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'Nine Song Yellow River First Bay'
Four races of conditioned evolution
migrating through seven continents
singing nine songs into the river;
a sheet music of stumbling notes
wading through yellow water
toward first bay's orb'd mouth;
its throat swallowing movement
into a bright chorus of raised voice
pressurized into one meaning;
each member an interlocked color
of skin beneath dark waters raising
the Homosapien octave together.
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Photo credit: 黄河
九曲黄河第一湾
(Nine Song Yellow River First Bay)
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10th Jul 2016 5:47pm
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10th Jul 2016 7:01pm
Mystical yet political - a call to all who wade forward through the shallow - eloquent my sister
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12th Jul 2016 2:48am
Thank you my brother. I appreciate you greatly and consider you a blessing in my life.
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10th Jul 2016 7:17pm
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12th Jul 2016 2:51am
I am happy it brought you peace, Crim. The water, even when raging in anger, or flooding uncontrollably, brings me a sense of peace I can only attribute to the part of me, as mostly water, that rages with it, and thus understands.
You are a lovely gift to us here.
You are a lovely gift to us here.
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10th Jul 2016 11:19pm
...every single time I read your work, I'm left in awe!
Your pen's tip always seem to graze the surface of my spirituality. Lovely ink!
Your pen's tip always seem to graze the surface of my spirituality. Lovely ink!
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12th Jul 2016 2:55am
I can say the same of your responses, Tara. Your ability to uplift and encourage the writers here is a blessing as important, if not more so, than the poems. For, though a poem is such without a reader, what shall it become without one who loves it?
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10th Jul 2016 11:37pm
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12th Jul 2016 2:56am
Thank you, Paul. You know how I feel about your presence here, and the balance of joy you bring.
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11th Jul 2016 1:58am
Your writes are like music and carry the music of the spheres. I find pondering them to be zen.
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12th Jul 2016 3:02am
Zen...that is where I feel the muse is beckoning through eastern images such as these, Daniel. It's new territory, and certain powers seem to want to control it. I feel like I'm a ship sometimes, being sailed by the muse right through the chaos of a battle for control. It's quite turbulent at times, more than peaceful at others.
Thank you for your continued support. I am most grateful.
Thank you for your continued support. I am most grateful.
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11th Jul 2016 8:04am
A masterpiece in the metaphoric world called life my man. Great piece as I'm a great fan of the metaphoric puzzle in wich keeps minds deprecated wild hearts and soles wonder of each other. Greatly said however I hear the colors of the river shouting prosecute the hypocratic of the world for its war crimes right now. That being this evilly blessed land in wich they call the Americas. Great wright and if you don't mind I shall print this and frame this possibly share with the world one day in the soon calling of life. Thanks man. Great one hear.
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12th Jul 2016 3:04am
The river things different things to different people. I am blessed to know that you were able to hear the colors and received a message. You honor me with your response and presence. Thank you.
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11th Jul 2016 8:18am
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12th Jul 2016 3:07am
thank you so much Dean. I always love seeing my poetry through your eyes, and I'm happy that you have returned. thank you for checking in on me, your response means the world.
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12th Jul 2016 5:50am
not merely a song, but a river full of songs.
you see the voices among us, here we have gathered...
you see the voices among us, here we have gathered...
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12th Jul 2016 2:21pm
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12th Jul 2016 8:54am
when i grow up
i want to write
like this...
... like ripples
in the sands
of karesansui
xo
i want to write
like this...
... like ripples
in the sands
of karesansui
xo
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12th Jul 2016 2:20pm
ripples
in the sands
of karesansui
That very statement is a poem
in and of itself, my dear Katja.
Beautiful response. Thank you.
in the sands
of karesansui
That very statement is a poem
in and of itself, my dear Katja.
Beautiful response. Thank you.
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