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Moment In Time
there’s nobody left to blame
we just ran out of feeling
the impossible became possible
the tears have all dried
you were my desire plateau
my raven in flight
we came out of nowhere
we crashed but didn’t burn
let’s celebrate the highs
there’s to many to count
a beautiful love affair
a moment in time…
we just ran out of feeling
the impossible became possible
the tears have all dried
you were my desire plateau
my raven in flight
we came out of nowhere
we crashed but didn’t burn
let’s celebrate the highs
there’s to many to count
a beautiful love affair
a moment in time…
Published 28th Jan 2014
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28th Jan 2014 5:57pm
Those moments in time - precious, wonderful and volatile although you'll never forget them, ever. Beautiful and touching, Speak.
28th Jan 2014 10:32pm
28th Jan 2014 9:49pm
..beautiful moments in time lives on, even when time runs out...
Bravo, Speak! Xo
"you were my desire plateau" <--love that line.:)
Bravo, Speak! Xo
"you were my desire plateau" <--love that line.:)
28th Jan 2014 10:33pm
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28th Jan 2014 10:34pm
This is so soft and beautiful Speak, you sure know how to move around in different styles in your writing, Very nice!
28th Jan 2014 10:35pm
I've many experiences, good and bad
Thx Nadia
I appreciate you and your kind words
Thx Nadia
I appreciate you and your kind words
29th Jan 2014 00:19am
Like a candle snuffed out, it's only darkness not the end...
we came out of nowhere
we crashed but didn’t burn
I love following your poems... always so touching, always different parts of me x
we came out of nowhere
we crashed but didn’t burn
I love following your poems... always so touching, always different parts of me x
29th Jan 2014 00:28am
trying to be a universal force for love
The notion of love interests me. How people gravitate towards each other. Sometimes forever, often for a "moment in time"
Thx Glass
xx
The notion of love interests me. How people gravitate towards each other. Sometimes forever, often for a "moment in time"
Thx Glass
xx
29th Jan 2014 2:31am
"you were my desire plateau"
I enjoyed reading the whole poem and particularly found this line striking. Somehow if you would have went with the conventional "you were my plateau of desire" it wouldn't have been nearly as effective.
I admit my mind sometimes focuses too much on a particular thing going on inside the poem, but I can't help it. And so I comment too on it.
I find your work compelling overall as well as for certain word choices you make that I imagine are intuitive, and for that reason are all the better. :)
I enjoyed reading the whole poem and particularly found this line striking. Somehow if you would have went with the conventional "you were my plateau of desire" it wouldn't have been nearly as effective.
I admit my mind sometimes focuses too much on a particular thing going on inside the poem, but I can't help it. And so I comment too on it.
I find your work compelling overall as well as for certain word choices you make that I imagine are intuitive, and for that reason are all the better. :)
29th Jan 2014 4:10am
Thank you J
I'm overwhelmed by your praise for my writing.
Sometimes I will be walking down the street or commuting and a phrase will come into my head and then I build the poem around that phrase or thought.
Your writing is amazing. So deep, raw and honest.
I sometimes fall into love to much with a concept but you go right for the throat. I admire that. So, thanks again for your comments and for being an inspiration to us all.
Speak
I'm overwhelmed by your praise for my writing.
Sometimes I will be walking down the street or commuting and a phrase will come into my head and then I build the poem around that phrase or thought.
Your writing is amazing. So deep, raw and honest.
I sometimes fall into love to much with a concept but you go right for the throat. I admire that. So, thanks again for your comments and for being an inspiration to us all.
Speak
