Color of Rain

Most of the stats are in, I'm just waiting to confirm one last detail before I make the announcements.
Hopefully, tonight....

Thank you for your patience!

Sorry about the delay Ladies and Gents, here are the finalists:


Viddax…Deep depths
Crimson…Onyx Drops Of Madness
Carpe_Noctem…Raven Desk Why ( The New Moons Reign)
Gahddess_Worship…Rain Dance
LobodeSanPedro…Meat for the Stones
DeanD…Calico Crumble
Shakka…on loving rain

The excellence of the skillful poems in this comp were so impressive that I was truly blown away.  I knew it was going to be a difficult choice to choose a winner.  Therefore, I invited 5 wonderful poets to judge and give their best feedbacks.  ( One judge unfortunately had internet issues due to travels)

I would like to thank the prominent members from Du and a guest judge from offsite who is a wonderful poet and story writer; for their time and in depth critiques.

Mr.Souladareatease            Ms. Rain1courtel (RainC)          Mr. Mjs211 (MikeTheEngineer)  
Honorary guest: Mr. khalil Goddard

Congratulations:

1. Carpe_Noctem
2. Shakka
3. LobodeSanPedro


The Votes:

1 vote, 1 point.. Viddax…Deep depths
1 vote, 2 points.. Crimson…Onyx Drops Of Madness
2 votes, 2 points….LobodeSanPedro…Meat for the Stones
3 votes, 9 points..Carpe_Noctem…Raven Desk Why ( The New Moons Reign)
2 votes, 5 points..Shakka…on loving rain
1 vote, 1 point..Gahddess_Worship…Rain Dance
1 vote, 2 points..DeanD…Calico Crumble


The Critiques:


~~ Carpe_Noctem…Raven Desk Why ( The New Moons Reign
The first thing that attracted me was the structure. Of course I like the title but even if I didn’t I would be obliged to read the poem. No, it was the structure that caught and held my interest. Why? Simple; each line seemed to lead me on to the next seamlessly, they fit together in a way that encourages the reader to go with them, onward through the poem. The content of course had to match my expectations and it did, in fact it exceeded them, especially the third stanza.
           This excerpt: “as  saurodins
           sing somber songs
           praising
           the new moon”
           I could have quoted this entire stanza to be honest, a great write.


I absolutely loved the way the story of this ink unfolded. Descriptively charming! Clever usage of words. Form and delivery was masterful! I'd love to 'reading list' this poem. It was just that good.....


The flow of this Write- is natural and unencumbered.
Each line falling down, just perfect shape of natural rhythm. This aesthetic Write delivers emotion with added wit and fun. The playful way it was approached -grabbed me  -tie in its rhythm -made it Grand!!!

~~ Shakka…on loving rain

This bare bones Write-had the sense of pure innocence.
Absolute awe felt present -tied with the tenderness that one usually finds in the young.
Truths and how they are expressed (what I interpret as  "perfect" expression of emotions”. That's a hard place to reach when expressing-softly.


~~ LobodeSanPedro…Meat for the Stones

I liked this poem because for me the vivid imagery – in having which it was not unique — stands out because the vocabulary enabled me to really ”feel” the images rather than just picture them. Lines like; “The wind plays tag with me and catches its prey,” helped establish those feelings of being present in the poem. All writers aspire to having that effect on a reader and one who can do so repeatedly in a sustained period of output can surely claim the title of “Poet”.

What can I say...Lobo has always been a realist.
This cat can weave and wax like nobody's business -Keep you well grounded at the same time.  This fine Write punches the reader square between the eyes-then sends him out for a walk!!!  This story put me in mind of "The Howling Man" A favourite Twilight Zone episode....Truly this a Thrilling Write!!!

~~ Crimson… Onyx Drops Of Madness

           I must say that the title really did catch my eye here and frankly that would be important if this poem found its way into an anthology, it gives the casual reader a reason to stop and read. So… the content: the first stanza consisting of three lines manages to powerfully set the scene. There is real attraction for me here and I knew that my pleasure at the title would not be betrayed by the content of the poem. The 3 line stanzas were an inspired choice, some stanzas could easily have been combined but that would have risked losing their sharpness. The poet makes an inspired choice. To pick out a favourite is not to lessen the standing of the rest as all are excellent but I loved;
           “paint myself pretty
           with their lovely diverse hues
           no longer a death moth”
           But if you haven’t read this poem you need to in order to appreciate this excerpt.

~~ DeanD…Calico Crumble

The fluidity and design of this ink was fascinating!
Impressive form, with phraseology/diction that was soothing to the eyes. Intriguing pen....


~~ Viddax…Deep depths

There is an intensity to this poem that appealed to me. It manages to resonate in the Deep Depths of the reader without becoming bloated on unnecessary vocabulary. The language is strong and has a professional feel to it throughout and that is in spite of my initial wariness about the title. It has the feel of a poem written for a competition and nothing wrong with that! I mean that each line seems measured and placed like a draughtsman places the lines of his design, carefully interlocking to create a whole. My favourite line has to be: “spider-silk silver ripples in the inky pools” I wish I’d written that myself!


~~ Gahddess_Worship…Rain Dance

What’s not to like about this ink? It’s an all-around wonderfully crafted poem!

“Flesh colored sweat
plummets off eyelash
nose and nipple
futile attempt
to quench coital flames”  <--- Loved!

~~ Dejure…Colorless song of the rain

This poem gets an honourable mention. I didn’t pick it as one of my winners because there are, in my opinion, too many superfluous definite articles that detract from the overall flow. However there are some very good lines here that with editing would tighten up and make this poem a real winner. Clever vocabulary and sharp imagery. Well done.


Honorable mention:

MadameLavender ….Graves Among Lavender
Dejure….Colourless song of the rain



Thank you all for your beautiful and talented ink…Raining…reigning with wonder!

I'm not sure if it's a glitch the order of runners are appearing on top (should be: Shakka in 2nd, LSP 3rd )  but perhaps the Webmiss can address it.  Thank you.

Congratulations Carpe for winning

also congratulations to Shauna and LSP for runner ups :)

Thank you Vee for a unique writing experience. I also appreciate the detailed voting and commentary. Congratulations to the winners!

Congratulations to Carpe_Noctem, may the rain go away but not your fun style. And kudos to everyone else, especially Vee for such an intriguing competition and such enlightening results. A look inside to see how a poem made the host feel is always worth the blood, sweat, tears and oil spent in making a poem (must buy more ink).
Thoroughly enjoyed this from beginning to end.

Congratulations Cape_Noctem a fine poem indeed!
And to everyone else it was a great comp ")
Great Job Vee!

BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO! Carpe_Noctem and shauna!  

Great event Vee, and many thanks to the judges not just for the nod but for the valuable feedback as well.

High fives to all who wrote for this!

Salud

It's in alphabetical order it seems Vee, I had the same issue ")

Every one of these poems were a winner in my book.  
You guys did an outstanding job, each unique and superb in its own way!  Thank you.

Zazzles said:It's in alphabetical order it seems Vee, I had the same issue ")

ah, that explains it..i guess it makes sense.
Thanks Jackie

Congratulations Carpe,
And to Shauna and LSP too
and Thanks vee for having a wonderful comp  

Seems this one got away from me. I am deeply humbled, thankyou Vee and the judges and also all the entrants.

Good to have you back Carpe and you are most welcome.  
Your poem was superb and well deserving.