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Angel
She soars down from the heavens with grace and touches me.
Covered in white and bathed in light, I wonder why is it me she came to see.
Her hand placed upon my cheek was as warm as the sun.
She then whispered in my ear, "Your new life has just begun."
She spreads her wings and lifts me up twenty feet and as I looked down I see my body laying in a creek.
I ask her, " what had happened to me?"
And yet she only replies, "Your time in this life was up and that is all I can speak."
"So are you the angel that was sent to take me to grace and glory?"
She then replies, "Yes my boy, where we go you will have no more worries."
Covered in white and bathed in light, I wonder why is it me she came to see.
Her hand placed upon my cheek was as warm as the sun.
She then whispered in my ear, "Your new life has just begun."
She spreads her wings and lifts me up twenty feet and as I looked down I see my body laying in a creek.
I ask her, " what had happened to me?"
And yet she only replies, "Your time in this life was up and that is all I can speak."
"So are you the angel that was sent to take me to grace and glory?"
She then replies, "Yes my boy, where we go you will have no more worries."
Published 27th Dec 2014
| Edited 28th Dec 2014
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Anonymous
27th Dec 2014 1:27am
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27th Dec 2014 1:53am
27th Dec 2014 3:55am
Writer's note: check spelling - cheek should be creek.
Somehow I wanted more out of this ... Why did you die in a creek? Was your life as planned and that's why the angel took you?
One of my favorite movies is "It's a Wonderful Life" ... In that story the angel reveals why it wasn't George Bailey's time ... Tell me why it was yours ... ?
Somehow I wanted more out of this ... Why did you die in a creek? Was your life as planned and that's why the angel took you?
One of my favorite movies is "It's a Wonderful Life" ... In that story the angel reveals why it wasn't George Bailey's time ... Tell me why it was yours ... ?
Thanks for catching the cheek to creek error and as far as why and how of it.
I was just trying to get this piece out of my head, because I have a hard time staying focus so when something comes to me I just write and don't think too much on those aspects.
But I really do appreciate the honesty in your critique, so thanks again Lobo
I was just trying to get this piece out of my head, because I have a hard time staying focus so when something comes to me I just write and don't think too much on those aspects.
But I really do appreciate the honesty in your critique, so thanks again Lobo
28th Dec 2014 4:57am
'comin' for to carry me home.' Lobo's right, there seem to be pieces missing that would certainly fill out the poem.
a writer normally keeps working on a piece when it gets tough; that's the challenge of it...
a writer normally keeps working on a piece when it gets tough; that's the challenge of it...
28th Dec 2014 5:10am
thanks for the comment John and I do agree with you and Lobo that there I could have added more to the aspects of it
Anonymous
5th Jan 2015 7:42pm
Beautiful ink!
Anonymous
6th Mar 2015 10:52am
I thought you lifted a veil and showed a glimpse of something beautiful here,a promise,a hand full of stardust....enjoyed the read
6th Mar 2015 6:54pm
Thank you for the comment. With me being a novice writer, it's a pleasure to receive positive feedback on my work.
