Observational Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Abracadabra
Poem Published
Today 5:20pm
Today 5:20pm
The Guilty Generation
I wake up angry
as two faced January
screams the death throes of our world
The kids say it's my fault
that I could have done more
The 'guilty' generation
who should have done more
So I took my rage to a church
where cold high ceilings
squander energy
while my anger squirms
I am angry at God
and myself
for listening
to too much news
I should learn to shut it all out
put my head in the sand--
but then isn't that what God does
while his children burn
as two faced January
screams the death throes of our world
The kids say it's my fault
that I could have done more
The 'guilty' generation
who should have done more
So I took my rage to a church
where cold high ceilings
squander energy
while my anger squirms
I am angry at God
and myself
for listening
to too much news
I should learn to shut it all out
put my head in the sand--
but then isn't that what God does
while his children burn
#anger
#sadness
#vulnerability
9 reads
0 Comments
Casted_Runes
Mr Karswell
Mr Karswell
Poem Published
Today 3:15pm
Today 3:15pm
Like an Echo
"She should be like a town clock — keep time and observe regularity. She should not, however, like a town clock, speak so loudly that all the town may hear her.
She should be like a snail — prudent, and keep within her own house.
She should not be like a snail — carry all she has upon her back.
She should be like an echo — speak when spoken to.
But she should not be like an echo — determined always to have the last word." - "Three Wifely Virtues", The Australian Woman's Mirror, 24/02/1925
A snail slimes across a leaf,
Its hearth and...
She should be like a snail — prudent, and keep within her own house.
She should not be like a snail — carry all she has upon her back.
She should be like an echo — speak when spoken to.
But she should not be like an echo — determined always to have the last word." - "Three Wifely Virtues", The Australian Woman's Mirror, 24/02/1925
A snail slimes across a leaf,
Its hearth and...
#abuse
#feminism
#historical #marriage
#historical #marriage
28 reads
2 Comments
Northern_Soul
Poem Published
Today 2:51pm
Today 2:51pm
Of Insects & Order
I’d come to adore you in your blue hat
on a silent afternoon, thought furrowed,
cigarette in hand while furious traffic
ploughed on beneath a balcony,
twin cups of tea on a city’s smudged stone
while you talked of everything
and nothing at all
childhood
council-tax
the telly pulled from a skip
in the dead of night
that needed a new plug
there was something comforting there,
as if all the junk in your head became mine
in some unimportant corner of the world.
Talking to you
was just like talking...
on a silent afternoon, thought furrowed,
cigarette in hand while furious traffic
ploughed on beneath a balcony,
twin cups of tea on a city’s smudged stone
while you talked of everything
and nothing at all
childhood
council-tax
the telly pulled from a skip
in the dead of night
that needed a new plug
there was something comforting there,
as if all the junk in your head became mine
in some unimportant corner of the world.
Talking to you
was just like talking...
#friendship
#OCD
28 reads
4 Comments
NP_NP
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:43pm
Yesterday 10:43pm
Yin & Yang
It’s yin and yang,
the dance of light and dark,
each needing the other
to keep life balanced.
We tug at the threads of blame,
claiming truth on either side,
but in reality—
neither of us is always right
nor always wrong.
We move through life,
clutching at self-preservation,
yet sleepwalking in the shadow of our own minds,
unaware of the darkness we fear.
If you fear your shadows,
know this—
you haven’t touched divinity yet,
there’s still more of you to unfold.
Place your bets, ...
the dance of light and dark,
each needing the other
to keep life balanced.
We tug at the threads of blame,
claiming truth on either side,
but in reality—
neither of us is always right
nor always wrong.
We move through life,
clutching at self-preservation,
yet sleepwalking in the shadow of our own minds,
unaware of the darkness we fear.
If you fear your shadows,
know this—
you haven’t touched divinity yet,
there’s still more of you to unfold.
Place your bets, ...
#inspirational
#learning
#meditation
#SelfDiscovery
#SelfReflection
41 reads
1 Comment
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:05pm
Yesterday 8:05pm
An Ode to Stonehenge
In an age a long time ago was built this circle of hell
Here they stand stone next to stone, nobody knows their true power
This was a place where magicians work
On an altar they practiced their cult
With the power of words, they changed the four elements
Fire - Water - Air and Earth - defeated me and be my slave
See my hands and feel the strength - obey my might, obey my will
No one knows what it really can be, also today the legend still lives
They are only signs of a time, where other laws exist on this earth
In the south of England...
Here they stand stone next to stone, nobody knows their true power
This was a place where magicians work
On an altar they practiced their cult
With the power of words, they changed the four elements
Fire - Water - Air and Earth - defeated me and be my slave
See my hands and feel the strength - obey my might, obey my will
No one knows what it really can be, also today the legend still lives
They are only signs of a time, where other laws exist on this earth
In the south of England...
#admiration
#magic
#mystery
#pagan
#power
57 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:26am
Yesterday 11:26am
That's all your worth
Wretched but beautiful
My eyes see you but I look away
Throw yourself into a den of lions
I'll bring the popcorn and goobers
Will they eat you or spit you out
Your flesh is bitter and diseased
To much negativity and malignancy
How can one walk around with such a tainted soul?
Bless yourself in my river of urine
That's what I think of you anyway
Take it, accept it
That's all your worth
Go home and drown yourself in your bottomless, endless self pity
Hope your having a great weekend
My eyes see you but I look away
Throw yourself into a den of lions
I'll bring the popcorn and goobers
Will they eat you or spit you out
Your flesh is bitter and diseased
To much negativity and malignancy
How can one walk around with such a tainted soul?
Bless yourself in my river of urine
That's what I think of you anyway
Take it, accept it
That's all your worth
Go home and drown yourself in your bottomless, endless self pity
Hope your having a great weekend
#fiction
#hate
#manipulation
#SelfHarm
#TruthOfLife
41 reads
4 Comments
AfterSexDilemma
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:22am
Yesterday 10:22am
Truth
You don't need friends and family.
You just want them.
A child actually needs you.
You just want them.
A child actually needs you.
#TruthOfLife
42 reads
9 Comments
drone
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:39am
Yesterday 7:39am
It's Free
It's a funny old world
Where people believe
That they have
Free Will
That it is
Free
NO payment required
To use their
Free Will
Because their Mind
Tells them so
When in truth
The Price
Is
One's Psychological
Blood sweat and tears
Fighting those
Unconscious Biases
Those Thoughts
Not in your Name
For some
The Price
Is to High
To Pay
Where people believe
That they have
Free Will
That it is
Free
NO payment required
To use their
Free Will
Because their Mind
Tells them so
When in truth
The Price
Is
One's Psychological
Blood sweat and tears
Fighting those
Unconscious Biases
Those Thoughts
Not in your Name
For some
The Price
Is to High
To Pay
#honesty
#philosophical
50 reads
2 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
11th Jan 2025 11:19pm
11th Jan 2025 11:19pm
What the world needs now
As we enter into a new year in 2025 let's ask ourselves, what the world really 🌎 needs now 🤔 at this very moment in time. FOR do we really need the immigrants and maggots with there hands out demanding, more assistance when they are getting a $3,000 credit card and $4,000 for food, and they don't even have an apartment due to the fact they live in in property that was supposed to be for the American citizen? YET have an apartment just going from shelter to shelter. 🤨 For now we welcome a new change of not, having to deal with the Democrats party, who have slowly...
#corruption
#emotional
#politics
#StreamOfConsciousness
#uplifting
34 reads
0 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
11th Jan 2025 10:20pm
11th Jan 2025 10:20pm
Toilet trouble
I knew i was short on TP...
thought it was just a quick wee!
Didn't know what to do...
when a burst of poo poo...
Surprised both my pee pee and me!
thought it was just a quick wee!
Didn't know what to do...
when a burst of poo poo...
Surprised both my pee pee and me!
#anxiety
#PTSD
43 reads
5 Comments
AfterSexDilemma
Poem Published
11th Jan 2025 6:45pm
11th Jan 2025 6:45pm
Wow
Text me a year later
When you finally realize,
I know everything.
When you finally realize,
I know everything.
#ignorance
50 reads
11 Comments
CasketSharpe
Poem Published
11th Jan 2025 3:45pm
11th Jan 2025 3:45pm
Transformers!! The Woke is About to Die
#humankind
18 reads
2 Comments
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