over Ireland since I have never been, so I don't see why it meeting up wouldn't be doable. I look forward to experience the lovely Emerald Isle up close and personal and although circumstance has often gotten in the way of my doing so, I am determined to do so next year.
AS for meeting up, we shall be all over Ireland since I have never been, so I don't see why it meeting up wouldn't be doable. I look forward to experience the lovely Emerald Isle up close and personal and although circumstance has often gotten in the way of my doing so, I am determined to do so next year.
