Unbroken

so poignant and beautifully written lovely domore. i think we've all known someone who tries using our heart as a revolving door... keep that sucker spinning.

transatlantic hugs
kat

Beautiful kat, thank you so much for the read and wonderful comment.. Indeed this is probably a very relatable topic... I'm just lockn the door in some ways.. on this one dear friend!!  
transatlantic hugs felt and returned in kind :)
xoxo domore

I'd probably go with 'took away my warmth, my light and bright rays that caressed and held me tight'   try not to overstate things, the sun in the first line lets us know the warm rays are from the sunshine in the third. same with "It's been months of silence with no words spoken"  months of silence would indicate no words spoken anyway see?  it's not a huge deal really just something to think about in the future.

sorry if that sounded over critical for friendly feedback, but in my defense I'm very friendly.

you a nice poem going on here Domore  good stuff, keep shinnin'  





 

You meddle in everyone's poems like you are this site's editor at large. Read Domore's work for content and merit. Nobody cares what you would do, you didn't write this amazing powerful poem.

Samantha, your writing is phenomenal. Pay no attention to this little man who gets his rocks off making unwanted corrections to your work.  He does this to everyone and I for one am sick of it.

xxo
Poet

Thank you CD for the constructive comments.. in regards to the sunshine issue.. you have a point and I can see where it may be redundant to reinterate. In regards to the "silence" notation.. The silence I was referring was more on the idea of inner silence or stillness. Such "inner silence" is not about the absence of sound; instead, it is understood to bring one in contact with one's own true self.   "It's been months of silence with no words spoken" --meaning during the time we did not speak to eachother.. I searched and re-discovered myself...healing myself in process....and thusly directly related to last line..of being stronger along edges once broken..
 
Thank you again for the read and taking a moment to share your thoughts..
respectfully,  
domore

Thank you Sir.. you are spectacularly lovely when riled a bit... your comments make my heart swell with appeciation and pride of having you as friend and supporter..with love and respect dear Sir..xoxo domore

ah yes, I get the line now,it makes much more sense to me.

again, sorry if the above was too much. It’s never my intention to offend, only to offer my opinion. I find people’s replies  a great way to grasp more of an understanding  of how people employ different ways and means of expression. so thank you for your reply and for not reading my comment as hostile  

Yep, I definitely understand this feeling. Took me years to get through it all. Really great job writing this. I enjoyed reading it.

Thank you Brittany :)  getting through it.. is definitely a process :)  I appreciate the read and kind comment.. I am thrilled you enjoyed.. xoxo domore

If I could embody the title
'Twould be a real pleasure
For you know I am but broke

Unable to reward this excellence
Here's hoping you will accept this
IOU from a dear friend, destitute admirer
:)

ahhh sweet Mr VP.. you are too kind :)  thank you thank you :)  and destitute? pleassssse.. I know you've had some king kinda cash thrown your way...by me...gaaah :) LOL   IOU will work just fine tho for you :)  with love and respect dear friend.. xoxo domore

so many souls in the undergound distraught. what better way to focus our issues... but through verse. Very well put your thoughts...  

Indeed dkruie.. you have the right of it... "what better way to focus our issues..but through verse"... I personally find it freeing, very cathartic is some cases.. thank you for your read and thoughtful comment.. with respect..xoxo domore

Thank you kindly dear Gabriel...so happy to see you again..always a pleasure and honor to have you stop by for little reading and commenting :)  you are always kind in your comments sir and it is much appreciated.  with much respect..xoxo

What doesn't kill you, will make you stronger but can we truly be friends with the ones that break our heart? Insightful write, very deep sentiments in your poem. Enjoyed it.

Thank you kindly xmar82..... it is a good question you pose..and one worth considering :)  Thank you for the read and comment.. I am happy that you enjoyed.. with respect..domore

beautiful Domore a write I feel in my core so much heart you have lovely one with love Crim

Yeaaah I see you again my lovely friend.. the one and only Beautiful Crim :)  Thank you for reading and for you kind comment.. it is unfortunate that this would hit close to home for many.. we are stronger than we know tho... and often times thru pain or loss we discover that and ourselves..with many hugs and lotsa love..xoxo domore

I have one particular very special friend i would dedicate this heartfelt ink to,but ah,if she came back,if she ever knocks on my door,ever again,i think i would or will run through the back door and never look back!Hell!i would or will shift and leave her my apartment!
Some friends hurt us too badly,what is worse,no matter what they do,they remain special and Irreplaceable! so twisted!!!
Beautiful ink D!

Thank you Lovely Lady Peninnah... for the read and insightful comment.. You have a true kind and giving spirit...."Some friends hurt us too badly,what is worse,no matter what they do,they remain special and Irreplaceable! so twisted!!!"  wonderfully put dear Lady.. with much respect..domore

Yup another very relatable topic, n very well expressed to boot. I've been there myself lady :)

sweet Poe... Thank you for the read and comment... yes..females and males alike dole it out..and the receiver whether it be friend or lover...takes it..I am sorry that you were the recipient of negative actions that left you feeling broken and bruised.. for you have the kindest of spirits dear friend.. with love and respect..xoxo domore

Oh Sweet Friend......I know this well. More than words can express that only a fallen tear upon your page can speak pain. Luv and hugs sent your way. Xo :)

Thank you much Lovely flower.. dear friend... feeling the hugs and love..sending some back to you in full measure.. :)  xoxo domore

We have to risk ourselves over again to become ourselves   - palpable poem of those blurred lines friend/lover - bruised not broken - cool and insightful

thank you whale :)  so glad you visited..read and commented .. I like your take.. "blurred lines friend/lover" well said :)  with much respect..domore

A great personal growth

thank you Mr Oak.. :)  so glad you stopped in for a read.. appreciate your kind comment... with much respect.. domore