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gateunder
Poem Published
Today 6:51pm
Today 6:51pm
sexting poetry MP andrew griffiths
sexting poetry MP andrew griffiths 16.07.18
spotted a obsession
in the media out played
2000 texts would give anyone depression
never used txt poetry to get laid.
not the same for andrew
"i can be an evil -------- when i'm turned on"
they are not the first and won't be last few
power and privilege is just a con.
is there a problem with power
do as i say not as i do
my balls never make me cower
do we need a governmental "me to".
"how rough do you like it"
poetry can be a nasty card
did you think poor clit ...
spotted a obsession
in the media out played
2000 texts would give anyone depression
never used txt poetry to get laid.
not the same for andrew
"i can be an evil -------- when i'm turned on"
they are not the first and won't be last few
power and privilege is just a con.
is there a problem with power
do as i say not as i do
my balls never make me cower
do we need a governmental "me to".
"how rough do you like it"
poetry can be a nasty card
did you think poor clit ...
#sex
#porn
#threesome
#dirty
#temptation
1 read
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Dylan_Wolfram_24
Poem Published
Today 6:47pm
Today 6:47pm
Not Us
One hundred
One hunnit
One honey
Is it all it takes
to simply use
and dig the groove
to be #100
One hunnit
One honey
Is it all it takes
to simply use
and dig the groove
to be #100
#money
#honesty
#LifeGoals #consumerism
#LifeGoals #consumerism
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Dylan_Wolfram_24
Poem Published
Today 6:35pm
Today 6:35pm
Portraits
#1
She laughs with her hand hiding her mouth
And her eyes releasing a thousand fireworks all at once
But she refuses to look at them.
Smiling at strangers is her hobby
always wishing for them to smile back.
She has love in her heart which she was taught to hide
Like that stupid Beatles song used to sing.
But she tries every day to tear those walls down.
There’s beauty in her pain the way her eyes glow
When she’s about to cry cause she feels stuck
In a carousel of demons and there’s no one with her.
I promised I’d go...
She laughs with her hand hiding her mouth
And her eyes releasing a thousand fireworks all at once
But she refuses to look at them.
Smiling at strangers is her hobby
always wishing for them to smile back.
She has love in her heart which she was taught to hide
Like that stupid Beatles song used to sing.
But she tries every day to tear those walls down.
There’s beauty in her pain the way her eyes glow
When she’s about to cry cause she feels stuck
In a carousel of demons and there’s no one with her.
I promised I’d go...
#anger
#loneliness
#hope
#courage
#ignorance
3 reads
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Angeliki
Poem Published
Today 1:55pm
Today 1:55pm
The Savage sun
Close your eyes
Focus on the darkness
There is abit of fire resurrecting
The past, only you know
The answers, only you can work out
History, ancient hydrogen
Made me cry_in front of the
Savage sun
In case of emergency
Read any book for answer
This starship is revolving around
Jupiters new church laws
To give money to molested children
It sounds like evolution will finally find
Ordinance, oh savage sun
Its real, don't worry
The missionary will help
The predators to find peace orelse
The savage sun will...
Focus on the darkness
There is abit of fire resurrecting
The past, only you know
The answers, only you can work out
History, ancient hydrogen
Made me cry_in front of the
Savage sun
In case of emergency
Read any book for answer
This starship is revolving around
Jupiters new church laws
To give money to molested children
It sounds like evolution will finally find
Ordinance, oh savage sun
Its real, don't worry
The missionary will help
The predators to find peace orelse
The savage sun will...
#abuse
14 reads
1 Comment
gateunder
Poem Published
Today 11:16am
Today 11:16am
going to sue poetry if i may thanks to trump
going to sue poetry if i may thanks to trump 16.07.18
when push comes to shove
and all are exhausted and blue
dealing with trump needs a glove
then a ingenious idea to sue.
we are in a pickle
voters did instigate
bit of fun was slap and tickle
but now is the infuriate.
backed into a corner
most path ways closed
hotter in the uk then a sauna
poetry has been exposed.
i agree with trump
from poetry i will now gain
millions will be my lump
the damage from poetry is the stain.
never write a verse
donald...
when push comes to shove
and all are exhausted and blue
dealing with trump needs a glove
then a ingenious idea to sue.
we are in a pickle
voters did instigate
bit of fun was slap and tickle
but now is the infuriate.
backed into a corner
most path ways closed
hotter in the uk then a sauna
poetry has been exposed.
i agree with trump
from poetry i will now gain
millions will be my lump
the damage from poetry is the stain.
never write a verse
donald...
#anxiety
#frustration
#confusion
#disappointment
#emptiness
9 reads
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buddhakitty
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:22am
Yesterday 00:22am
a good laugh
you expect
the world
to change
for you?
make a place
for you?
care about
you?
...tee hee...snicker
snicker...heh heh...
BWAH-HA-HA-HA
HA-HA-HA (snort)
HA-HA...HEE-HO-
HO...Woooooo...
chortle...titter...
snicker...gasp...
(ahem)...
oh wait...
your
serious
(c) 2018 R.R. Zinn
the world
to change
for you?
make a place
for you?
care about
you?
...tee hee...snicker
snicker...heh heh...
BWAH-HA-HA-HA
HA-HA-HA (snort)
HA-HA...HEE-HO-
HO...Woooooo...
chortle...titter...
snicker...gasp...
(ahem)...
oh wait...
your
serious
(c) 2018 R.R. Zinn
#vanity
24 reads
15 Comments
BigVirge
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:53pm
Yesterday 7:53pm
"Communities & Connections" ... A Poem written by Big Virge 19/5/2005
The thought of ... Communities ...
Interests Me .....
because communities NEED ... " UNITY " ...
If they're gonna succeed ...
In ... Keeping The ... " Peace " ... !!!
Peace and Love ...
Can Create ... Harmony ...
Harmony ...
Creates ... Peaceful Streets ...
Streets that require ...
LESS police ... !!!
Because Police are required ...
TOO FREQUENTLY ... !!!!!
Police NEED To ... Recognise ...
How They ... BE ... !!!
cos' Harassment of youth ...
Can UPSET Their ... " Chi " ... !!!
...
Interests Me .....
because communities NEED ... " UNITY " ...
If they're gonna succeed ...
In ... Keeping The ... " Peace " ... !!!
Peace and Love ...
Can Create ... Harmony ...
Harmony ...
Creates ... Peaceful Streets ...
Streets that require ...
LESS police ... !!!
Because Police are required ...
TOO FREQUENTLY ... !!!!!
Police NEED To ... Recognise ...
How They ... BE ... !!!
cos' Harassment of youth ...
Can UPSET Their ... " Chi " ... !!!
...
#love
#kindness
#religion #philosophical
#religion #philosophical
11 reads
4 Comments
Juvenalis66
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:40pm
Yesterday 7:40pm
Love (handle with care)
#rejection
#abuse
#escape
#hypocrisy
#revenge
25 reads
11 Comments
Timeternal
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:37pm
Yesterday 5:37pm
The Status
Cool breeze can't ya see Im on a journey of three to achieve the MC but In disbelief I see the sad scene
Mainstream MCs now just a dream
Whatever happened ta rocking the mic
Every single day and every single night
For the love of the light and the might for insight to incite in spite of the plight we gotta fight? its all right, u're not quite an MC
Businessman would be more likely and I
Gotta say that I respect the way your bringing the fat stacks home everyday
but stop frontin man and just pay ure dues Cool J was doin it long before you Versamilitude...
Mainstream MCs now just a dream
Whatever happened ta rocking the mic
Every single day and every single night
For the love of the light and the might for insight to incite in spite of the plight we gotta fight? its all right, u're not quite an MC
Businessman would be more likely and I
Gotta say that I respect the way your bringing the fat stacks home everyday
but stop frontin man and just pay ure dues Cool J was doin it long before you Versamilitude...
#rap
10 reads
0 Comments
poetryaccident
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:42pm
Yesterday 4:42pm
Crimson Floods
This plan evoked by demons’ prayers
assumed the worst of fellow men
condemned them by the stroke
of the dogma within a book
attributing falls before they occurred
explained as fate that must befall
with no recourse to a grace allowed
for the fallen ones with principle
these are condemned by ministry
cast aside as the defiled
while the tenets provide a path
for the flock to pardon’s glow
the magic wand would be waved
absolution for bloodied hands
a lifetime dismissed with a wink
patter forgiving what came before ...
assumed the worst of fellow men
condemned them by the stroke
of the dogma within a book
attributing falls before they occurred
explained as fate that must befall
with no recourse to a grace allowed
for the fallen ones with principle
these are condemned by ministry
cast aside as the defiled
while the tenets provide a path
for the flock to pardon’s glow
the magic wand would be waved
absolution for bloodied hands
a lifetime dismissed with a wink
patter forgiving what came before ...
#religion
5 reads
0 Comments
takis1917
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:42pm
Yesterday 2:42pm
Growth
Mistakes you repeat
carry twists you add each time...
Practice makes perfect...
carry twists you add each time...
Practice makes perfect...
#haiku
18 reads
2 Comments
SatansSperm
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:46pm
Yesterday 1:46pm
Do roses bloom in winter.....
Unique patterns
of swirls and lines
press liquid sand
to bruise
breath to fog
the tourniquet noose
left her
dangling like
a pubescent corpse
and all she wanted
was to feel the rain
one more time
of swirls and lines
press liquid sand
to bruise
breath to fog
the tourniquet noose
left her
dangling like
a pubescent corpse
and all she wanted
was to feel the rain
one more time
#religion
12 reads
0 Comments
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