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Tales from an abandoned Church
Tall against the horizon
of dark grey lighted by a yellow sunset
the spire of the abandon church
now stand to a testimony to nothing
congregations have long gone
their faith as dusts
between cracks of the floor boards
hidden by curled old lino
the stale sweat of hobos
ruled over scents of incense
wax half eaten by rats
adorned an empty altar
yet once the floor was swept
by virginal white gowns
strewn with coloured confetti
adorned with pink roses
once joy of new parents
brushed the air with laughter
as they christened their offspring
wailing into the faith
once songs of praise rang
with adoration to the creator
through the rafters
once music of love played
the sunsets shone through tinted windows
painting hints of heaven
once it was a sanctuary
to all that's holy
it now brood like a forgotten widow
smelling of dusts and decay
the altar where vows were spoken
as vows were broken, as was the altar
so much tales to tell
if only the walls could speak.
*this poem was entered in a competition here. thank you for reading*
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Re. Tales from an abandoned Church
2nd Nov 2015 10:19am
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2nd Nov 2015 10:34am
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2nd Nov 2015 4:05pm
Re. Tales from an abandoned Church
Anonymous
2nd Nov 2015 1:57pm
I love visiting old churches. And some of those thoughts you have ring so true. My favorite
"It now brood like a forgotton widow
Smelling of dust and decay."
"It now brood like a forgotton widow
Smelling of dust and decay."
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2nd Nov 2015 4:06pm
Re. Tales from an abandoned Church
Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Nov 2015 2:42pm
2nd Nov 2015 2:36pm
Absolutely loved this offering and I hope you win the competition.
"it now brood like a forgotten widow "
Best line in the poem, and there were many more I could have chosen
I really related to everything here
From the hobos to the virginal gowns.
It brought back the christening of my daughter Patricia in Flushing, NY.
The hobos? They brought back my two lost decades.
Thank you for this one. It is special, and if it doesn't win, something is wrong in Denmark.
"it now brood like a forgotten widow "
Best line in the poem, and there were many more I could have chosen
I really related to everything here
From the hobos to the virginal gowns.
It brought back the christening of my daughter Patricia in Flushing, NY.
The hobos? They brought back my two lost decades.
Thank you for this one. It is special, and if it doesn't win, something is wrong in Denmark.
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Re: Re. Tales from an abandoned Church
2nd Nov 2015 4:09pm
Scooter, I enjoy writing and putting my thoughts into words. If I win it will be a bonus. I wonder about Denmark. I wonder a lot.:) thanks for being here.
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2nd Nov 2015 4:20pm
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2nd Nov 2015 7:59pm
Re. Tales from an abandoned Church
2nd Nov 2015 6:20pm
Excellent work, Grace. This could be a companion piece to your "Collecting Diamonds." You really have a way with atmosphere.
"yet once the floor was swept
by virginal white gowns
strewn with coloured confetti
adorned with pink roses"
The glass could be stained with tears. Good luck with that comp!
"yet once the floor was swept
by virginal white gowns
strewn with coloured confetti
adorned with pink roses"
The glass could be stained with tears. Good luck with that comp!
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2nd Nov 2015 8:01pm
Re. Tales from an abandoned Church
3rd Nov 2015 10:09am
Old abandoned structures like that church I must say would definitely get me to wondering bout if they could talk! N oh would I wanna take notes, never know, could be some of the most amazing stories ever! lol
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3rd Nov 2015 12:11pm
Re. Tales from an abandoned Church
12th Feb 2016 6:41am
Tales the walls of many abandoned churches can tell, witnessing the cycles of life. (Not so much of them derelict in our country- closed churches frequently become buildings used as quaint housing or workshops etc.)
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12th Feb 2016 7:12am
Yes indeed if only they can speak, there would be many tales to tell, eh. Thanks so much Solomon for reading me. Honoured.