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She Had To Go.....
She had to go…
packed her grief and misery, first class,
the usual business.
Air agitated and disconcerted by
her exhale….
She spoke about the taste of him
still beneath her skin, tinseled in her sweat.
Couldn’t evade the passion he always
left behind on her silk sheets of indigo.
When he fucked her,
each deep stroke was a lie…
a crime, a trespass,
a cycle of daily irreconcilable differences-
(the bullshit kind)
but she still widened her thighs and moaned anyway.
Her face quickly distant, removed from-
rapture’s grasp, veiled in his unconcern tears…
She plots of tactics escaping carnal deeds
with reverse grinds,
and all the ruse betwixt puckered lips and spit
he mauled her delicate skin with.
But she’s no damsel in distress
yet the riled onslaught to her fruitfulness
caused her to plea for security.
She was just tired of his negative presence
with no positive energy to sustain a vibrant feel.
She had to go…..
bags packed, first class ticket-
with the faint scent of his afterglow,
his cologne, his presence…..
Gone.
Rain~
Disclaimer: ( completely fictional)
Written by
rain1courtel
(RainC)
Published 5th Feb 2016
| Edited 1st Apr 2016
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Re. She Had To Go.....
Anonymous
5th Feb 2016 3:15am
BRAVO BRAVO Lady Rain.......luvin this one and you know why.....LOL!!! Enough is enough!! Great write...made me smile.....purple luv your way xo :)
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5th Feb 2016 3:39am
hey purple princess, yes, I believe I do know why... :) Glad you like the ink, and took a smile from it...... xo
#hugs
#hugs
Re. She Had To Go.....
5th Feb 2016 3:25am
OMG Rain!
I am thunderstruck! My heart bleeds and breathes for you sis...
This was so emotional for me it hit home. I know you chica almost 4 years babe
and trough your poetry you share I know you pretty well....
i love you lady chin up, better to move on and live than stay and die,,,
Jackie xoxox
I am thunderstruck! My heart bleeds and breathes for you sis...
This was so emotional for me it hit home. I know you chica almost 4 years babe
and trough your poetry you share I know you pretty well....
i love you lady chin up, better to move on and live than stay and die,,,
Jackie xoxox
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hey J! :) So thrilled at your excitement of how this related to you in a tiny way, not thrilled about the pain of course, but it's always a joy to get readers to feel your ink, no matter the emotion, though this ink is completely a figment of my wild imagination. You know how I get down... :) Better add a disclaimer. Thanks sexy one and appreciate you listing her.... #Hugs
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5th Feb 2016 4:12am
Re. She Had To Go.....
Now you put another song in my head, Eric Clapton's "She's Gone", not to be mistaken for the tune by Hall and Oates.
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8th Feb 2016 6:46pm
Hey Ted, both songs, including H&Oates brings a great vibe to this ink. ;) Your musical references are always so spot on. Thank you hun!
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Fictional perhaps, but there is truth in the story that everyone relates to... When sex is nothing more than a convenient replacement for masturbation because your hands are tired of the same old familiar lies, it's time to pack yer baggage and go...
JJ
JJ
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Maybe a lot of folks can relate to this jj, doubt if everyone can. Though it is a damn shame that this is truth for so many. The inspiration for this ink was the movie ‘The Color Purple’. I couldn’t help but spin it with this era's mentality.. Thank you luv for reading... :)
Re. She Had To Go.....
5th Feb 2016 6:06am
A very picturesque narrative from one who I cosider a superior creative force. Your ink always has such feeling and depth. I suppose that's author always owns a piece of my heart and mind :-)
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8th Feb 2016 6:58pm
‘a superior creative force’? You’re too kind Archie, thank you! :) I channeled the inner spirit of Ms. Celie and her no love, desire, emotions for mister, while he pleasured himself’ and she just lays there in disgust, allowing him to…well….…you’ve seen the movie. Your last line…. so sweet! xo Thank you for listing her!
Re. She Had To Go.....
comes a time you gotta load up the old Dodge & drive away.
one of those rain-y night proverbs...
one of those rain-y night proverbs...
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8th Feb 2016 6:59pm
Love it John! :) Riding off in the dodge has such a vivid image, then a ford. Lol… Thank you so much!
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5th Feb 2016 12:46pm
At least she was flying out first class
Hopefully he's forgotten by the second glass of champagne
Intense rage
Like
Hopefully he's forgotten by the second glass of champagne
Intense rage
Like
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8th Feb 2016 7:03pm
Lol…maybe by the third glass, Poet. Hell, a whole bottle of champagne may be needed just because... :0
Thank you so much for stopping by, gotta catch-up on some of your ink in a few…
Thank you so much for stopping by, gotta catch-up on some of your ink in a few…
Re. She Had To Go.....
5th Feb 2016 3:25pm
Mesmerizing, intriguing, so close and dense a piece, dear Rain. you're a wordsmith in the truest sense of a word ... xo
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7th Feb 2016 12:27pm
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8th Feb 2016 7:19pm
Such a flattering response Chiyo! :) Humbled by this! Thank you lovely one, and I appreciate you keeping her.
Pen love~
Pen love~
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8th Feb 2016 7:21pm
…and I share the same response to you Wanderer. :) You’re much too kind! Thank you sir!
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5th Feb 2016 4:36pm
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8th Feb 2016 7:23pm
JT, happy you flew RainAir, glad the ride was smooth! :) Thank you for the visit…
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5th Feb 2016 5:07pm
may be fictional but it's fecking brilliant & damn spot on [take it from a girl who has laundered waaaaay too much cologne from her sheets]
makes a tad tearful, rainy lady, yup definitely got a lil something in my eye
love this
xo
makes a tad tearful, rainy lady, yup definitely got a lil something in my eye
love this
xo
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8th Feb 2016 7:26pm
*hands dancedoll a Kleenex*
We live, we learn, we grow, we evolve …we are not our choices, mistakes, or past transgressions. We are our strength and courage to get through them. I love the truth of your response sweet K! Thank you beautiful and happy you’re keeping her…. xo
We live, we learn, we grow, we evolve …we are not our choices, mistakes, or past transgressions. We are our strength and courage to get through them. I love the truth of your response sweet K! Thank you beautiful and happy you’re keeping her…. xo
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6th Feb 2016 00:07am
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8th Feb 2016 7:30pm
Hey there sweet Je! I’m a fictional kinda’ girl, often! ;) Thank you for stopping by with a little poetic-love. Appreciate ya!
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6th Feb 2016 4:17pm
Such a bitter-sweet , explicit expression of the all too frequent harsh side of reality.....of a relationship based on sexual pleasure....without the 'security' of commitment......a grand finale with all the First CLASS courage to let go.....and move on.....
( Yet...i cannot help thinking, that for those who become involved in such [sad] couplings, there will invariably be those few pieces of ' excess baggage ' that can never be totally left behind............)
Rain, mo Chara....your piece impacts readers with a powerful, emotional punch! But, i am truly glad that it was NOT inspired by personal circumstances! xo
( Yet...i cannot help thinking, that for those who become involved in such [sad] couplings, there will invariably be those few pieces of ' excess baggage ' that can never be totally left behind............)
Rain, mo Chara....your piece impacts readers with a powerful, emotional punch! But, i am truly glad that it was NOT inspired by personal circumstances! xo
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8th Feb 2016 7:34pm
( Yet...i cannot help thinking, that for those who become involved in such [sad] couplings, there will invariably be those few pieces of ' excess baggage ' that can never be totally left behind.......) <---- I love this, but I do feel anybody can shed ‘all’ excessive baggage, if they identify internally what made them initially embrace and hoard the unnecessary burdens. I heart you DarkE! :) Always love your thought provoking comments and positive energy…. Thank you sweety!
Re. She Had To Go.....
6th Feb 2016 6:39pm
She had to go…
packed her grief and misery, first class,
loved this beginning that signals a great journey ahead....love what you do!
TWIRL CURTSY BOW
packed her grief and misery, first class,
loved this beginning that signals a great journey ahead....love what you do!
TWIRL CURTSY BOW
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8th Feb 2016 7:36pm
“loved this beginning that signals a great journey ahead.”<--- That was the daylight I wanted many to see. Thank you for the ink-love Feen! :) Blows kiss and curtsy bow to ya….
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6th Feb 2016 9:45pm
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8th Feb 2016 7:37pm
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7th Feb 2016 10:37am
I believe this could be applicable to either side! N yea felt it for sure my dear Rain :)
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8th Feb 2016 7:40pm
…absolutely Rich! :) Definitely relatable to anyone, regardless the gender…
Appreciate ya! #hugs
Appreciate ya! #hugs
Re. She Had To Go.....
9th Feb 2016 2:23am
Ms. Rain,
Real or not this piece is full of emotion. You really breathed life into this . Loved the perspective from which it was told. Could truly feel the emptiness in the act; as just going through the motions. Hoping that there was something more, but at the same time knowing there wasn't.
Then the realization that you will never have it with the person you are with. Then to face that truth and actually have the courage to leave.
Very real and touching piece. You, Miss Rain always find a way to make an emotional connection between the reader and the ink.
Keith
Real or not this piece is full of emotion. You really breathed life into this . Loved the perspective from which it was told. Could truly feel the emptiness in the act; as just going through the motions. Hoping that there was something more, but at the same time knowing there wasn't.
Then the realization that you will never have it with the person you are with. Then to face that truth and actually have the courage to leave.
Very real and touching piece. You, Miss Rain always find a way to make an emotional connection between the reader and the ink.
Keith
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Keith, I really love reading your comments. You always share how the ink made you feel and that's so refreshing. Just an adding positive flare to your poetic support and greatly appreciated. Most of what I write is 90% fictional, but I always find something real to give the ink a heartbeat, even if it's a faint one. Thank you darlin'!
Re. She Had To Go.....
10th Feb 2016 9:41pm
My dearest Rain,
I can't help but compliment the soul and sensuous tones you always present so boldly. "I'm in love" , with your words, your phrases, your vibes, your pen.. Just lord have mercy ..
😍😍 You always leave me in awe and needing more!!!
Sending hugs and love right in your direction lovely
I can't help but compliment the soul and sensuous tones you always present so boldly. "I'm in love" , with your words, your phrases, your vibes, your pen.. Just lord have mercy ..
😍😍 You always leave me in awe and needing more!!!
Sending hugs and love right in your direction lovely
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11th Feb 2016 3:10am
....lil' sis, your comments are beautiful, positive, charming, and inspiring, just like your personality! :)
I smile each time you visit me. Thank you lovely one....xo
I smile each time you visit me. Thank you lovely one....xo
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Re: Re. She Had To Go.....
hey there good-looking, I think I also told you that I adore the love/hate relationship you have with my ink. I'm pleased to paint a shadow that mimic a reflection of old ways and tendencies. Makes you appreciate self-growth. :) Thanks hun, will be catching up to your work and a few others in a couple of days. Not in a mood to read poetry right now.... Pen Respect~
Re. She Had To Go.....
17th Feb 2016 5:54am
Yep.... Time to go indeed.. your insights peels away the layers exposing the rotted fruit within. ... your pen pierces with such precision Rain. ..absolute in it's aim. .
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hey Naajir, thanks luv! Inspired by the scene of Mister climbing on top of Ms. Celie doin' his business... (Color Purple)