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Anonymous
….in her words, she wrote...
I tried to brush the lust off my shoulders
define what we had,
but the definition grew bolder
changing the meaning with each passing day
~My heart was gentle….
knowing rough would make things complicated.
You should have walked away from love’s limitations,
understanding the reality of what we had….
came with no guarantees
.....instead,
You choose to love me
but....
don’t misconstrue these lines
or take my words out of context,
I’m just here shifting through
(shredded sentiments)
sipping on dark sweet caramel latte,
reminiscent of the opulent mood
you somehow seemed to always leave me in.
~I’m revisiting unsung memories that summon fire
still scorched from the embers of your charm.
I’m still spiritually humming the lyrical you,
my emotions are acapella ….
without a heart(beat) to guide it’s rhythm,
Yet, the tone of you and I had the perfect tempo,
but the tempo slowed down
and my life sped up
~Now, time invested in love’s corner,
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends
*earning you a knight’s right.... to hate me*
Sincerely,
Anonymous
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Written by
rain1courtel
(RainC)
Published 24th Oct 2015
| Edited 1st Apr 2016
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Re. Anonymous
Wow, Rain, you are the best poet i have every read from my number one favorite without a doubt!
but
don’t misconstrue these lines
or take my words out of context,
I’m just here shifting through
(shredded sentiments)
sipping on dark sweet caramel latte,
reminiscent of the opulent mood
you somehow seemed to always leave me in.
I see many many visions in this and the imagery is stellar!
In the list!
pen love sis!
(((((((((Rain))))))))))))))))
love
Zazzles xoxoxoxoxox
Ps nice song too....
but
don’t misconstrue these lines
or take my words out of context,
I’m just here shifting through
(shredded sentiments)
sipping on dark sweet caramel latte,
reminiscent of the opulent mood
you somehow seemed to always leave me in.
I see many many visions in this and the imagery is stellar!
In the list!
pen love sis!
(((((((((Rain))))))))))))))))
love
Zazzles xoxoxoxoxox
Ps nice song too....
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Re: Re. Anonymous
*jaw on the floor*, from reading your comment Jackie! I don't deserve your phenomenal statement.
You have humbled me to the point of silence. Not worthy of the praise.
Incredible lady, that's you! Thank you my friend. Xo
That song makes my heart ache. I love it....
Oh and.....thanks for the listing.
You have humbled me to the point of silence. Not worthy of the praise.
Incredible lady, that's you! Thank you my friend. Xo
That song makes my heart ache. I love it....
Oh and.....thanks for the listing.
Re. Anonymous
Anonymous
24th Oct 2015 4:53am
But if she had not tried, she wouldn't have known.
We're all gamblers in life, sometimes it happens, most often not but memories what we make of from the journey.
I hate to admit it, but its so relatable Rain, poignant write as always.
We're all gamblers in life, sometimes it happens, most often not but memories what we make of from the journey.
I hate to admit it, but its so relatable Rain, poignant write as always.
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Re: Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 2:39am
I agree Rina! .....a little personal growth, an added teaspoon of wisdom and some beautiful memories, made Ms Anonymous journey worthwhile, I'm sure.
Thankya luv~
Thankya luv~
Re. Anonymous
24th Oct 2015 5:30am
there is always a knight to ride away from love's gentle ache,
always another battle to fight.
crafted in defiant beauty...
always another battle to fight.
crafted in defiant beauty...
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Re: Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 3:28am
…the hues of your perception is golden John. I completely agree.
Thanks for the ink nod....
Thanks for the ink nod....
Re. Anonymous
24th Oct 2015 7:30am
Beautiful Rain..as always.. A gracious nod to a past flame that still at least hold some light and fond reflection, though maybe bittersweet, in memory.
You are so gifted at elegance and beauty.
Sincerest respect
Jennifer
You are so gifted at elegance and beauty.
Sincerest respect
Jennifer
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Re: Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 3:31am
Thank you for the sweet reply hun, and I concur on the ‘fond reflections’.
I think the memories are the sweetest for her, bitter -would be the landscape of how things ended.
I think the memories are the sweetest for her, bitter -would be the landscape of how things ended.
Re. Anonymous
24th Oct 2015 8:19am
Re: Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 3:33am
Re. Anonymous
24th Oct 2015 8:50am
Wow... Felt a little too close to how I remember someone...truly outstanding my dearest Rain... :)
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Re: Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 3:35am
Real life shit is usually relatable by many. You are not alone Rich! Thanks darlin'.
Appreciate the listing..
Appreciate the listing..
Re. Anonymous
24th Oct 2015 4:13pm
lovely Rain so poignant is this write..
felt these lines..
"
~I’m revisiting unsung memories that summon fire
still scorched from the embers of your charm.
I’m still spiritually humming the lyrical you,
my emotions are acapella ….
without a heart(beat) to guide it’s rhythm,
yet, the tone of you and I had the perfect tempo,
but the tempo slow down
and my life sped up
~Now, time invested in love’s corner
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends,
*earning you a knight’s right.... to hate me*"
aw love can be so beautiful and painful at the same time..
written with you masterful and beautiful heart..
love Crim
felt these lines..
"
~I’m revisiting unsung memories that summon fire
still scorched from the embers of your charm.
I’m still spiritually humming the lyrical you,
my emotions are acapella ….
without a heart(beat) to guide it’s rhythm,
yet, the tone of you and I had the perfect tempo,
but the tempo slow down
and my life sped up
~Now, time invested in love’s corner
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends,
*earning you a knight’s right.... to hate me*"
aw love can be so beautiful and painful at the same time..
written with you masterful and beautiful heart..
love Crim
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Re: Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 3:36am
“aw love can be so beautiful and painful at the same time..” <--- *Clink champagne glass* ~I’ll toast to that.~ :)Thank you beautiful Crim..
Re. Anonymous
24th Oct 2015 5:39pm
"~I’m revisiting unsung memories that summon fire... my emotions are acapella …." epic emotional lines, looking into the horizon of the heart... loved it...
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Re: Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 3:40am
Somewhere over the horizon, there’s a sunset smiling within a soul.
Glad you approve of Anonymous' emotions Dean....
Glad you approve of Anonymous' emotions Dean....
Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 00:20am
sigh once again left with beautiful haunting visuals and a smile..curtsy bow ..seems you love like thunder..
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Re: Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 3:41am
Curtsy bow to you too my lovely friend. Happy to see you Feen. :)
Thanks for the pen love~
Thanks for the pen love~
Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 2:17am
Definitely wondrous write. Breath taking imagery. Just beautiful.
Thank you so much for the opportunity to read you, Ms Rain.
Keith
Thank you so much for the opportunity to read you, Ms Rain.
Keith
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Re: Re. Anonymous
Thank you for the wonderful response Keith, and for stumbling through my poetic woods. :)
Will be sure to visit your pen world soon...
Will be sure to visit your pen world soon...
Anonymous
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25th Oct 2015 4:07am
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Re: Re. Anonymous
26th Oct 2015 2:24am
Why thankya kindly my sexy friend. I’m sure the emotional storm you rode 18 months ago, made you a stronger woman with added sage. :) A rose can grow from pain, sometimes....
Beautiful comment Lady T.
btw…. sexy ass avatar
Beautiful comment Lady T.
btw…. sexy ass avatar
Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 1:56pm
"~Now, time invested in love’s corner,
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends"
Oh those words hit me Lady Rain They took me back 25 years. We never seem to get the 'return on investment' we'd hoped for. Loved this a masterpiece of word smithery as usual from your pen.
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends"
Oh those words hit me Lady Rain They took me back 25 years. We never seem to get the 'return on investment' we'd hoped for. Loved this a masterpiece of word smithery as usual from your pen.
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Re: Re. Anonymous
26th Oct 2015 2:26am
I do love writes like this one Tony. The kind many can identify with, no matter how long ago.
Sad when you feel like you were the source of someone else’s pain. Thanks Funnyman!
Sad when you feel like you were the source of someone else’s pain. Thanks Funnyman!
Re. Anonymous
25th Oct 2015 9:45pm
A heartfelt letter written by someone who knew it was time to let go.
You are an angel with a pen ; )
Touching mamacita
You are an angel with a pen ; )
Touching mamacita
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Re: Re. Anonymous
Thank you my pretty friend! I think Ms Anonymous felt that circumstances influenced her to let go, it definitely wasn't her heart. :) So happy to feel your presence around these parts Lena. Thanks for the listing.
Re. Anonymous
26th Oct 2015 00:58am
what. thaaaa....girl. .you got that !!!...givin dude the bizness..."my emotions are acapella without a heartbeat to guide its rhythm ",...haaaaa...."love's limitations. ..you chose to love me",,,body blows like Mike Tyson. ..ughhh...luv it!!!!.,,,sensual but rugged. .truth straight. ..no chaser....ah yeah.... .
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Re: Re. Anonymous
lol…Couldn’t help but chuckle at your comical tone Naajir. I hope it wasn’t a Tyson blow though! I think she wanted to express to him that he knew the risk loving her, but he really didn’t care at the time. She pulled away, breaking his heart and he hates her for the pain she’s caused. I think she feels the hate or dislike for her now- is warranted. Thanks for lending your eyes Naajir, and listing my ink..
Re: Re. Anonymous
oh i totally get it...i just thought it was beautifully brutal in how you laid it out ...(smiling)..i don't feel the least bit sorry for dude cuz I been there and done that. with those 'play at your own risk' type situations. .love's a gamble and sometimes the writing is right there on the walls yet we push our chips to the center anyway ...you're one of the few writers on this site who inspire me to push the pen simply because your style of conveyance is so provocative. ..much respect always
naaj
naaj
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Re: Re. Anonymous
1st Nov 2015 5:18pm
Re. Anonymous
27th Oct 2015 00:44am
Anonymous
Truly written with title in mind
However it touches intimately
A stranger with a best friend's hands
A shoulder that has caught many tears
On a shirt never seen
Amazing young lady
Truly written with title in mind
However it touches intimately
A stranger with a best friend's hands
A shoulder that has caught many tears
On a shirt never seen
Amazing young lady
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Re: Re. Anonymous
1st Nov 2015 5:20pm
..you always seem to 'get me', G! Thanks babe... Appreciate the lovely observation....
Re. Anonymous
Anonymous
28th Oct 2015 9:34am
~I’m revisiting unsung memories that summon fire
still scorched from the embers of your charm.
I’m still spiritually humming the lyrical you,
my emotions are acapella ….
without a heart(beat) to guide it’s rhythm,
Yet, the tone of you and I had the perfect tempo,
but the tempo slowed down
and my life sped up
~Now, time invested in love’s corner,
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends
*earning you a knight’s right.... to hate me*
................................... wondrous...breath-taking imagery...one of my favorite poems i stumbled cross....
your pen seduces the senses, leaving one never wanting the write to end. 'twas a pleasure to read indeed..
thank you for sharing! -- xo, barrie
still scorched from the embers of your charm.
I’m still spiritually humming the lyrical you,
my emotions are acapella ….
without a heart(beat) to guide it’s rhythm,
Yet, the tone of you and I had the perfect tempo,
but the tempo slowed down
and my life sped up
~Now, time invested in love’s corner,
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends
*earning you a knight’s right.... to hate me*
................................... wondrous...breath-taking imagery...one of my favorite poems i stumbled cross....
your pen seduces the senses, leaving one never wanting the write to end. 'twas a pleasure to read indeed..
thank you for sharing! -- xo, barrie
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Re: Re. Anonymous
barrie, you're like a glass of fine wine after a longgg day. Just a few sips of you and I'm feeling brand new. :)Your commentary has that type of power. Love your replies...Thank you my friend, and I appreciate the listing...
Re. Anonymous
28th Oct 2015 11:18am
"...Truly written with title in mind
However it touches intimately
A stranger with a best friend's hands
A shoulder that has caught many tears
On a shirt never seen " (-damn Awakened Soul, the most perfect response yet)
This would make an awe inspiring lyric for Jill Scott. Your verbal, mental and most intimate gifts never falter Rain ✌️
However it touches intimately
A stranger with a best friend's hands
A shoulder that has caught many tears
On a shirt never seen " (-damn Awakened Soul, the most perfect response yet)
This would make an awe inspiring lyric for Jill Scott. Your verbal, mental and most intimate gifts never falter Rain ✌️
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Re: Re. Anonymous
1st Nov 2015 5:27pm
Ditto about G's response. He nailed it!
Thank you Archie! I'm trying to polish my skills with each poem, always looking to improve. Appreciate the listing. :)
Thank you Archie! I'm trying to polish my skills with each poem, always looking to improve. Appreciate the listing. :)
Re. Anonymous
28th Oct 2015 11:19am
i'm like a pin cushion for your poetry, lady rain... always find little heart shards needling at me when i'm reading you
gawds this hurts in the sweetest way
simply loved this
xoxox
gawds this hurts in the sweetest way
simply loved this
xoxox
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Re: Re. Anonymous
1st Nov 2015 5:33pm
Dancedoll, I could easily say the same thing about your ink, in regards to the impact it has on me. :)
I can admit I'm learning from little ole you...lol... Thanks pretty one! I adore the support and thanks for listing this ink.
I can admit I'm learning from little ole you...lol... Thanks pretty one! I adore the support and thanks for listing this ink.
Re. Anonymous
I'm so happy I came across this... lovely. I look forward to reading more from you if this is any indication of just how talented you are.
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Re: Re. Anonymous
1st Nov 2015 5:37pm
Oh gosh, so sweet of you! Thank you for the lovely comment, subscription, and listing this ink.
You have made my Sunday brighter, astutencute. Will be sure to pass through your neck of the woods soon. Thanks again...Xo
You have made my Sunday brighter, astutencute. Will be sure to pass through your neck of the woods soon. Thanks again...Xo
Re. Anonymous
Anonymous
13th Nov 2015 6:46pm
Yours is the poetry of love spent before it could really begin.
Not blaming you, just summarizing what never was there in
the first place, but you thought it was worth a chance to play
it out. Didn't work, so you had to do what you had to do and I
absolutely loved how you ended this excellent piece of writing
"~Now, time invested in love’s corner,
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends
*earning you a knight’s right.... to hate me*"
. . . FANtastic!
Not blaming you, just summarizing what never was there in
the first place, but you thought it was worth a chance to play
it out. Didn't work, so you had to do what you had to do and I
absolutely loved how you ended this excellent piece of writing
"~Now, time invested in love’s corner,
didn’t quite pay lovers dividends
*earning you a knight’s right.... to hate me*"
. . . FANtastic!
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Re: Re. Anonymous
...you know what Scooter, I'm going to take that and own it! At this very moment, things are looking clearer. I liked your interpretation, appreciate the poet love, and your desire to keep her in your cyber library. Thank you so much.... :)
#Hug for subscri.
#Hug for subscri.
Re. Anonymous
Anonymous
15th Nov 2015 7:04pm
. . .Oh, my goodness, Miss Rain. . .you made me log in for this; that "featured poem(s)" is definitely doing something right for I had previously missed this. . .You are my Queen of Love. . .xo, Devlin.
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Re: Re. Anonymous
16th Nov 2015 7:46pm
aww...you're just the sweetest treat I've come across today Lyn! :) Thank you darlin' for the lovely words and support. Appreciate you keeping her. Xo
Re. Anonymous
22nd Nov 2015 10:33am
This particular piece is immaculate in the way it depicts the point in a relationship where u begin to wonder if the direction and pace your individual life is undertaking correlates to that of your relationship. I love it.
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Re: Re. Anonymous
27th Nov 2015 7:56pm
I just now noticed your comment after you added her. Thank you so very much G_d!
I'm ecstatic about the ink-love you've shown me, and I do feel the positive poetic vibe. :)
I'm loving what I've read of you thus far. Your 'penmanship' is somewhat fascinating to me.
Pen Respect~
I'm ecstatic about the ink-love you've shown me, and I do feel the positive poetic vibe. :)
I'm loving what I've read of you thus far. Your 'penmanship' is somewhat fascinating to me.
Pen Respect~