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The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
Humpty Dumpty sat, like a wall
stoic, he didn't move towards love's call
so afraid betrayal, would make him fall
All the 'Queen's hoarseness
from all that begging
as it would appear
couldn't open Humpty to love again
Yet, with time,
she eased his soul
heart n' mind,
Humpty was happy
grateful for her love n' attention
it seemed she possessed
a special love of a different kind
Humpty Dumpty, stood set to fall
to his death, from ten stories high
because heartbroken he wished to die
after his Queen left him empty
n' feeling nothing at all...
stoic, he didn't move towards love's call
so afraid betrayal, would make him fall
All the 'Queen's hoarseness
from all that begging
as it would appear
couldn't open Humpty to love again
Yet, with time,
she eased his soul
heart n' mind,
Humpty was happy
grateful for her love n' attention
it seemed she possessed
a special love of a different kind
Humpty Dumpty, stood set to fall
to his death, from ten stories high
because heartbroken he wished to die
after his Queen left him empty
n' feeling nothing at all...
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Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
5th Jan 2014 7:12pm
awe, this is just as sad as the original... Shattering fall it is... You bring a powerful emotion to the table every time, Poetik :)
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5th Jan 2014 7:59pm
Thank you my dear, so grateful for always
having your support n kindness :)
having your support n kindness :)
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
5th Jan 2014 7:35pm
Ah! What a suicidal piece, Poe!
Afraid that just bandages
wouldn't do after the fall.
Grippingly sad ...
Afraid that just bandages
wouldn't do after the fall.
Grippingly sad ...
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re: Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
5th Jan 2014 8:03pm
I gotta admit I was about to do a nursery piece
But it wasn't gonna be dark, until I realized ur piece 'stuck' in my head, so that turn it took was from ur inspiring ink :)
Thank u my sweetie! Appreciate u :)
But it wasn't gonna be dark, until I realized ur piece 'stuck' in my head, so that turn it took was from ur inspiring ink :)
Thank u my sweetie! Appreciate u :)
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
5th Jan 2014 7:41pm
Damn you know how to turn a nursery rhyme blue... :)
Very creative, as only you can do, Poe...Xo
Very creative, as only you can do, Poe...Xo
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re: Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
5th Jan 2014 8:08pm
Thank you my sweet Rain, happy you found it creative
and I'm always glad to have your continued support as well!
:)
and I'm always glad to have your continued support as well!
:)
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
5th Jan 2014 9:05pm
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5th Jan 2014 9:25pm
Yo I think he heard u bro! lol
Thanks many times over for the continued support bro!
Thanks many times over for the continued support bro!
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
5th Jan 2014 10:04pm
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6th Jan 2014 1:06am
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
Anonymous
6th Jan 2014 3:08am
Your clever mind never stops. Sad but enjoyed. :)
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re: Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
6th Jan 2014 4:32am
Thank you my sweetie, I'm pleased you liked
n grateful always for your continued support :)
n grateful always for your continued support :)
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
Anonymous
6th Jan 2014 3:31am
Good take on the fable but still a sad tale.
I have to say you did an excellent job telling the tale, brilliantly done!
I have to say you did an excellent job telling the tale, brilliantly done!
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re: Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
6th Jan 2014 4:35am
Yea, I know it's sad yet it's also rooted in reality
to an extent, though most don't go so far as jumping off a building lol... Thank you my dear Vee, always appreciate
your support of me :)
to an extent, though most don't go so far as jumping off a building lol... Thank you my dear Vee, always appreciate
your support of me :)
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
7th Jan 2014 9:03am
re: Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
7th Jan 2014 1:35pm
Yea I know but I went with what came to me, sooooo lol
Appreciate your support my friend but sorry bout the sadness :)
Appreciate your support my friend but sorry bout the sadness :)
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7th Jan 2014 8:32pm
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7th Jan 2014 9:17pm
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
8th Jan 2014 3:14am
"all the 'Queen's Hoarseness" you sly dog! And that apostrophe before Queen is almost slyer.
This was a great read, so thanks form making it.
This was a great read, so thanks form making it.
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re: Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
8th Jan 2014 4:44am
WOW you are the ONLY one who seems to have realized what I did in both cases! lol
I'm flattered too as I've a habit of doing that n rarely does anyone catch it lol thanks a ton for your time, comment n sharp I lol
I'm flattered too as I've a habit of doing that n rarely does anyone catch it lol thanks a ton for your time, comment n sharp I lol
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8th Jan 2014 3:21am
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Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
11th Jan 2014 10:05am
I actually really liked this, this is how Nursery Rhymes should have been written.
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re: Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
11th Jan 2014 2:35pm
Gosh, what a wonderful compliment! :) thank you so much
I appreciate your thoughts n time on my ink. :)
I appreciate your thoughts n time on my ink. :)
Re: The Nursery Rhyme Diaries: Humpty Dumpty
16th Jan 2014 3:47am
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16th Jan 2014 3:49am
Thank you, you're wonderful...I really appreciate your support of my ink :)
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24th Jan 2014 4:52pm
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24th Jan 2014 5:56pm
Thanks, yea I know but hey we both know often there aren't many 'happy' outcomes except in fairy tales lol... Truly appreciate your thoughts n support :)