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Now I'm Asking
I never asked you to return all the thing's you've taken from me
Love wasn't supposed to cost anything yet you put a price on it
My lifetime was yours and yours mine so I was told
I'd do anything for you turned into I could care less for you
Forever has a different meaning to you then it does to me
Now I'm asking you to give me my forever back
Love wasn't supposed to cost anything yet you put a price on it
My lifetime was yours and yours mine so I was told
I'd do anything for you turned into I could care less for you
Forever has a different meaning to you then it does to me
Now I'm asking you to give me my forever back
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Re. Now I'm Asking
14th Jan 2016 7:44pm
Favourite line, for turn of phrase:
I'd do anything for you turned to I could care less for you.
I'd do anything for you turned to I could care less for you.
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14th Jan 2016 8:38pm
Re. Now I'm Asking
14th Jan 2016 9:18pm
I read this earlier, but didn't comment because I wanted
to come back to it. What a fantastic piece of writing, You
summed up what all the sweet words finally become when
it is time to leave the cruelty of the man who uttered them.
It is a shame we have to turn our words uttered in at the start
of the romance into utter lies at the end of the same romance.
Staggering poetry, Tommie!
to come back to it. What a fantastic piece of writing, You
summed up what all the sweet words finally become when
it is time to leave the cruelty of the man who uttered them.
It is a shame we have to turn our words uttered in at the start
of the romance into utter lies at the end of the same romance.
Staggering poetry, Tommie!
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Re: Re. Now I'm Asking
14th Jan 2016 9:23pm
I know there's not a "forever "....good/bad thing's come to an end. Thank you standingmyground for your great word's 😊
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Re. Now I'm Asking
15th Jan 2016 7:23pm
It's all too sad that so many lovers', or husbands', words aren't binding. Forever turns out to be finite. An excellent write with a heart-breaking last line, Tommie. Loved this!
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