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Sadly Sedated
Filling his head with doubts
smoke filling up his lungs
scratching his head
he thought about his grocery list
a whole length of needful things
listed in a piece of paper
he couldn't buy them
he lost his money
did he drink his market money
or gave it to the tired whore
who might have serviced Elvis
or even John Wayne
He spat at the ground
he hated himself for his weakness
wine woman and poker
he hated to go home
his babies crying for milk
and his woman have lost
all her loving for him
shit! He needed another drink.
smoke filling up his lungs
scratching his head
he thought about his grocery list
a whole length of needful things
listed in a piece of paper
he couldn't buy them
he lost his money
did he drink his market money
or gave it to the tired whore
who might have serviced Elvis
or even John Wayne
He spat at the ground
he hated himself for his weakness
wine woman and poker
he hated to go home
his babies crying for milk
and his woman have lost
all her loving for him
shit! He needed another drink.
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Re: Sadly Sedated
17th Nov 2014 4:43pm
It would be sad to be this guy...
I mean damn, losing his money
to wine?? smh... Lol jk...
Truly, a somber message in this
I mean damn, losing his money
to wine?? smh... Lol jk...
Truly, a somber message in this
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re: Re: Sadly Sedated
17th Nov 2014 5:06pm
Life eh, Poetik. You pay for each inch of happiness. Sometimes the hard way.:) thanks for reading.
Re: Sadly Sedated
Anonymous
17th Nov 2014 4:43pm
Grace,
Live how you showed the age without showing it! :-) The Duke would have straightened him out with one punch! LOL!!! Enjoyed!
tornado
Live how you showed the age without showing it! :-) The Duke would have straightened him out with one punch! LOL!!! Enjoyed!
tornado
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re: Re: Sadly Sedated
17th Nov 2014 5:09pm
Hi Tornado...:)a bit overdone eh. Hate to be a paying customer. The Duke was awesome wasn't he. Although he always walked like he was over endowed.:)
Re: Sadly Sedated
17th Nov 2014 5:59pm
I've seen that and, unfortunately, been there myself. I've recovered somewhat, work in progress. I never had a family waiting and dependent on me, but my parents had to put up with far too much of my shit. Fortunately, I had a chance to make it up to them.
At this point I can safely say I'm never going down that road again. I live for my friends, and whatever I can put in writing.
Your fine poem reminds me a little of the song "Joey" by Concrete Blonde. You ever hear that one?
At this point I can safely say I'm never going down that road again. I live for my friends, and whatever I can put in writing.
Your fine poem reminds me a little of the song "Joey" by Concrete Blonde. You ever hear that one?
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re: Re: Sadly Sedated
17th Nov 2014 6:40pm
I don't think I ever heard that song, but I will look that up. :) its good that you are moving on. Such attitude ruin a lot of relationships: I have friends who can't seem to live without going down meandering paths...as the saying goes.
Thanks for ready Crowfly.
Thanks for ready Crowfly.
Re: Sadly Sedated
Anonymous
17th Nov 2014 6:21pm
A story that is all too common, sadly. Nothing but victims all around. A wonderful capture here in verse, Grace. Good write
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re: Re: Sadly Sedated
17th Nov 2014 6:42pm
Hi Miki:) thanks for reading. Its attitude mostly. Which is sad when family break up because of it.
Re: Sadly Sedated
17th Nov 2014 10:55pm
Sad existence there eh Grace-I've known a few of that lot-Hard roads they travel.
Emotive Ink!!!
(indeed as crow says-Joey-that's that Woman i'm always pushing on You Johnette Napolitano (many side projects other than Concrete Blond-a powerful voice that Woman)
Emotive Ink!!!
(indeed as crow says-Joey-that's that Woman i'm always pushing on You Johnette Napolitano (many side projects other than Concrete Blond-a powerful voice that Woman)
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re: Re: Sadly Sedated
18th Nov 2014 1:42am
Sad isn't it. Sometimes its just a decision taken at a certain time. Thanks for reading Soul and for your constant encouragement. :) mean tons.
Re: Sadly Sedated
18th Nov 2014 7:58pm
It is a terrible place to be. To let everything become nothing to sooth the sorrows gripping you inside. A horrible pain I would never wish on anyone. You told it well here.
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re: Re: Sadly Sedated
18th Nov 2014 8:32pm