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~His
I still burn
brightly
as I think of him
Oh, how my
name tastes
on his lips
His sweet tongue
speaks as if I'm a
poem
He possessed
my word's
while crawling
across my
skin
I wear his
bones
while the
milky moon
shines on
brightly
as I think of him
Oh, how my
name tastes
on his lips
His sweet tongue
speaks as if I'm a
poem
He possessed
my word's
while crawling
across my
skin
I wear his
bones
while the
milky moon
shines on
Published 1st Mar 2016
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1st Mar 2016 11:22pm
2nd Mar 2016 00:35am
2nd Mar 2016 2:58am
Simply beautiful, Tommie. I love this passage:
"His sweet tongue
speaks as if I'm a
poem"
"His sweet tongue
speaks as if I'm a
poem"
2nd Mar 2016 4:28am
I'm glad you liked it GW!
Thank you for your wonderful comment and reading my blah blah blah! Haha 😊😆
Thank you for your wonderful comment and reading my blah blah blah! Haha 😊😆
2nd Mar 2016 5:27am
2nd Mar 2016 6:31am
Favourite lines (minor spelling mistake apart):
His sweet tongue
speaks as if I'm a
poem
He possessed
my words {note - no apostrophes in plurals)
while crawling
across my
skin
"I wear his bones" - sounds like you loved him to death!
His sweet tongue
speaks as if I'm a
poem
He possessed
my words {note - no apostrophes in plurals)
while crawling
across my
skin
"I wear his bones" - sounds like you loved him to death!
2nd Mar 2016 9:09pm
Thank you for the correction SS. 😊
The expression I wear his bones meaning he's on me, making love to me. I wear him well. ☺
The expression I wear his bones meaning he's on me, making love to me. I wear him well. ☺
2nd Mar 2016 9:15am
it's in the burning & the moonlight, Tommie.
those little phrases of love, they are poems...
those little phrases of love, they are poems...
2nd Mar 2016 9:11pm
You're so right John.
I always look forward to your comments.
Thank you very much 😊
I always look forward to your comments.
Thank you very much 😊
2nd Mar 2016 9:12pm
3rd Mar 2016 4:52am
Gorgeous piece tommielynn. You've got a wonderful imagination and expressive mind. I loved it.
John
John
3rd Mar 2016 1:42pm
