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CosiestPrism273
Poem Published
Today 3:26am
Today 3:26am
Reality
What is real?
What is fake?
Is what you see true?
What about opinions you make?
Are you truly here?
Are you just a figment of someone's mind?
Are you in someone's game?
Is that what you will find?
Who are you?
Are you even alive?
Do you have thoughts?
Are you just another bee in a hive?
Is your mind even controlled by you?
Do you have any say in what is chosen?
Are you just a random spin from death?
Are you in ice and frozen?
Is this all a dream?
Is this all a simulation?
Is there...
What is fake?
Is what you see true?
What about opinions you make?
Are you truly here?
Are you just a figment of someone's mind?
Are you in someone's game?
Is that what you will find?
Who are you?
Are you even alive?
Do you have thoughts?
Are you just another bee in a hive?
Is your mind even controlled by you?
Do you have any say in what is chosen?
Are you just a random spin from death?
Are you in ice and frozen?
Is this all a dream?
Is this all a simulation?
Is there...
#universe
#fate
#mirror
#philosophical
#reading
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5 Comments
again
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:55pm
Yesterday 6:55pm
Of Loneliness
we all are alone
and as Yul Bryner has said
man is born lives and dies alone
so why moan
when in loneliness think of a friend like me
and as you go along
life's loneliness will be cut
like slice of buttered bread
believe me
loneliness is not only for you
but for so many
you have poetry up your sleeve compose more lyrics for me .....
and so on
go on
and as Yul Bryner has said
man is born lives and dies alone
so why moan
when in loneliness think of a friend like me
and as you go along
life's loneliness will be cut
like slice of buttered bread
believe me
loneliness is not only for you
but for so many
you have poetry up your sleeve compose more lyrics for me .....
and so on
go on
#WritingPoetry
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ClassyBird
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:16pm
Yesterday 2:16pm
Impacting War
There is a silence that sweeps the street
As our sons and fathers are called to war
There is no telling what might be
as they fight for their country
leaving homes hollow void
breaking smiles and families
many will perish many will die
and the acquainted will cry
flags will fly
dog-tags delivered to homes and teary eyed
I’d imagine the devastating
of a mother's only child
or the brokenness of a little girl,
orphaned by the stride.
I think of all the people who’ve survived
Yet fighting war in their minds. ...
As our sons and fathers are called to war
There is no telling what might be
as they fight for their country
leaving homes hollow void
breaking smiles and families
many will perish many will die
and the acquainted will cry
flags will fly
dog-tags delivered to homes and teary eyed
I’d imagine the devastating
of a mother's only child
or the brokenness of a little girl,
orphaned by the stride.
I think of all the people who’ve survived
Yet fighting war in their minds. ...
#courage
#soldiers
#war
#evolution
#heroic
12 reads
1 Comment
Fetchitnow
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:51pm
Yesterday 1:51pm
Pure Music
Pure music, is just three chords and some homemade truth
Much like the glory days, of New York Yankees and Babe Ruth
It’s like eating chicken one day, feathers the next
Or totally in love, ending in a divorce court, with no respect
She can make you cry, smile, think or dream, how bizarre
It can sound like being inside, an old guitar
Being perfectly picked and plucked, as one should
Fully surrounded by good ole seasoned wood
Like a community is unity, which once went without saying
It’ll help propel the voice of the next generation, in the...
Much like the glory days, of New York Yankees and Babe Ruth
It’s like eating chicken one day, feathers the next
Or totally in love, ending in a divorce court, with no respect
She can make you cry, smile, think or dream, how bizarre
It can sound like being inside, an old guitar
Being perfectly picked and plucked, as one should
Fully surrounded by good ole seasoned wood
Like a community is unity, which once went without saying
It’ll help propel the voice of the next generation, in the...
#music
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drone
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:34am
Yesterday 11:34am
Wounded
Is it not
the little things
in life
that will try you
to your core
knee jerk reactions
Avoidable actions
becoming wounded
by your own arrows
Firing
your resentment
at others
when in truth
it is only you
that feels the pain
the little things
in life
that will try you
to your core
knee jerk reactions
Avoidable actions
becoming wounded
by your own arrows
Firing
your resentment
at others
when in truth
it is only you
that feels the pain
#TruthOfLife
#honesty
19 reads
2 Comments
drone
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:16am
Yesterday 7:16am
Relearning
No matter
what they tell you
no matter what
other people say
one should never
even try
to unlearn
what one has been
led to believe
It cannot be done
one should aknowledge
that fact
then put it aside
to begin the process
of relearning
All those things
that they try to hide
within twisted partail
confusing truths
within
out right lies
what they tell you
no matter what
other people say
one should never
even try
to unlearn
what one has been
led to believe
It cannot be done
one should aknowledge
that fact
then put it aside
to begin the process
of relearning
All those things
that they try to hide
within twisted partail
confusing truths
within
out right lies
#TruthOfLife
#honesty
15 reads
3 Comments
cabcool
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:22am
Yesterday 5:22am
PeaceRevolution
An eye for an eye will only make the whole world blind.” ― Mahatma Gandhi
turbulent skies don fancy clouds
tempers red hot whose moods enshroud
poor men's better judgment
sentiments bruised by fearsome angst
ember and burn the hills amongst
with a strange estrangement
what now the lens of human mien
whose troubles sweep swift and unseen
unsuspecting sluggards
has reason died without a will
intestate full, conscience death still
bellyful for buzzards
there is a better way of life
senza...
turbulent skies don fancy clouds
tempers red hot whose moods enshroud
poor men's better judgment
sentiments bruised by fearsome angst
ember and burn the hills amongst
with a strange estrangement
what now the lens of human mien
whose troubles sweep swift and unseen
unsuspecting sluggards
has reason died without a will
intestate full, conscience death still
bellyful for buzzards
there is a better way of life
senza...
#politics
#war
#peace #rebellion
#peace #rebellion
14 reads
1 Comment
Chuck
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:38am
Yesterday 4:38am
Was Life Meant to Be
Was life meant to be
In this day and year I stand
Awakened to the morning news
Corruption, murders, and conspiracies
Everything is about currency
What a person has or can buy
Living life
Above your means
This is the American dream
Young teens no longer work
Cellphones and video games
Keep them planted on their behinds
No longer a challenge
To do anything
Technology and machines
Faster production by any means
Businesses and corporations
Seeking new start they lie
Across seas they go
And...
In this day and year I stand
Awakened to the morning news
Corruption, murders, and conspiracies
Everything is about currency
What a person has or can buy
Living life
Above your means
This is the American dream
Young teens no longer work
Cellphones and video games
Keep them planted on their behinds
No longer a challenge
To do anything
Technology and machines
Faster production by any means
Businesses and corporations
Seeking new start they lie
Across seas they go
And...
#corruption
#politics
#greed
10 reads
0 Comments
Periwinkleblue
Kathy A.
Kathy A.
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:37am
Yesterday 2:37am
Love Reigns
Thorns are everywhere
Roses very few,
Lack of choice
Causes despairing
Disparate news.
News is a silent
Dirth of ugliness,
Lack of choice
Giving flowers voices
On airs pure currents.
Life finds a way
To do it's dancing,
Lack of choice
Flowers bloom today
Without a knowing.
Retribution roams,
No hesitation,
Lack of choice
Should not be norms,
Abolish factions.
Bring to life one faith
Let all men be glad,
Lack of choice
Where love reigns the path,
Let...
Roses very few,
Lack of choice
Causes despairing
Disparate news.
News is a silent
Dirth of ugliness,
Lack of choice
Giving flowers voices
On airs pure currents.
Life finds a way
To do it's dancing,
Lack of choice
Flowers bloom today
Without a knowing.
Retribution roams,
No hesitation,
Lack of choice
Should not be norms,
Abolish factions.
Bring to life one faith
Let all men be glad,
Lack of choice
Where love reigns the path,
Let...
#love
#TimeHeals
#HumanRights
20 reads
0 Comments
BigVirge
Big Virge
Big Virge
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:39am
Yesterday 1:39am
"Purge" ... A Poem written by Big Virge 23/6/2013
Ya Know ... Big Virge Words ...
Are Built To Merge With ... " The Purge " ...
As In ... " The Flick " ...
That TRULY IS ... SICK ... !!!
But Here's The Trick ...
This Flick Has Some TWISTS That May Well PREDICT ....
A Future Where SIN Is A ... " Once A Year Thing " ... !?!
That's Where It BEGINS ...
As Do These Words I've Put Into Verse ...
I YES ...
PURGE The Urge To DENY What Hurts ...
So That I Stay Calmer ...
Rather Than Bring The DRAMA ...
Like These ... " Wannabee' Osamas' "...
Are Built To Merge With ... " The Purge " ...
As In ... " The Flick " ...
That TRULY IS ... SICK ... !!!
But Here's The Trick ...
This Flick Has Some TWISTS That May Well PREDICT ....
A Future Where SIN Is A ... " Once A Year Thing " ... !?!
That's Where It BEGINS ...
As Do These Words I've Put Into Verse ...
I YES ...
PURGE The Urge To DENY What Hurts ...
So That I Stay Calmer ...
Rather Than Bring The DRAMA ...
Like These ... " Wannabee' Osamas' "...
#dark
#evil
#humankind
#apocalypse
#temptation
8 reads
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BigVirge
Big Virge
Big Virge
Poem Published
22nd Feb 2020 11:54pm
22nd Feb 2020 11:54pm
"The Same Ol' Same" ... A Poem written by Big Virge 7/6/2013
I've Landed In Philly But it AIN'T Been ... " Jiggy " ... !!!
The Same Ol' Same Because of ... My RACE ... ?!?
NO Time To Embrace ... A Different Coloured Face ...
UNLESS You've Got CHAINS That Affect How You Behave ... !!!
I See It In People ... Attitudes So FEEBLE ... !!!!!
So MANY THINK They Know The Best Places to go ...
But RARELY Take Time To SEE BEYOND Their Own Kind ... !!!
The IRISH Seem To HOLD THAT SHEEN ...
That Sees Their Breed As Being .... " CLEAN " ....
While DARK Skinned Folks ...
STILL HOLD The...
The Same Ol' Same Because of ... My RACE ... ?!?
NO Time To Embrace ... A Different Coloured Face ...
UNLESS You've Got CHAINS That Affect How You Behave ... !!!
I See It In People ... Attitudes So FEEBLE ... !!!!!
So MANY THINK They Know The Best Places to go ...
But RARELY Take Time To SEE BEYOND Their Own Kind ... !!!
The IRISH Seem To HOLD THAT SHEEN ...
That Sees Their Breed As Being .... " CLEAN " ....
While DARK Skinned Folks ...
STILL HOLD The...
#rejection
#travel
#ignorance
#art
#disappointment
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CosiestPrism273
Poem Published
22nd Feb 2020 8:41pm
22nd Feb 2020 8:41pm
Invisible to the eye
We are pulled from every which way
No chance to ever escape
No matter what words we say
The chains will never break
Fighting an unwinnable battle
Dreams crushed into little pieces
Herded along like cattle
Completely hypnotized
Let's give life to the darkest light
Give your heart to those in need
Give those who can't see sight
Be someone's friend to help them believe
We lose fights while alone
We give up when it seems impossible
The signs won't be shown
Your dreams they weren't plausible...
No chance to ever escape
No matter what words we say
The chains will never break
Fighting an unwinnable battle
Dreams crushed into little pieces
Herded along like cattle
Completely hypnotized
Let's give life to the darkest light
Give your heart to those in need
Give those who can't see sight
Be someone's friend to help them believe
We lose fights while alone
We give up when it seems impossible
The signs won't be shown
Your dreams they weren't plausible...
#kindness
#evil
#ignorance
#escape
#determination
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12 Comments
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