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Academic
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:36pm
Yesterday 10:36pm
Freedom of Speech - clearly as alien a pivotal concept to royalists and their fawning serfs as democracy is!
By Stanley Collymore
Of course Charles Windsor is
alright. After all he's taking
loads of money and also
numerous properties from dead people
through the covetously, ongoing feudal
Bona Vacantia system, while obviously
and essentially literally simultaneously
as an unelected monarch, distinctively
and unquestionably crucially charging
companies to literally rent the seabed
around Britain. Significantly, I do think
it has obviously increasingly naturally
become rather apparent to genuinely ...
Of course Charles Windsor is
alright. After all he's taking
loads of money and also
numerous properties from dead people
through the covetously, ongoing feudal
Bona Vacantia system, while obviously
and essentially literally simultaneously
as an unelected monarch, distinctively
and unquestionably crucially charging
companies to literally rent the seabed
around Britain. Significantly, I do think
it has obviously increasingly naturally
become rather apparent to genuinely ...
#hate
#dark
#denial
#emptiness
#fear
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Jordan
D.O.C.
D.O.C.
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:36pm
Yesterday 10:36pm
Whatshername
Although I wish to keep my name the same,
by any name I still should smell as sweet,
own ancient Helen's peerless face and frame,
and full outfoot Will Shakespeare's fêted feet;
my lines would yet steal Cleo's Marc away,
trick sainted Isabella into bed,
straight titillate Titania in one bray,
raise Romeo's rusted dagger from the dead;
and though I lacked old Willy's bent for puns,
his playful "groaning," "country," "ass," and "whore,"
my perky breasts, like Mistress Overdone's,
by...
#TruthOfLife
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Alviola
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:15am
Yesterday 10:15am
That we be like dogs
She leaps into the car, her tail
electrified, the window rolled
down so she can poke her head out
savor the town's fragrances
a cornucopia of scents, a rush
she cannot know roaming nearby.
What if parents told children to
poke their heads out of car windows
have their feet find asphalt
nearer homes of the unshod, to prowl
past broken doors, to know the clatter
of empty feeding bowls, to hear
not just the screech of classroom chairs
on vinyl floors and the howl of audiences
in ball games and school dances...
electrified, the window rolled
down so she can poke her head out
savor the town's fragrances
a cornucopia of scents, a rush
she cannot know roaming nearby.
What if parents told children to
poke their heads out of car windows
have their feet find asphalt
nearer homes of the unshod, to prowl
past broken doors, to know the clatter
of empty feeding bowls, to hear
not just the screech of classroom chairs
on vinyl floors and the howl of audiences
in ball games and school dances...
#school
#inequality
#poverty #apathy
#poverty #apathy
30 reads
7 Comments
SlutLoverse
Jaxn
Jaxn
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:01am
Yesterday 4:01am
The Gauntlet
Tsun-a-mi's.
Soon a mis 'tis,
coming,
all enveloping truce.
Ship bashing against asleep to slap me from it,
Steel, a sloop still crashes and crinkled,
cut the surface tension,
To fall upon a saturated bed.
She pushes on the swell to leave a waking divide in the dawn.
I take to the bow,
it dips into a wet wall, swipe, and salt washes all that was away,
presents a new plight.
Twilight in the mind field and Hokusai.
Japanese traditional lucid anxiety,
candid astray,
iron cast...a -way there.
The stern...
Soon a mis 'tis,
coming,
all enveloping truce.
Ship bashing against asleep to slap me from it,
Steel, a sloop still crashes and crinkled,
cut the surface tension,
To fall upon a saturated bed.
She pushes on the swell to leave a waking divide in the dawn.
I take to the bow,
it dips into a wet wall, swipe, and salt washes all that was away,
presents a new plight.
Twilight in the mind field and Hokusai.
Japanese traditional lucid anxiety,
candid astray,
iron cast...a -way there.
The stern...
#anxiety
#loneliness
#separation
34 reads
2 Comments
ajay
Poem Published
29th Nov 2023 7:31pm
29th Nov 2023 7:31pm
bastardtechnology!
wheniwrotethispoem
thespacebaronmykeyboard
hadceasedtofunctionexactlyasitshould.
still,
atleastigotapoemoutofit.
🙃
thespacebaronmykeyboard
hadceasedtofunctionexactlyasitshould.
still,
atleastigotapoemoutofit.
🙃
#technology
41 reads
16 Comments
PittinixDesigns
Poem Published
29th Nov 2023 6:59pm
29th Nov 2023 6:59pm
State Terrorism
A young man recently received life sentence for illegal possession of a firearm.
This action by the government of Jamaica is no less than oppression.
Some may disagree with me, but the tyrannical state alone should not be armed.
The stupid police like to brand ghetto youths as criminals and gunmen.
Consider the fact that the biggest criminals are politicians, the members of parliament.
Moreover, every person who uses a gun is a gunman or a “gunwoman.”
If we did not have resistance in our society to stand up for our rights,
The wicked...
This action by the government of Jamaica is no less than oppression.
Some may disagree with me, but the tyrannical state alone should not be armed.
The stupid police like to brand ghetto youths as criminals and gunmen.
Consider the fact that the biggest criminals are politicians, the members of parliament.
Moreover, every person who uses a gun is a gunman or a “gunwoman.”
If we did not have resistance in our society to stand up for our rights,
The wicked...
#corruption
#murder
#oppression
#politics
#HumanRights
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0 Comments
Academic
Poem Published
29th Nov 2023 5:29pm
29th Nov 2023 5:29pm
Only white British serfs and their overseas genocidal kin relish feudal titles!
By Stanley Collymore
The rest of us evidently know the
reality of the world we're in but
these undeniably pathetically
gullible very fawning and brownnosing
cunts rather obviously actually do not
realize that it is undoubtedly the 21st
Century and definitely not the bloody
Middles Ages that we're distinctly in,
and obviously, accounts for why it is
that so many of them even crucially
as essential click bait, for obviously
exploitative and really dubious rags
like the Daily Mail, risibly do accord
to...
The rest of us evidently know the
reality of the world we're in but
these undeniably pathetically
gullible very fawning and brownnosing
cunts rather obviously actually do not
realize that it is undoubtedly the 21st
Century and definitely not the bloody
Middles Ages that we're distinctly in,
and obviously, accounts for why it is
that so many of them even crucially
as essential click bait, for obviously
exploitative and really dubious rags
like the Daily Mail, risibly do accord
to...
#hate
#dark
#despair
#denial
#emptiness
31 reads
1 Comment
Cen
Rakhi Rudra
Rakhi Rudra
Poem Published
29th Nov 2023 1:00pm
29th Nov 2023 1:00pm
Fruits of greenland.
Lamps of the
Green grass
Where
The
Friends with
The green grass walk
On a oculus
Icy and the ovulate
Of green
Beans in
The garlic bread
Where ivy
Is green and pink.
Green grass
Where
The
Friends with
The green grass walk
On a oculus
Icy and the ovulate
Of green
Beans in
The garlic bread
Where ivy
Is green and pink.
#rain
#nature
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0 Comments
drone
Poem Published
29th Nov 2023 12:25pm
29th Nov 2023 12:25pm
Radicalized
When one has
Finally gained
Control
Of one's chaos and Pain
The devastation
Of a loved one
Ripped to bits
Screaming their last breath
As the butchery ends
From the sky's
Your mind
Will become
Silent
As the Echos continue
Into the deep
Unchaining
The monster
Within
Finally gained
Control
Of one's chaos and Pain
The devastation
Of a loved one
Ripped to bits
Screaming their last breath
As the butchery ends
From the sky's
Your mind
Will become
Silent
As the Echos continue
Into the deep
Unchaining
The monster
Within
#honesty
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MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
29th Nov 2023 6:49am
29th Nov 2023 6:49am
Castor Canadensis
Pale beams on frost pale ground;
the rutting moon has come and gone
and then the Beaver moon hung around
to show the whitefish where to spawn
as she trailed the Pleiades
from early evening, through the night,
then down through all the leafless trees
to charm antipodean sight
by gibbose ostentation gloss
hued as gold as the Bifrost locks
of Hyperion and Helios
and the lumen lovely boondocks
of lodges that the beaver built...
with sticks and stones...and moonlit silt.
the rutting moon has come and gone
and then the Beaver moon hung around
to show the whitefish where to spawn
as she trailed the Pleiades
from early evening, through the night,
then down through all the leafless trees
to charm antipodean sight
by gibbose ostentation gloss
hued as gold as the Bifrost locks
of Hyperion and Helios
and the lumen lovely boondocks
of lodges that the beaver built...
with sticks and stones...and moonlit silt.
#countryside
#river
#sky #nature
#sky #nature
63 reads
5 Comments
SweetKittyCat5
Poem Published
29th Nov 2023 5:40am
29th Nov 2023 5:40am
The Moon’s Reprisal
Upon the Creator’s image who belays this planet and rejoices in the demise of his superficial heart
Is a lost man to his own soul begging for redemption in the Sovereign dust to dark
To lay upon the thistles of his deferred dreams
Rich hands, empty offerings of soothing balm in the nature of his being
In the dense of his sanctuary, the intellect kneels for the reprieve of earth
Does not the soul in chaos still strive for rebirth
We struggle in our daily endeavors to find perfection in the evolution of the day
No seconds is...
Is a lost man to his own soul begging for redemption in the Sovereign dust to dark
To lay upon the thistles of his deferred dreams
Rich hands, empty offerings of soothing balm in the nature of his being
In the dense of his sanctuary, the intellect kneels for the reprieve of earth
Does not the soul in chaos still strive for rebirth
We struggle in our daily endeavors to find perfection in the evolution of the day
No seconds is...
#sun
#moon
#spiritual
115 reads
2 Comments
PittinixDesigns
Poem Published
28th Nov 2023 11:23pm
28th Nov 2023 11:23pm
The Books of History
How many Negroes have you captured from Africa and brutally enslaved?
Tell us, how many human beings have you exploited and oppressed?
How many people have you wrongfully accused and convicted in your unjust courts?
Evildoers, how many innocent souls have you sent to the gallows?
How many times have you stolen our gold, silver and diamonds to gain wealth?
Can you recall how many villages you have pillaged and destroyed?
How many lies have you told to persuade voters to elect you political leaders?
Teachers, how many youths have you...
Tell us, how many human beings have you exploited and oppressed?
How many people have you wrongfully accused and convicted in your unjust courts?
Evildoers, how many innocent souls have you sent to the gallows?
How many times have you stolen our gold, silver and diamonds to gain wealth?
Can you recall how many villages you have pillaged and destroyed?
How many lies have you told to persuade voters to elect you political leaders?
Teachers, how many youths have you...
#lies
#murder
#oppression
#politics
#war
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0 Comments
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