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Smoking my Blunt
Tasting that grape as I smoke my blunt
Licking the flavor from my plump lips
Each puff saving me from a weird world
Inhale
Hold
Cough
Hold
Blow it out
Let the illusion sink in as I pass the torch
Smoke streams upwards
Sucking that weed deep down
Laugh
Smoke
Cough
Smoke
Laugh
Cough
Blow it out
Sit and smile while I have a clam bake
Feeding my head with smoky thoughts
In a world of absolute craziness
Licking the flavor from my plump lips
Each puff saving me from a weird world
Inhale
Hold
Cough
Hold
Blow it out
Let the illusion sink in as I pass the torch
Smoke streams upwards
Sucking that weed deep down
Laugh
Smoke
Cough
Smoke
Laugh
Cough
Blow it out
Sit and smile while I have a clam bake
Feeding my head with smoky thoughts
In a world of absolute craziness
Published 19th Dec 2013
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19th Dec 2013 3:59pm
19th Dec 2013 4:51pm
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19th Dec 2013 4:15pm
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19th Dec 2013 4:53pm
Anonymous
19th Dec 2013 4:25pm
I loved this, I mean I really love this. This is very well done. The "E" structure is interest, possibly inhale and "E"xhale or when one says your name that say tommie so the "E" sound there. Liked it.
I'm glad you took notice of the letter.Your words humble me, thank you for reading SW.
19th Dec 2013 4:46pm
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19th Dec 2013 5:31pm
This was great. People think weed is bad, but it actually releases creativity you never knew you had. Keep up the great work.
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20th Dec 2013 1:51am
That's some serious writing Lady. I floated my way along the rows of words. Tuck a slow drawn backbeat in behind those lines and give Mr B Marley some space. Got the foot tapping already. You put me in the moment. Very smooth slick!! All power Tommie. xo
20th Dec 2013 2:18am
Glad to hear that TS.Nothing wrong with a little smoke.Thank you ;);););)xo
20th Dec 2013 2:39am
20th Dec 2013 2:45am
22nd Dec 2013 6:18am
Um ... I didn't see where you passed it Tommie ... Sharing is caring
LSP
LSP
I passed the "torch"...but, here..lol
Puff, puff ....passssss
Sorry about that LSP. :)
Puff, puff ....passssss
Sorry about that LSP. :)
22nd Dec 2013 3:12pm
Hmm ... I missed that "torch" line - must be my glaucoma acting up ... I better go see my doctor ; )
LSP
LSP
22nd Dec 2013 3:33pm
22nd Dec 2013 7:23pm
this cluttered crunch of words/word as most lines are, is fucking terrible. how anyone can call this poetry is beyond my ken.
i could write something of equal value about how i took a shit not too long ago.
shut door
de-cloth
sit
shit
wipe etc etc etc
its like claiming the art of making a pot noodle an art.
chumps like u make people hate poetry, and theres so many of u, i can see why.
i could write something of equal value about how i took a shit not too long ago.
shut door
de-cloth
sit
shit
wipe etc etc etc
its like claiming the art of making a pot noodle an art.
chumps like u make people hate poetry, and theres so many of u, i can see why.
Did I call this poetry?I just wrote about smoking.
Chumps...a wonderful word to use.Thank you!
I'd love to read your shit poem...let me know when it's finished. :)
You put so much effort in writing this you could have spelled out the word YOU.Sorry, pet pev! Thanks again for your honesty, much appreciated.
Chumps...a wonderful word to use.Thank you!
I'd love to read your shit poem...let me know when it's finished. :)
You put so much effort in writing this you could have spelled out the word YOU.Sorry, pet pev! Thanks again for your honesty, much appreciated.
