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In Your Face
What you say to a poet should be
carefully measured, not edited.
Do not mistake caramel
and the sweetness
of silence for censorship.
If she is blind, she will still peel
one good layer of your laugh,
she will have an analyst come
to your window in the night
and scrape the breath
from your pane to ensure
you are not sneaking a secret --
if she is not blind she will
poke holes through the air,
a pocket to insert your 7th
grade fear of mundane,
you're exquisite talent
for evasion as a child,
your distaste for girls
with a pierced agenda.
You will have to entertain
her by translating
something once
and only once,
so long ago it was
an ancestor to a formula
for the very sound of speech.
She will give you the entire
chocolate cake.
But, if you don't think
of offering her the farm
your leather jacket
a strange plot of land by the lake
the DNA of your first skinned knee
lobbed off in hesitation of wholeness,
then don't offer a poet an excuse,
an orb of onion rotating, sweltering
in its own sweaty juice, because
she will lob it back in your face.
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Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 00:24am
I think a poet wants only
to be understood
and often ignores the fact
that so does everyone else -
or is that just me... :)
to be understood
and often ignores the fact
that so does everyone else -
or is that just me... :)
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Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 00:27am
Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 1:00am
poets are often
inexcusable -
no damn it, that
really is me !
(apart from the
poet bit... )
inexcusable -
no damn it, that
really is me !
(apart from the
poet bit... )
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Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 1:16am
Intense, Ahavati! I keep going back and reading it. I rather like it quite a bit. ☺
Willow
Willow
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Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 2:55am
lol This is different. :) Chocolate cake sounds good, but I just finished dinner. I would ask her for a rain check. Keep your hands off my leather jacket! ;)
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Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 3:18am
This was sleep deprivation and an old mothball of emotion hanging out in a closet I finally cleaned. Haha.
Seriously, I just got a 50lb rescue dog last week who has been, shall we say... a bit clingy. He's relaxing now. Add a visiting grandchild and there's no room in the inn. I am dreaming of sleep. Sleeeeep.
Seriously, I just got a 50lb rescue dog last week who has been, shall we say... a bit clingy. He's relaxing now. Add a visiting grandchild and there's no room in the inn. I am dreaming of sleep. Sleeeeep.
Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 3:22am
I love your writings so much and they are so immeasurably full of wisdom and meaning that I feel like I could read them a hundred times each and only be touching the hem of your depth. Namaste.
Aww you rock! I always tell someone who is thinking of getting a new pet, get a rescue animal! Save a life! *hugs*
Aww you rock! I always tell someone who is thinking of getting a new pet, get a rescue animal! Save a life! *hugs*
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Re: Re. In Your Face
Thank you for such kind words. I am humbled.
Cooper is an 8 year old border collie mix, and originally was rescued from the side of the interstate in a cardboard box. He'd been with the same owner for those 8 years, so when she was forced to relinquish him it broke both their hearts. No one wanted him because of his age, but my grandson claimed him the moment he saw his photo. He's slowly healing and actually became frisky and playful today. :)
Cooper is an 8 year old border collie mix, and originally was rescued from the side of the interstate in a cardboard box. He'd been with the same owner for those 8 years, so when she was forced to relinquish him it broke both their hearts. No one wanted him because of his age, but my grandson claimed him the moment he saw his photo. He's slowly healing and actually became frisky and playful today. :)
Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 4:23am
Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 5:52am
Choco'cake (Eat It too)......but
onion-sweat in the face....phew, no words......
brilliant imagery for the sub'ject at hand
onion-sweat in the face....phew, no words......
brilliant imagery for the sub'ject at hand
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Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 8:09am
I imagine there is not a gentle discourse among poets,
each having a personal vision of the sculpting of a poem.
great debates around coffee or tea. hold the onions.
striking verse...
each having a personal vision of the sculpting of a poem.
great debates around coffee or tea. hold the onions.
striking verse...
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Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 7:30pm
Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 12:17pm
Wow! This is not the quiet contemplative intellectualism I've come to expect from your poetry. Fun stuff!
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Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 7:30pm
Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 4:51pm
This is wonderful Ahavati ... fantastic imagery ... I keep coming back for more, just the chocolate cake ... :) ox
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Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 7:33pm
Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 4:57pm
Haha! I just adore you.. this is
going to be with me a long
while.
must confess my reaction was
exactly this: "Whaaaa?
lol, high fives darling or a
smiling wink will do fine.
Love your truths.
-Howlings
going to be with me a long
while.
must confess my reaction was
exactly this: "Whaaaa?
lol, high fives darling or a
smiling wink will do fine.
Love your truths.
-Howlings
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Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 7:34pm
Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 5:39pm
So much, so much... I can barely handle one idea at a time. Part of me feels like a primary (grade) schooler in short pants, more of me is desperate to meet these worldly girls with their pierced agendas...
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Re: Re. In Your Face
8th Jun 2016 7:35pm
Re: Re. In Your Face
9th Jun 2016 4:51am
Sounds very good and as long as the agendas are bling bedecked and sparkling...
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Re. In Your Face
13th Jun 2016 2:59pm
I love this - yes... much like talking to a Comic, one must show a considered caution when speaking to a Poet - for both, material is everywhere...
geoff
geoff
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Re: Re. In Your Face
13th Jun 2016 6:54pm
Re. In Your Face
22nd Jun 2016 7:15pm
no onions then. she doesn't like onions. got it.
ah but true, true. we want so much.
i keep coming back and i think its time i put it in my list.
ah but true, true. we want so much.
i keep coming back and i think its time i put it in my list.
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Re: Re. In Your Face
22nd Jun 2016 7:18pm
Re. In Your Face
5th Aug 2016 6:02pm
love love love it!!!
Ahavati ..
i love the way your mood swings
within this vibe..
ahhh
so damn scathing...
you can be
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Re. In Your Face
6th Feb 2021 8:37pm
Not sure what motivated this write, but it has some real teeth (fangs). I loved it.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re. In Your Face
7th Feb 2021 5:15am
Dear A,
Booya! In your face take no prisoners sort of write. I’m feeling it. Also, there’s a mention of chocolate cake...might there be any left? I like this archived piece of Ahavati. (Don’t forget the cake please.😊) H🌷
Booya! In your face take no prisoners sort of write. I’m feeling it. Also, there’s a mention of chocolate cake...might there be any left? I like this archived piece of Ahavati. (Don’t forget the cake please.😊) H🌷
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Re: Re. In Your Face
7th Feb 2021 2:40pm
Re: Re. In Your Face
7th Feb 2021 4:01pm
Probably just some weak coffee and some good gossip-I mean intellectual CONVERSATION! 😬
(Don’t forget the cake! 😉)
(Don’t forget the cake! 😉)
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