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Dark
Sometimes
I invent God in a vain attempt
to survive nights of ungodliness
when I feel the dark
with no compass
beyond the far side of the moon
the way I do now
while you lay with another
even as our bodies mentally touch.
Did you fuck?
I never used to wonder, and just
because I ask doesn't mean I care
though God knows better.
Preview piece: photo by Mathias (France).
I invent God in a vain attempt
to survive nights of ungodliness
when I feel the dark
with no compass
beyond the far side of the moon
the way I do now
while you lay with another
even as our bodies mentally touch.
Did you fuck?
I never used to wonder, and just
because I ask doesn't mean I care
though God knows better.
Preview piece: photo by Mathias (France).
Published 30th Nov 2015
| Edited 6th May 2018
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30th Nov 2015 10:37am
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30th Nov 2015 1:13pm
It takes the contrast of experience for the realization that unavailability is not necessarily what's best for us. Although, it's definitely a required remembrance at some point along the path. How else would we treasure availability? The write conjures a depth of emotion experienced in one way or another by the majority.
30th Nov 2015 3:56pm
Love you my sweet dovey.
To choked up to say anything more.
Thank you
All my heart
Jennifer
To choked up to say anything more.
Thank you
All my heart
Jennifer
Anonymous
30th Nov 2015 5:30pm
Miss Jade(y). . .I felt this exact [same] way when I got divorced even though I had moved on with another some time later. . .So I can relate (not to the loneliness aspect of it) but to the fact that even though I wasn't alone physically, mentally I had trouble adjusting & accepting only because I hadn't allowed the ink on my divorce papers to dry yet. . .A beautiful & thought provoking write. . .xo, Devlin.
12th May 2017 00:26am
I like the deceptive simplicity in this poem. The writing is straightforward, but there's so much running underneath it.
"Did you fuck?" encapsulates such a range of emotions in the scenario you've created.
This took me to an old, familiar place, but in a way I appreciated.
"Did you fuck?" encapsulates such a range of emotions in the scenario you've created.
This took me to an old, familiar place, but in a way I appreciated.
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I thank you for stopping by to one of my older publications. It's nice to see when someone shows their intrepid side to journey into the deeper recesses of something from my early days as a member at this site. I appreciate you leaving me your thoughts & showing your support.
~~Jade
