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On the water
Distance
the sky cries out
pouring over liquid thoughts
as beads form
settling
comfortably
on leaves
dripping only
to quench
what part of parched
dies
from thirst
Waves
form oceans of time
and riding the crest
in my memory
touches
soft
whet appetites
horizon lines
paddling on
this soul sacred surf
beating
back time
the sky cries out
pouring over liquid thoughts
as beads form
settling
comfortably
on leaves
dripping only
to quench
what part of parched
dies
from thirst
Waves
form oceans of time
and riding the crest
in my memory
touches
soft
whet appetites
horizon lines
paddling on
this soul sacred surf
beating
back time
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Re: On the water
17th Oct 2013 10:23pm
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18th Oct 2013 1:10am
Re: On the water
17th Oct 2013 10:31pm
A brilliant play of words, Gabe! This is truly lovely! Love when you drop new ink! Xo
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re: Re: On the water
18th Oct 2013 1:11am
Re: On the water
17th Oct 2013 11:23pm
awesome man very "soulful" in the ol sd "soul sacred surf" fashion
tightly gripped but delicately woven., i like how it stays 2g neatly sd. well done man...
tightly gripped but delicately woven., i like how it stays 2g neatly sd. well done man...
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re: Re: On the water
18th Oct 2013 1:17am
Thanks Much JR...that's something I really need to work with is keeping things neat...or more use of stanzas and form...I shy from it much.
Re: On the water
18th Oct 2013 00:25am
Delved in memories, encouraged by beauty of nature...tranquil scenes evoked by a poets mind. I'm glad you have shared such thoughts and imageries. Good read, Soul.
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re: Re: On the water
18th Oct 2013 1:18am
Re: On the water
Anonymous
18th Oct 2013 2:14am
To what lost youth
does your soul yearn?
It is all now -
past,present, future
all live within you
does your soul yearn?
It is all now -
past,present, future
all live within you

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re: Re: On the water
18th Oct 2013 2:41am
Re: On the water
Anonymous
18th Oct 2013 6:11am
So fluently floating, and suits perfectly with your user name, 100 percent you!!! Big smile....

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re: Re: On the water
18th Oct 2013 2:12pm
Re: On the water
22nd Oct 2013 1:01am
Soul, I happened to notice that on one of your comments, you say "shy away from stanzas"
Soul, what you ink if it be long, short, whatever. It`s fek1n magical at times.
KG
Soul, what you ink if it be long, short, whatever. It`s fek1n magical at times.
KG
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22nd Oct 2013 2:47am
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