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Carlotta
Carlotta comes at midnight
Parting the blue velvet drapes
Stepping naked onto the boudoir floor
She gazes down at Charmane
The virgin asleep in her canopied bed
The posts carved with nymphs and satyrs
Carlotta gently opens Charmane's gown
Applies lips to a breast as it rises and falls
Incisors finding the sweetest vein
She drinks, savoring innocent blood
Leaving just enough to preserve that blush.
Parting the blue velvet drapes
Stepping naked onto the boudoir floor
She gazes down at Charmane
The virgin asleep in her canopied bed
The posts carved with nymphs and satyrs
Carlotta gently opens Charmane's gown
Applies lips to a breast as it rises and falls
Incisors finding the sweetest vein
She drinks, savoring innocent blood
Leaving just enough to preserve that blush.
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Re. Carlotta
22nd Aug 2015 7:22pm
mmm delicious vampiric erotic Sir Crow..
so sensual and sexy in the details..
with love Crim :)
so sensual and sexy in the details..
with love Crim :)
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Re: Re. Carlotta
23rd Aug 2015 4:25am
Re. Carlotta
22nd Aug 2015 7:40pm
Leaving just enough to preserve that blush.
Oh crow
Dont tempt me so
Now im longing for one
Sugar sweet bite!! 🍎
Yummy bloody poem
J 💋
Oh crow
Dont tempt me so
Now im longing for one
Sugar sweet bite!! 🍎
Yummy bloody poem
J 💋
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Re: Re. Carlotta
23rd Aug 2015 4:27am
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Anonymous
22nd Aug 2015 8:48pm
Bravo!!!!! Crow this is an excellent ink......luring....sexy......mysterious.......luvin it!! Luv and hugs xo :)
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23rd Aug 2015 4:32am
Re. Carlotta
22nd Aug 2015 9:26pm
Aaaahhhh...Carlotta....sweet, and sultry.....such a seductive succubus!
Crowfly.this is absolutely amazing.... sends temps soaring, and pulses pounding!!! xo
(L i l i t h.....move over....there's a new demon(ess) in town! :p )
Penned with Powerful Passion
Crowfly.this is absolutely amazing.... sends temps soaring, and pulses pounding!!! xo
(L i l i t h.....move over....there's a new demon(ess) in town! :p )
Penned with Powerful Passion
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Re: Re. Carlotta
23rd Aug 2015 4:33am
Yeah.... a succubus! Now there's an idea... My kind of entity. Thanks Enchantress!
Re. Carlotta
22nd Aug 2015 10:32pm
"The virgin asleep in her canopied bed
The posts carved with nymphs and satyrs"
~can totally see this in my head, such a great capture misters! faerie~tale virgin included.
"do they even 'make those' anymore?" ..she asks of that v-word in rhetoric thought. ha's, omg.
"Applies lips to a breast as it rises and falls
Incisors finding the sweetest vein
She drinks, savoring innocent blood
Leaving just enough to preserve that blush." <~~ fav sexy line. blush is just a hot word I think.
~and [dammt mr! /grins] I can picture aaand shiver on this one. great detail in your pen- makes one
feel the sharp and taste the sweet.
Do gotsa share a funny thot, shh!- I cudn't help but picture Charmane Star in this.. lol.
In entirety, enjoyed your dark lusty' sating but not satiating' tale! be well sweetie ;)
~d
The posts carved with nymphs and satyrs"
~can totally see this in my head, such a great capture misters! faerie~tale virgin included.
"do they even 'make those' anymore?" ..she asks of that v-word in rhetoric thought. ha's, omg.
"Applies lips to a breast as it rises and falls
Incisors finding the sweetest vein
She drinks, savoring innocent blood
Leaving just enough to preserve that blush." <~~ fav sexy line. blush is just a hot word I think.
~and [dammt mr! /grins] I can picture aaand shiver on this one. great detail in your pen- makes one
feel the sharp and taste the sweet.
Do gotsa share a funny thot, shh!- I cudn't help but picture Charmane Star in this.. lol.
In entirety, enjoyed your dark lusty' sating but not satiating' tale! be well sweetie ;)
~d
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Re: Re. Carlotta
23rd Aug 2015 4:37am
The name definitely rings a bell, but Charmane Star is one celeb I'm not familiar with. I'll do a Google search and get some info and a pic or two. Could be a babe? We shall see.... Thanks Darksighs!
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Re: Re. Carlotta
23rd Aug 2015 4:40am
Always suspected you were a vamp Taryn! I'll be sure to lay off the garlic. Love you too!
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23rd Aug 2015 00:54am
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Re: Re. Carlotta
23rd Aug 2015 4:43am
Thanks Garbriel! Does have kind of a happy ending, hopefully. More affection than fear this time.
Re. Carlotta
23rd Aug 2015 3:24am
Vividly Seductive Ink Crowfly..the ending was the icing on the cake..enjoyed this!!!
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23rd Aug 2015 4:45am
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23rd Aug 2015 9:56pm
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26th Aug 2015 1:06am
Re. Carlotta
24th Aug 2015 1:42am
I must confess my admiration. Your calligraphy is makes my mind gaze,
yes seductively entrancing your inks are.
yes seductively entrancing your inks are.
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Re: Re. Carlotta
26th Aug 2015 1:03am
Wish I had a vamp's powers of persuasion, their ability to "glamor" their victims. I usually don't get very far. Thanks HowlingWhelms!
Re. Carlotta
25th Aug 2015 8:54pm
This set the scene and the first act just began. Something I think could be expanded upon. I like Carlotta. Well done Crow.
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Re: Re. Carlotta
26th Aug 2015 1:00am
It could be developed further, so maybe I'll try a sequel at some point. I believe Lesbian vampires predate "Dracula," having been featured in Sheridan Le Fanu's "Carmilla." Not quite sure about the respective years of publication. Vampyros lesbos are a hell of a lot more fun than Vlad, in my view. Thank you!
Re: Re. Carlotta
26th Aug 2015 1:14am
Oh! Carl Theordor Dreyer's film Vampyr is based on Camilla, correct?
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Re: Re. Carlotta
27th Aug 2015 7:27pm
I don't think that one is, although it's been awhile since I've seen it. "Carmilla" has usually ended up in less-than-classic films like "Blood and Roses" and "The Vampire Lovers."