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dead heart waltz
wandering the way of the crow
she dances a dead heart waltz
in titanium heel louboutins
through taupe laden skies
outlined in vermillion hues
seeking acceptance
from the reflection
in the mirror
an unyielding desire
to be part of the slaughter
it is paramount
to her souls survival
feeding off painful loot
stolen from hearts of the damned
fruitlessly trying
to fill empty with empty
For the "Outside Looking In" competition...had to use these words: unyielding, paramount, crow, titanium, survival, loot, taupe
she dances a dead heart waltz
in titanium heel louboutins
through taupe laden skies
outlined in vermillion hues
seeking acceptance
from the reflection
in the mirror
an unyielding desire
to be part of the slaughter
it is paramount
to her souls survival
feeding off painful loot
stolen from hearts of the damned
fruitlessly trying
to fill empty with empty
For the "Outside Looking In" competition...had to use these words: unyielding, paramount, crow, titanium, survival, loot, taupe
Written by
DiscipleofLife
(Fenom)
Published 5th Jun 2014
| Edited 7th Jun 2014
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Re: dead heart waltz
5th Jun 2014 6:39pm
you know(t) how much i love this piece, Mister, but the second stanza just drives those titanium stiletto heels straight through the heart... nailed it!
best of luck in the comp, hun xo
best of luck in the comp, hun xo
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Re: dead heart waltz
5th Jun 2014 9:44pm
Great submission Fenom! Can't really comment on it because of the comp.Xo
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Re: dead heart waltz
5th Jun 2014 10:50pm
Re: dead heart waltz
5th Jun 2014 11:13pm
I think if I'd had to
use those words
my head would have
exploded! Excellent...
use those words
my head would have
exploded! Excellent...
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Re: dead heart waltz
5th Jun 2014 11:28pm
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6th Jun 2014 10:35am
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6th Jun 2014 11:43am
Re: dead heart waltz
8th Jun 2014 1:53am
sinister writing. she dances a dark & joyless dance, & w/o fear, like the crow...
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Re: dead heart waltz
8th Jun 2014 1:54am
Re: dead heart waltz
Anonymous
16th Jun 2014 2:48am
I'm lost for words of the feelings this has left me. Stunned might be the word. Enjoyed! Good luck in the comp. :)

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re: Re: dead heart waltz
16th Jun 2014 7:36am
Re: dead heart waltz
"laden skies outlined in vermillion hues." the vermillion caught my eye. Its so pretty. Good poem.
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Re: dead heart waltz
26th Jun 2014 5:12pm
Re: dead heart waltz
I see a dark entity dancing in the darkness, wishing to be alive, trying to feel something, anything, again. Good write. Enjoyed.
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16th Jul 2014 10:12pm
Re. dead heart waltz
10th Apr 2016 11:40am
there is a lot of that filling empty with empty going around....you definitely live up to your pen name..nice ink
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8th Aug 2017 6:25am