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To paper, it's just another Whisper...
It's
just
another whisper...
from the depths of sole
it did occur, I suppose it chose
this moment to impose agonizing
within the throes of a soul's angst
'pon this indentured servant as it bent
the mental into a massive maze
amazed by the haze of self malevolence...
a 'manifesto of musings' if it's choosing
a vessel used to being used to peruse
the inner-sphere... "ok!" it shouts out in
silent servitude, and then with-in thy sight
it incites... pushing thoughts through the pen,
he whispers once again... as the ink reeks of
muse that speaks to paper..."To you and
them, here cries another whisper my friend..."
Published 27th Sep 2014
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27th Sep 2014 11:50am
Whispers speak aloud too sometimes. Beauty in your presentation, Poetik. :) Such talent.
27th Sep 2014 12:19pm
My sincerest gratitude to you my sweet Grace!
Truly appreciate your continued support of my ink :)
Truly appreciate your continued support of my ink :)
Anonymous
27th Sep 2014 11:56am
i love the idea of writing a feeling being like whispering to the paper...an enchanting comparison! lovely piece, poetik
shine on
shine on
27th Sep 2014 12:25pm
Well I'm happy to hear you loved my approach my dear
I'm a huge fan of your creativity n intellect myself :) thanks a billion, you rock! :)
I'm a huge fan of your creativity n intellect myself :) thanks a billion, you rock! :)
27th Sep 2014 12:53pm
27th Sep 2014 2:47pm
Aaawwww thanks so much bro! I'm so humbled
n very grateful for your support always :)
n very grateful for your support always :)
"To you and
them, here cries another whisper my friend..."
can be implied to so many relationships although because of the category one comes to the top of my list.
You also hint of the double edged sword---being a vessel can be a positive or negative. Maybe both.
them, here cries another whisper my friend..."
can be implied to so many relationships although because of the category one comes to the top of my list.
You also hint of the double edged sword---being a vessel can be a positive or negative. Maybe both.
28th Sep 2014 00:31am
You're very astute bro. It indeed was meant to be taken
in a couple of ways, as I generally subscribe to the
concept of things being seen from differing points of view...
Appreciate you much bro. :)
in a couple of ways, as I generally subscribe to the
concept of things being seen from differing points of view...
Appreciate you much bro. :)
thanks...one of the intriguing things about poetry is since we bring our own experiences to a reading, we may or may not find things the writer didn't intend or conveyed in subtle ways. One of things in life that gives a bit of variety.
28th Sep 2014 1:14pm
27th Sep 2014 3:54pm
Great work! Always admire Poe. Whispers yet it speaks through clearly. I love your work!
28th Sep 2014 00:32am
Thank you my sweet Angel... Truly glad you liked n appreciate your support :)
27th Sep 2014 8:30pm
28th Sep 2014 00:33am
Thank you sir, I'm humbled n feel honored...
Truly grateful for your thoughts on my ink. :)
Truly grateful for your thoughts on my ink. :)
28th Sep 2014 00:07am
28th Sep 2014 00:34am
28th Sep 2014 4:50pm
"a vessel used to being used to peruse
the inner-sphere... "ok!" it shouts out in
silent servitude, and then with-in thy sight
it incites... pushing thoughts through the pen" something quite humbling about this part..also hints at the power found in being powerless..how it builds inner strength...cause the vessel is as important(or powerful) as the cargo it carries just messenger is just as powerful as the message without it nothing is transported and delivered ..at least that is what the word "vessel" bring to mind here..great food for thought poetik..needless to say I thought this was Phenomenal.. love the title also
the inner-sphere... "ok!" it shouts out in
silent servitude, and then with-in thy sight
it incites... pushing thoughts through the pen" something quite humbling about this part..also hints at the power found in being powerless..how it builds inner strength...cause the vessel is as important(or powerful) as the cargo it carries just messenger is just as powerful as the message without it nothing is transported and delivered ..at least that is what the word "vessel" bring to mind here..great food for thought poetik..needless to say I thought this was Phenomenal.. love the title also
28th Sep 2014 6:02pm
Aaawwww my sweet sweet lady! thanks a bunch
I'm pleased you liked n added it to ur list... Humbling
always n deeply appreciate you too! :)
I'm pleased you liked n added it to ur list... Humbling
always n deeply appreciate you too! :)
Anonymous
28th Sep 2014 9:51pm
Powerful whisper! This jolted me. Really like this. :)
29th Sep 2014 4:42am
Aaawwww well to move you in Any manner is a high compliment for me soooo I'm happy n appreciate your support always my sweetness :)
12th Oct 2014 3:12am
Dios Mio Poe, this is fantastic!
I can hear the pen scribbling on paper and making that sound it makes as if it's whispering.
I can hear the pen scribbling on paper and making that sound it makes as if it's whispering.
12th Oct 2014 7:23am
12th Oct 2014 10:55am
Aaaawwww... You amaze me with your sincerity... Thank you my friend, always n forever I'm grateful for your support :)
2nd Nov 2014 2:56am
Classic virtuoso of poetry in motion. Love the inspiration here. Very nice. :)
2nd Nov 2014 3:47am
Aaawwww my dear sweet friend, so happy to see u visiting!
Thank u so much, truly appreciate u :)
Thank u so much, truly appreciate u :)
9th Nov 2014 3:15am
9th Nov 2014 3:25am
Aaaawwww shucks, well golly gee, you're filling me with glee! :) thanks again my sweetness :)
11th Nov 2014 12:20pm
11th Nov 2014 12:40pm
I have to agree with you there! Thanks for your thoughts n time
I appreciate it :)
I appreciate it :)
