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Henry's Hand
Bloody memories of provokes
stain the chalice stem
red rings blush colour
leftover from hanging vine.
Better it was gone,
smashed glass cast passions
distorted shard slivered effigy.
Held abreast from form.
Ill favoured fluttering eye
cannot meet gazing stars,
for off balance sight
there crept shadow borders.
Raise high solid walls
and arm surrounding turrets,
these keep beasts out.
Preserving crest kingdom come.
stain the chalice stem
red rings blush colour
leftover from hanging vine.
Better it was gone,
smashed glass cast passions
distorted shard slivered effigy.
Held abreast from form.
Ill favoured fluttering eye
cannot meet gazing stars,
for off balance sight
there crept shadow borders.
Raise high solid walls
and arm surrounding turrets,
these keep beasts out.
Preserving crest kingdom come.
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16th Jan 2014 5:17am
You're the coolest John...I pulled this from 4x4 ...seeing Your post made me want to try it....had I read the rules before doing so hahahaha
so I hit Missy up for a subject instead...I was reading about this Fab fellow today so I drew on it without her hitting me with a subject...takes me awhile to catch details sometimes lol
so I hit Missy up for a subject instead...I was reading about this Fab fellow today so I drew on it without her hitting me with a subject...takes me awhile to catch details sometimes lol
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16th Jan 2014 6:46am
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17th Jan 2014 1:17am
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Anonymous
16th Jan 2014 7:11am
Well done ... however and whyever you wrote it, lol...
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17th Jan 2014 1:18am
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16th Jan 2014 8:13am
Soul
your language is superb here, its a shame you couldn't flseh it out a little more but I get it came from the 4 by 4 .
either way my friend, well worth the read and an education in terms of how to say much with few well chosen words.
best o lu,k with the comp good sir
shine on
your language is superb here, its a shame you couldn't flseh it out a little more but I get it came from the 4 by 4 .
either way my friend, well worth the read and an education in terms of how to say much with few well chosen words.
best o lu,k with the comp good sir
shine on
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17th Jan 2014 1:20am
Thanks a lot Lepp.!!!
Indeed i'd like to do a few in-depth Writes on this guy...god knows theres enough dirt on him to fill libraries-Appreciated Sir!!!
Indeed i'd like to do a few in-depth Writes on this guy...god knows theres enough dirt on him to fill libraries-Appreciated Sir!!!
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re: Re: Henry's Hand
17th Jan 2014 1:22am
Thank You Dear Grace :)))
compact indeed hahaha A better Write of this sometime :) thank You for the list Dear;)
compact indeed hahaha A better Write of this sometime :) thank You for the list Dear;)
Re: Henry's Hand
17th Jan 2014 5:39am
awww mann! You are too good for your britches! :)
"Bloody memories of provokes
stain the chalice stem
red rings blush colour
leftover from hanging vine."<--Amazing!
I love this Soul! Xo
"Bloody memories of provokes
stain the chalice stem
red rings blush colour
leftover from hanging vine."<--Amazing!
I love this Soul! Xo
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17th Jan 2014 6:34am
So kind to me You are!!!
Thank You so much for dropping by Dear Rain!!!
I Love these certain time periods...
Thank You so much for dropping by Dear Rain!!!
I Love these certain time periods...
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17th Jan 2014 6:41am
Wow What more can I say about Da Man!!!
Awesome piece Bro. SOUL!!!
Sir Lancelott
Awesome piece Bro. SOUL!!!
Sir Lancelott
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17th Jan 2014 6:49am
Re: Henry's Hand
19th Jan 2014 5:09pm
Very nice, Soulman, poetry with a capital P. The words are well chosen and flow so well with awesome imagery. Terrific !
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20th Jan 2014 1:32am
Greatly appreciated Tony, humbled You think so!!!
...I want to revisit this stuff sometime for an in-depth Write...we'll see...probably take me a year...
...I want to revisit this stuff sometime for an in-depth Write...we'll see...probably take me a year...
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20th Jan 2014 2:38pm
Great write Soul, you have captured the essence of the man so well. All the best in the comp. :)
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20th Jan 2014 11:10pm
Hard to believe the good that actually came about because of that guy eh?
Thank You Dear Magdalena!!!
Thank You Dear Magdalena!!!
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5th Feb 2014 8:53pm
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6th Feb 2014 4:08pm
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4th Mar 2014 4:30pm
Just love these lines:
"Bloody memories of provokes
stain the chalice stem
red rings blush colour
leftover from hanging vine."
Can't wait to go back to your neck of the woods and drink some more merlot and cavergnet.
"Bloody memories of provokes
stain the chalice stem
red rings blush colour
leftover from hanging vine."
Can't wait to go back to your neck of the woods and drink some more merlot and cavergnet.
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4th Mar 2014 6:46pm
I appreciate that Engr.!!!
sometime i'll get my time and mind working for me again...I've done poorly in the realm of Writ...I blame winter and work hahaha
Indeed the Merlot is a Must!!!
don't know how You take to sweetened wines/ dessert wine... If You like Rieslings...there are two major Dutch companies producing chocolate wines ...mixed with Merlot.....neat effect....first the sweet silk of chocolate followed by the peppery after-burn of merlot...Chocovine uis one company...not sure of the other....but I think they use a butterfly on their label.
Be well Vic!!!
sometime i'll get my time and mind working for me again...I've done poorly in the realm of Writ...I blame winter and work hahaha
Indeed the Merlot is a Must!!!
don't know how You take to sweetened wines/ dessert wine... If You like Rieslings...there are two major Dutch companies producing chocolate wines ...mixed with Merlot.....neat effect....first the sweet silk of chocolate followed by the peppery after-burn of merlot...Chocovine uis one company...not sure of the other....but I think they use a butterfly on their label.
Be well Vic!!!
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4th Mar 2014 6:57pm
My other half love Rieslings...just too mild for me! Thanks for the tip, Soul.
/EngrVV
/EngrVV
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The first wonderful aspect of this write is using a style that might well have been in fashion shortly after the passing of the king rather then hundreds of years later. The second magical impression is your attention to vivid details---I felt the songs of Al Stewart reading this. Scribe on!
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29th Jun 2014 3:40am
Such keen eyes and mind-I appreciate You more than I can ever express Jazz!!!
What a name to pull out of Your hat-YOUR magic of depth never ceases to amaze me Sir Theres not too many "music aficionados" roaming in Our world these days-here or outside-tends to be dabblers-I thank You so much My Friend!!!
What a name to pull out of Your hat-YOUR magic of depth never ceases to amaze me Sir Theres not too many "music aficionados" roaming in Our world these days-here or outside-tends to be dabblers-I thank You so much My Friend!!!
Re: Henry's Hand
1st Jul 2014 3:22am
wow, I really like your writing style your words flow beautifully.
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1st Jul 2014 2:13pm
Thank You again ShadowsF.S,!!!\
Very kind- when my brain works right...that style of English tends to be my favourite:)
Very kind- when my brain works right...that style of English tends to be my favourite:)
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Anonymous
3rd Jul 2014 2:53pm
very clever language usage and even in this type of write, a more solemn or stern piece, you retain that peaceful balance throughout. Always good to read your work :-)
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3rd Jul 2014 4:30pm
I appreciate You coming by this one Miki...this one I can actually stomach looking back...I had intended to further the subject in a later Write and lead into Elizabeth (She was my absolute favorite-Kick ass Woman-...but as You see I haven't circled back around yet...its one of thos -(one day things-right mood right time)
Always Appreciated ChickA!!!
Always Appreciated ChickA!!!
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Anonymous
3rd Jul 2014 4:34pm
I read a lot more than I comment on..because I hate to sound repetitive and I'm often just too lazy...(sometimes busy)
I do hope that you'll look into Victoria (the stoner queen), she is a fav of mine and one so worthy of a scribe
I know though..the mood, the timing..I know....
:-)
just keep writing...
I do hope that you'll look into Victoria (the stoner queen), she is a fav of mine and one so worthy of a scribe
I know though..the mood, the timing..I know....
:-)
just keep writing...
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4th Jul 2014 10:31pm
*I do hope that you'll look into Victoria (the stoner queen)*
Indeed :D Appreciate that!!!
Indeed :D Appreciate that!!!