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Cumberland call
Today,
I thought of our train ride
You in Your parka, I in my smile
rings around a mountain
smoke into sky, wafting
mini trips square upon the tongue
like days when we mat under the sun
an all glass car, dining among hillsides
tops of the trees, tunnels sneaking
kisses as diners peer sight see
do You recall conductors call
held the ticket we smiled in thrall
hugging close each other's security
blanket, held life chugging along
You said...
I love You, a cloud on my tongue
like cotton candy marshmallow
Us as in one, a passenger breathes
we cast shadow on the mountain
moving in light, forever glistening
while the train rolls, on and on
I thought of our train ride
You in Your parka, I in my smile
rings around a mountain
smoke into sky, wafting
mini trips square upon the tongue
like days when we mat under the sun
an all glass car, dining among hillsides
tops of the trees, tunnels sneaking
kisses as diners peer sight see
do You recall conductors call
held the ticket we smiled in thrall
hugging close each other's security
blanket, held life chugging along
You said...
I love You, a cloud on my tongue
like cotton candy marshmallow
Us as in one, a passenger breathes
we cast shadow on the mountain
moving in light, forever glistening
while the train rolls, on and on
Published 4th May 2013
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4th May 2013 7:55pm
well, the next time i go on a train ride
i'll defiantly make sure my moment is well spent
recording these memories.
sweet read my dear;]
i'll defiantly make sure my moment is well spent
recording these memories.
sweet read my dear;]
4th May 2013 8:09pm
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5th May 2013 00:25am
"Us as in one, a passenger breathes
we cast shadow on the mountain
moving in light"<--I love this!
Your ink is in a league of its own! :)
we cast shadow on the mountain
moving in light"<--I love this!
Your ink is in a league of its own! :)
5th May 2013 00:30am
Knew where to start that quote eh smart cookie-great minds Rain!!!
I thank You so very much, humbled by Your kind words Always!!!
I thank You so very much, humbled by Your kind words Always!!!
5th May 2013 00:30am
5th May 2013 00:48am
5th May 2013 1:45am
If I could, I would never get on a plane again---my favorite long distance mode of transportation is always the train.
Thanks for reminding me of so many memories, on different continents, no less.
Thanks for reminding me of so many memories, on different continents, no less.
5th May 2013 2:03am
Anonymous
5th May 2013 1:54am
Beautiful soul
strider
strider
5th May 2013 2:04am
5th May 2013 6:19am
Soul you have a way of taking me on journey with you..a beautiful one..peace Crim :)
5th May 2013 7:01am
5th May 2013 8:39am
Lovely, lovely, poem.
Heart warming, with imagery of the
'shadow on the mountain ...'
Soulful write, Soul :)
Heart warming, with imagery of the
'shadow on the mountain ...'
Soulful write, Soul :)
5th May 2013 7:38pm
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6th May 2013 10:39pm
I love your poems they always give me a mental visual that I simply love..
Much love
G
Much love
G
7th May 2013 00:24am
So sweet You are Dear Glynis I thank You O so much, You made me smile big:)
7th May 2013 3:24pm
This was a very pretty piece something sweet about it that makes one sigh. nice work.
Red
Red
7th May 2013 4:04pm
Awwww Thank You Dear Red-sweet:) much appreciated-this was the intent appreciate the reading me!!!
7th May 2013 3:28pm
I can only assume you are talking about The Gap. Exquisite place, one of my favorites. The railroad history there (the history of many in my family to boot) is wonderful.
You paint a lovely ride here :)
You paint a lovely ride here :)
7th May 2013 4:07pm
Indeed MaggieG:) a magical place for sure thanks for the share- my family as well- hopefully always this area will hold it's beauty- Humbled by Your visit-greatly appreciated:)
