Looking In

I LOVE YOUR WORD CHOICE AND YOUR METAPHORES IN THE POME!!!

Thank you Nina..peace Crimsin

Aren't we all the devil and the angel? I love the thoughts in this. It mirrors my own thoughts.

thank you beautiful Jade I agree since I wrote this i've come to believe we are both in equal measure so we maintain a balance within us..

love Crim

"Looking in
Am I an angel
Or devil kin. "- they cast me out for reaching to the stars
striving
they struck me down
with lightening
fought me tooth and nail
so close i could taste the gilded gates
we burned benevolence where they could see




"I see beauty and light within me
But hide behind a mask of darkness
This being popular, right?"-  disguise, nailed me to totems
in the moonlight our blood looked like rain
breathtaking


"I see my soul
Truly, i'm made of both
Dark and light. "- the trapped me in a prism that was dark and light
speed filled telescopes
juipter
matter melted from time


"I've tried but over this disparity
I seem to have no control
This makes me fear for my soul. "- i felt the impulse
yet still cut the string with scissors
another life for the taking


"Looking in
I see vast unchained imagination
Others use theirs for evil, are my words such devistation?"-  we sought havoc
drew pleasure parting from good
the horizon broke the ones that remained
on beaches at daybreak
we were reborn



"I feel my guilt
Maybe my guts
Shouldn't be spilled."- war crimes they called religious
the innocent we called the guilty
tearing our own hearts in half
spreading across the great deserts


"I know i'm made different
I search for like minds
To spar with, to grow with. "- the taste was similar ,familiar
foraging through frost for snow


"I see we're all on a path, one of discovery
Our needs different, our souls everlasting
Negating the future, the past. "- we each rode our on destiny's
not darts on a board
but a math in the making
formula that freed us from our past


"Looking in
I'm know i'm loved, even in conflict
Set on this path by heaven above."- redeemed dead in the afterlife
paradise did not pick the perfect
sky and clouds caught us
the  fallen
so we fought to get back
with friends we would die for

excellent write Crim
your old and new works are both amazing
you brought us to our knees
a nick in the glass
incision
into your roller coaster ride of a mind

you must be " this tall to ride  lol


well penned

dearest Samael
you don't know how happy you made me
with your epic & fantastic critique..

I love your spin on each verse
you have such an awesome mind..

I'm deeply flattered that you chose
an old poem of mine
it was when my writers soul was brand new..

you're wonderful dear poet..

love Crim

thank you for being too awesome lol.