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rickthepoetwarrior
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:53pm
Yesterday 10:53pm
Kill All Cats
It's still bugging me
Bloody cat food
Should I direct my anger
At cat food
Why not?
My food contains
Processed – May contain – Warning
My cat's food
“Biologically Appropriate Nutrients”
“Specially Selected”
“All Natural”
Bloody cats!
Bloody cat food
Should I direct my anger
At cat food
Why not?
My food contains
Processed – May contain – Warning
My cat's food
“Biologically Appropriate Nutrients”
“Specially Selected”
“All Natural”
Bloody cats!
#consumerism
26 reads
0 Comments
rickthepoetwarrior
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:27pm
Yesterday 9:27pm
Modern Living
So it’s I don’t know
So it’s I don’t care
Modern living
Under where
The Middle Class
Have gone to sheep
In branded linen
Secrets sleep
Woken weekday
Shutters peep
Don® Care-less® Kotten®
Fashion creep
Long endless fares
Jammed knee deep
“It’s only business”
Morals sweep
Scarf instant lunches
Calorie heap
A quick refresher
Just one seep
“It’s only business”
Morals sweep
Then drag back home
Promise to keep
In branded linen
Secrets steep ...
So it’s I don’t care
Modern living
Under where
The Middle Class
Have gone to sheep
In branded linen
Secrets sleep
Woken weekday
Shutters peep
Don® Care-less® Kotten®
Fashion creep
Long endless fares
Jammed knee deep
“It’s only business”
Morals sweep
Scarf instant lunches
Calorie heap
A quick refresher
Just one seep
“It’s only business”
Morals sweep
Then drag back home
Promise to keep
In branded linen
Secrets steep ...
#consumerism
#identity
#morality
26 reads
0 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:24pm
Yesterday 5:24pm
~the unsettling
Viz
#dark
#environment
#hope
#love
#pollution
36 reads
0 Comments
MalcolmG
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:27pm
Yesterday 3:27pm
Bound by Time ...
We are all brothers and sisters through time,
no matter the generation before or yet to come,
we share the same thoughts and feelings.
Just as you feel when you look out into the oceans and watch the waves,
this was how I felt.
Just as you experience frustration in the tangle of everyday life,
I too lived in days filled with frustration.
Just as you are one of many in a crowd,
I too was a face among the countless.
Just as you are refreshed by the river’s gentle flow,
I too was cleansed and renewed.
Just as you seek relief on a...
no matter the generation before or yet to come,
we share the same thoughts and feelings.
Just as you feel when you look out into the oceans and watch the waves,
this was how I felt.
Just as you experience frustration in the tangle of everyday life,
I too lived in days filled with frustration.
Just as you are one of many in a crowd,
I too was a face among the countless.
Just as you are refreshed by the river’s gentle flow,
I too was cleansed and renewed.
Just as you seek relief on a...
#healing
#honesty
#inspirational
#LifeChangingMoment
#wisdom
19 reads
0 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
Yesterday 12:46pm
Yesterday 12:46pm
Mingle Hells
Jingle bells, the night prevails,
the skull full of vodka sways.
Through the snow the spirits flow
in a haze of holiday craze.
Silent nights with blurry sights.
Laughter echoes in the air.
Raise a toast to the ghost
of memories we all share.
Cheers to friends and to the ends
of bottles lined in a row.
In the glow let it show.
The warmth of hearts we know.
Jingle bells, the story tells
of nights both wild and bright.
With the skull full of vodka
we toast to the festive light.
the skull full of vodka sways.
Through the snow the spirits flow
in a haze of holiday craze.
Silent nights with blurry sights.
Laughter echoes in the air.
Raise a toast to the ghost
of memories we all share.
Cheers to friends and to the ends
of bottles lined in a row.
In the glow let it show.
The warmth of hearts we know.
Jingle bells, the story tells
of nights both wild and bright.
With the skull full of vodka
we toast to the festive light.
#alcohol
#Christmas
#hell
#holiday
#lies
31 reads
5 Comments
MySmile
Besma
Besma
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:52am
Yesterday 9:52am
Trodden Paths Not In Vain
"Paint in silence”
“The Weight of Temp”
Colour your canvas and spill your Art
shake and awaken many a heart
Untether your soul
from your whole
escape mundane and time
and let your brush rhyme
Have Man radiate
pour oil colours on his trait
Carve his seized dreams
and his insight of flowing streams
Let me read his cry of birth
and see the drops of tears on earth
A valiant core, the shell is worn
could not be broken, though torn
You display a challenging stand
behind a back forced to bend ...
“The Weight of Temp”
Colour your canvas and spill your Art
shake and awaken many a heart
Untether your soul
from your whole
escape mundane and time
and let your brush rhyme
Have Man radiate
pour oil colours on his trait
Carve his seized dreams
and his insight of flowing streams
Let me read his cry of birth
and see the drops of tears on earth
A valiant core, the shell is worn
could not be broken, though torn
You display a challenging stand
behind a back forced to bend ...
#art
#beauty
#FreeVerse
#humankind
#prose
38 reads
5 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:48am
Yesterday 9:48am
Getting Paid
We’re getting paid
We both wake up before the rooster calls
Do our routine don’t want to be late for school
Bell rings class is ending
Head for the locker room where I’m the One
You are in the state championship I’m trying too
All the sudden I’m in the papers and screens
We are colliding with greatness on different pay scales
I am better than you I bring more fans to watch me
You are excellent but not as good as me
And you will disagree
You are a tree that gives me shade but I...
We both wake up before the rooster calls
Do our routine don’t want to be late for school
Bell rings class is ending
Head for the locker room where I’m the One
You are in the state championship I’m trying too
All the sudden I’m in the papers and screens
We are colliding with greatness on different pay scales
I am better than you I bring more fans to watch me
You are excellent but not as good as me
And you will disagree
You are a tree that gives me shade but I...
#men
#motivational
#sacrifice
#sports
#women
24 reads
0 Comments
DamianDeadLove
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:47am
Yesterday 6:47am
Straw-Man
Wealthy white men consumed with greed
Business meetings are a verbal circle jerk
Corrupt power junkies with an ego to feed
Bad intentions always hide behind a smirk
Doublespeak laced with some political jive
Demonic spirts nest beneath a simple mind
Conspiracy plans are alibis used to survive
Loopholes in the law a scapegoat in a bind
Worshipping a straw-man that they created
While cowards lie to protect the investment
Proposed numbers been artificially inflated
For this is a hotbed that breeds resentment
...
Business meetings are a verbal circle jerk
Corrupt power junkies with an ego to feed
Bad intentions always hide behind a smirk
Doublespeak laced with some political jive
Demonic spirts nest beneath a simple mind
Conspiracy plans are alibis used to survive
Loopholes in the law a scapegoat in a bind
Worshipping a straw-man that they created
While cowards lie to protect the investment
Proposed numbers been artificially inflated
For this is a hotbed that breeds resentment
...
#corruption
#greed
50 reads
11 Comments
ChaosScripted
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:00am
Yesterday 6:00am
“Limerick of the Last Trumpet”
Discontented Donkeys bellow and “nay”;
Bickering and bitching among the corrupt & clean.
A convoluted creation provoking dismay;
The Great Experiment or The Broken Machine?
Bickering and bitching among the corrupt & clean.
A convoluted creation provoking dismay;
The Great Experiment or The Broken Machine?
#corruption
#deception
#freedom
#politics
#power
35 reads
2 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:35am
Yesterday 2:35am
November
The slow roll of the twilight gray
comes to kiss the day away
in nimbostratus billow sky
and silhouettes for every eye
of leafless branch and naked twig
in lumber slumber for the sprig...
we hope to see, come what may,
after winter has had its say.
comes to kiss the day away
in nimbostratus billow sky
and silhouettes for every eye
of leafless branch and naked twig
in lumber slumber for the sprig...
we hope to see, come what may,
after winter has had its say.
#wind
53 reads
2 Comments
drone
Poem Published
23rd Nov 2024 7:41am
23rd Nov 2024 7:41am
Your Just. A Number
Most of Them
Look upon Us
As Like
Psychological doctors
Pillable and filed
Numbers on a Voting board
Just another Utility
For their Means
Look upon Us
As Like
Psychological doctors
Pillable and filed
Numbers on a Voting board
Just another Utility
For their Means
#honesty
#sadness
#TruthOfLife
29 reads
0 Comments
drone
Poem Published
23rd Nov 2024 7:32am
23rd Nov 2024 7:32am
Push
Pushing your Mind
Is like
Giving Birth
To Yourself
Painfull
And then the Sceams
Is like
Giving Birth
To Yourself
Painfull
And then the Sceams
#honesty
#TruthOfLife
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0 Comments
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