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Unrequired Love
Passionate and tender devotion,
in witch my heart is yearning.
Affectionately wanting, unconditionally
loving you.
Compassionate to your wants,
understanding to your needs.
It's unrequired love, for ever together
I hope to be.
Extraordinary is your touch, gooesbumps
I began to feel.
Intense is your love, you'll one out of a
million.
I appreciate the love you that you give,
it's so sincere.
It's remarkable ecstasy, I'm lusting you next
to me.
I want to be one with thee, trembling
uncontrollably.
Love has taken over me.
When I'm sick, you'll like novocaine you
get me back on my feet.
An no, no words could explain what
you mean to me.
in witch my heart is yearning.
Affectionately wanting, unconditionally
loving you.
Compassionate to your wants,
understanding to your needs.
It's unrequired love, for ever together
I hope to be.
Extraordinary is your touch, gooesbumps
I began to feel.
Intense is your love, you'll one out of a
million.
I appreciate the love you that you give,
it's so sincere.
It's remarkable ecstasy, I'm lusting you next
to me.
I want to be one with thee, trembling
uncontrollably.
Love has taken over me.
When I'm sick, you'll like novocaine you
get me back on my feet.
An no, no words could explain what
you mean to me.
Published 27th Nov 2010
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27th Nov 2010 9:46pm
You might also look at a few other tweaks to improve this poem...
Line 2 'for which'
Line 6 'of' your needs
L7 'unrequited' & 'forever'is one word
L9 'goosebumps'
L11 'you're'
L13 delete the first'you'
& L 20 'you're' not you'll
It's always worth double checking everything before posting. Errors of spelling and grammar are sure to put your reader off. Keep writing.
Best ~ Abra
Line 2 'for which'
Line 6 'of' your needs
L7 'unrequited' & 'forever'is one word
L9 'goosebumps'
L11 'you're'
L13 delete the first'you'
& L 20 'you're' not you'll
It's always worth double checking everything before posting. Errors of spelling and grammar are sure to put your reader off. Keep writing.
Best ~ Abra
28th Nov 2010 1:58am
Thank you so much DU teacher... I hope all of these words are spelled right. Love the haters, if you don't like why you read?
28th Nov 2010 6:35am
THANKS FOR THE PRIVATE HATE MAIL YOU SENT ME
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Best ~ Abra
28th Nov 2010 2:08pm
You don't know me at all. I don't like you!... your work is stupid and then you come talking about me... Stay off my page. page. keep your words to make your dumb ass poems better! Have a great day, you are awesome....
