Dear Anonymous

Wow! That is intense! Love the last couplet!

Gemini

thank you Gemini blushes, smiling wide :) much love Crim

I love a secret...

this really is a secret Fenom.. thank you for making me smile with your visit :) much love Crim

I think we poets are intense and passionate people, words aren't just words they are frozen capsules of what we make them to be.
Whoever he is..i hope he knows it.

thank you for the insightful comment Vee but in this case we are worlds apart.. much love Crim :)

Oh, damn... I hope this is a wakeup call for him. Words are as physical as touch, sometimes.

thank you Petit but he probably won't even read this.. much love Crim

crims


quite the wordsmith you are, really nice poem, plenty of emotion, nice language and structure.

honestly, for me anyway I think that the last three lines take away from the rest of it a little. there's a huge contrast, it slides from eloquence to almost vulgar.

just my opinion of course, please don't take it to heart  :)  

great stuff miss , shine on  

thank you Craic for your honesty I deleted the last three lines I get what you mean.. I didn't take it to heart :)

sometimes they need a neon sign... shine on ^.^

beautifully written sweet Brenda.

thank you beautiful Mia I always love your visits you make me smile :) there's a glitch and I can't thumb up your comment but it made my night.. much love Brenda

hahahaaaa...with flashing asterisks and fireworks

thank you Tom you made me smile wide with your comment and add.. much love Crim :)

Yet another very passionate n sweet tribute to some lucky guy... Excellent spill lady

thank you Poe making me smile wide :) much love Crim

Truly a marked heart, perfectly expressed, Crim :)

thank you lovely Angel.. much love Crim :)

Crim,

Such a powerful weakness you've displayed! I hope this helps him read more than your lines ; )

tornado

thank you Tornado.. yes this is a bit vulnerable.. you made me smile with your comment ;) much love Crim

like the way you have constructed it. .it is indeed beautiful I like the mystery there .. I can relate to it to a level although I don't back off when things get hot...

one thing I'd like to know, is the first two lines really intended to get the readers hooked .. ? if yes then I'd suggest u to use  a bit of punctuation there like the word 'damn' cud have been 'damn!' and at the end  of that line a pause could have been added like 'deja vu.....' so that the 'here we go again' could have been more effective.

its just the way I was reading it , u know it better . the content and the feelings are really nice overall..

keep Rollin

cyanide...

thank you Cyanide for the honest and thoughtful critique.. thank you also for the great comment making me smile :) much love Crim

Beautiful piece criminy..mwah
an amazing dedication with intrepid truths and
numbing acquiescence to fears of rejection?

yards or continents apart...go! much love!

~Tom

thank you Tom for such an awesome comment.. smiling wide :) much love Crim

love the contrast here between power and vulnerability. beautifully written!

thank you lovely lady.. much love Crim :)

Always a feeling Poetess-Beautiful expression Dear Crim!!!

(I saw a write disappear today before I read it :(

thank you dear Soul.. that poem wasn't worth reading so I deleted it :) peace Crim

the emotion that can break your heart is sometimes the very one that heals it...
awesome inking brenda!!

thank you Cesar for the insightful comment :) much love Brenda

thank you Mr. A for such a beautiful comment touching my heart deeply :) much love Crim

this could be one of my new fav poems!! beautifully written,inspired..

thank you lovely lady :) peace Crim