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our dance
was much to short
I think
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our timing was off...
This style write is inspired by my friend Paul S...(dartford) he may have already written this very piece knowing him and his wit, but I'm not reading through 500+ poems to find out =)...
I think
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our timing was off...
This style write is inspired by my friend Paul S...(dartford) he may have already written this very piece knowing him and his wit, but I'm not reading through 500+ poems to find out =)...
Published 1st Jun 2014
| Edited 10th Jul 2014
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1st Jun 2014 7:48pm
This clever play of brevity matching the topic works. I'm not sure about the gap.
Actually, yes! The gap allows for awkward timing, which is your last line... Bravo, well-played.
Actually, yes! The gap allows for awkward timing, which is your last line... Bravo, well-played.
1st Jun 2014 7:50pm
2nd Jun 2014 3:02am
If I'd have written that, Fen,
I'd have been dead proud
of myself..:)
oh and I'm chuffed (English
slang..?) at the name check,
you're a pal...
I'd have been dead proud
of myself..:)
oh and I'm chuffed (English
slang..?) at the name check,
you're a pal...
2nd Jun 2014 3:17am
Of course my friend, your an inspiration!!! thanks for the visit, and kind words Paul...
Anonymous
2nd Jun 2014 8:14am
Always impressed by what can be said with just one line...nice to see a change in your writing, Fenom!
2nd Jul 2014 12:09pm
I fucking hate you!! But... I love you!
My fav poem from you so far! I wish it knew you.
-K
My fav poem from you so far! I wish it knew you.
-K
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