deepundergroundpoetry.com
My War-Hero.
He said he'd seen it all,
my lover, as he returns from war--
to put his bags at my door.
He holds me
and simply breaks.
I've never seen such zombie eyes,
my lover, he stares at me; vacantly.
How can I return him to what he should be?
The man who watched me
truly break.
For weeks on end,
my lover, had no idea
as I lived on this soundless fear
and overdramatic longing.
He leaves again,
my lover, picks his bags up from my door.
He leaves again to fight not only war
but beat the internal cross he bears, that is tearing,
my strange obsession with this eternal longing.
In my overdramatic way, I'll stay
sat so vacantly
by the world news and unbearably cry
on the day it's my lovers turn to die.
The horn is squeezed,
the soldier lowered
and with a loaded gun and a pack of cigarettes
this hot-blooded lover fades away...
LA: Inspired by 'Always Attract' - 'You Me At Six'
--Photo found @: http://mi9.com/wallpaper/little-soldier-and-lover_18046/[/font]
my lover, as he returns from war--
to put his bags at my door.
He holds me
and simply breaks.
I've never seen such zombie eyes,
my lover, he stares at me; vacantly.
How can I return him to what he should be?
The man who watched me
truly break.
For weeks on end,
my lover, had no idea
as I lived on this soundless fear
and overdramatic longing.
He leaves again,
my lover, picks his bags up from my door.
He leaves again to fight not only war
but beat the internal cross he bears, that is tearing,
my strange obsession with this eternal longing.
In my overdramatic way, I'll stay
sat so vacantly
by the world news and unbearably cry
on the day it's my lovers turn to die.
The horn is squeezed,
the soldier lowered
and with a loaded gun and a pack of cigarettes
this hot-blooded lover fades away...
LA: Inspired by 'Always Attract' - 'You Me At Six'
--Photo found @: http://mi9.com/wallpaper/little-soldier-and-lover_18046/[/font]
Published 3rd Feb 2011
| Edited 4th Feb 2011
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 2
reading list entries 2
comments 12
reads 1850
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
3rd Feb 2011 4:37pm
3rd Feb 2011 4:55pm
Anonymous
- Edited 4th Feb 2011 11:29am
3rd Feb 2011 7:47pm
Also contains some stunning phrases
"He holds me / and simply breaks"
And of course - excuse the pun - the 'killer' final line.
I think this is a great poem, well done.
S
"He holds me / and simply breaks"
And of course - excuse the pun - the 'killer' final line.
I think this is a great poem, well done.
S
4th Feb 2011 2:21am
Thank you, Laugharne =] I tried to capture what a girlfriend must be going through right now :)
4th Feb 2011 10:21am
Wow, truly opened up my eyes, got a friend going through this, never understood...
7th Feb 2011 10:45am
4th Feb 2011 12:22pm
One of the best poems in symbolic terms...Love and war as contrary images...such a moving piece. A gem among your writes.
7th Feb 2011 10:45am
7th Feb 2011 7:57am
My sanity is being played by feelings of shared despair and amazement.
Very well-written.
Very well-written.
7th Feb 2011 10:46am
I'm sorry, I'm glad you thought it was well written, thank you, Gabrielle!
7th Feb 2011 1:20pm
Oh, no, nothing to be sorry about! Sure thing. Coming across your work was a pleasant experience :D
3rd Mar 2013 9:36am
i love this poem, really shows the deepness and thought put into it,
keep it up
keep it up
