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What I've Become..
A Vacant Tomb,
I’m Dying Inside,
I've Nowhere To Run,
Nowhere To Hide..
A Cold Lifeless Shell,
Is What I’ve Become,
My Aching Body,
Has Now Succumb..
Dying,
Decayed,
My Brain Has Deceased,
Failing To Function,
My Souls Been Released,
Relinquished,
Leaving My Shell,
Wish Someone Would Save Me,
From This Living Hell..
My Mind And Soul,
Has Deserted My Carcass,
My Body Now Limp,
My Brain Lifeless..
I’m Dying Inside,
I've Nowhere To Run,
Nowhere To Hide..
A Cold Lifeless Shell,
Is What I’ve Become,
My Aching Body,
Has Now Succumb..
Dying,
Decayed,
My Brain Has Deceased,
Failing To Function,
My Souls Been Released,
Relinquished,
Leaving My Shell,
Wish Someone Would Save Me,
From This Living Hell..
My Mind And Soul,
Has Deserted My Carcass,
My Body Now Limp,
My Brain Lifeless..
Published 24th Jun 2011
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24th Jun 2011 2:19pm
24th Jun 2011 4:06pm
Don't do fiction Miss Gigi, and yeah I'm back... for now, lol. Hope you ok and looking after yaself :-)
25th Jun 2011 1:14pm
I love the flow here. Very easy to read. I love the line "a vacant tomb". To me it seems your describing your body as it's own empty casket. Great imagery.
25th Jun 2011 2:30pm
Thats kinda what I meant.. My heart left me and all thats left is a shell of what I used to be...
If that makes sense, lol
If that makes sense, lol
14th Nov 2011 6:21am
14th Nov 2011 9:06am
Thank you for your comment,
Luckily this phase has now passed :o)
Have a great day :o)
Luckily this phase has now passed :o)
Have a great day :o)
15th Nov 2011 7:42am
Anonymous
21st Jan 2012 9:04pm
Such frozen emotion perfectly described. Awesome poem.
21st Jan 2012 9:19pm
4th Mar 2012 11:22am
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4th Apr 2012 6:15am
The analogy of a "cold lifeless shell" and "vacant tomb" really painted a picture. Made me get the feeling of emptyness and loneliness. Hope all is well
4th Apr 2012 9:27am
1st Apr 2013 10:45am
Random poem pressed and glad i did
Great flow to this poem
Really bounced along :-)
Great flow to this poem
Really bounced along :-)
11th Apr 2013 11:08pm
Thank you
just signed in after months and months, forgotten about my work here :-)
Have a great day :-)
just signed in after months and months, forgotten about my work here :-)
Have a great day :-)
